This is my first fanfic. I want your honest opinion on this. The main character is an OC. This makes your input even more important. My goal is to write a person not a Marry Sue. Constructive criticism is appreciated.(things like "OMG she is so stupid" on the other hand is not) Flames are only tolerated if I really mess up.
Danny will not be seen for a little while. I love him very much but his purpose does not come in till a later. The Titans should come in next chapter. Again I love them and I hope I do them justice.
This story takes place after Danny Phantom ends, but Phantom Planet didn't happen. It will also start at the beginning of Teen Titans.
I do not own Danny Phantom or Teen Titans
It was quiet at Jump City General Hospital. The only sounds in it's halls were the reassuring beeps of the heart monitors, and the clicks of the keyboard that Doctor James Rays was using. Poor Dr. Rays was working late into the night to type up some last minute documents.
With a pause in his typing Dr. Rays rubbed his sore blue eyes. A quick glance at the clock told him it was 1 A.M. . He ran his hand through his sandy blond hair.
"Lynda's gunna kill me." Dr. Rays sighed.
He closed his eyes for a moment to rest them. That's when he heard it. It was the sound of fabric moving against fabric. That soft rubbing that could only be heard in absolute silence. Dr. Rays eye's snapped open.
There on the couch on the far side of his office was a small bundle. It was odd. Not only was it not there before he closed his eyes but the pillows where placed around it as if to fence it in. It seemed to be a blanket wrapped around something. But that wasn't the weirdest thing about it.
It was moving
A steady rise and fall of the bundle was all he could see. Then what ever was wrapped in that blanket shifted.
The blanket fell away to reveal a small head of black hair and the face of a two year old baby.
Slowly and quietly Dr. Rays got up from his seat behind the desk and made his way over to the child. After reaching the small one, he gently placed his hand on it's head and knelt next to it.
"Now how did you get here little one?" He whispered.
After looking it over he noticed a name embroidered on the blanket it was wrapped in. Dalia.
Dr. Rays picked up the little girl. Careful not to wake, her he set out to find the nurses that worked the late night shift.
Later that night he left the hospital with that little baby girl after he couldn't finding any sign of her or a parent in the patient records. He didn't notice the gentle red eyes that watched him go, or the words their owner spoke.
"All is as it should be."
Good or bad? I hope it's ok so far. Now grammar is not my strong suit. I'm also dyslectic. Meaning I have trouble reading and spelling (spell check for the win). Sorry for any misspelled words.
