Guess what!!! Today is the anniversary of the first chapter ever of Sucked in!! Seriously, go check the publish date for the original version. I thought it would be fitting if I started this new story on the same day. And I just finished my first evah….AP exam!!!!! US government you know? We had to write 4 whole essays!!! By hand!!! On these tiny table thingies that you can flip out in the theater…not fun. But now that it's over …more time for !!! YAY!!!!!!!!
Yeah…. Soo….This is my first rewritten chapter! Also, I have decided to condense the first three chapters since… they're really short. I also got a beta reader. Yeah, she's got a little intro paragraph at the end, read it if you want to.
So, a few changes that I'm making. I want to make this fic less crackish. And more realistic, so that means Hikari is going to pretend she knows nothing. I also want to focus a bit more on Hikari's emotions instead of just running through the story. Yeah sure. If you have any problems with that, just tell me. I might change it I most likely will not. If I'm not, just stick to the original and don't read this one.
Oh, and Hikari is slightly older in this one since someone brought up that the age difference between Hikari and Itachi is like seven years and that was practically half Hikari's age. That means Hikari will have to be slightly more mature. She'll probably be around 15, maybe.
And I'm leaving out the Inners since they only appeared in the beginning of the fic and didn't do anything the rest of the time.
For newbies, I shall post a summary here because there isn't enough space outside...
Summary: Girl called Hikari. Ends up in the Naruto world. She is big fan, knows things and stuff. Through 'A series of Unfortunate Events,' she winds up getting kidnapped by none other than the big bad Uchiha Itachi!!!!!! SPOILERS!!!!!!!! Don't like em don't read this. Geez really suck at summaries don't I.
Okay then, I'm just going to copy and paste my disclaimers because and I'm too lazy to come up with new ones. Seriously, who wants to have to write 16 new disclaimers? Okay then, time to get started…
DISCLAIMER: well, I guess I'll make Jiriya do the disclaimer
Jiriya: Why do I have to do this?!?!?!?!?
Hikari: 'Cause I said so. DO IT. looms over, thunder crackles, lightning flashes
Jiriya: okay okay, I'll do it. Hikari does not own Naruto or any of the characters.
……Well, that certainly was one of my shorter disclaimers.
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"Yaaaa!!!! NOOOOO!!!! Kakashi!!!! YOU CAN'T DIE IN THAT WAY!!! DON'T DIE!!!!!!"
A girl was on her bed, screaming into a manga book. She had black hair with red streaks and was wearing a red sweater and jeans.
"Hikari!! Stop screaming! It's just a book!"
An angry shout filtered through the closed door.
"But Mom! Kakashi got buried in a bunch of rubble!!! A great ninja can't die that way!!!! It's too stupid!!!"
"I don't care!! It's 11 o'clock!! Go to bed already!!!"
Hikari swung off of her bed and walked out the door to give her mom a telling off… only to find her mom wasn't outside the door. In fact, her house wasn't outside the door either.
Hikari gasped and looked around. She was in a huge forest with over towering trees. It wasn't even 11 o'clock anymore as there was sunlight streaming through the leaves. She spun back towards the door…..only to find it was gone.
"Oh shit."
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Team 7 was once again waiting for their incredibly late teacher.
"Argh!" moaned Naruto, "When is Kakashi-sensei going to come?!?"
"He's probably going to come whenever he finishes one of those pervy books of his." Sakura looked incredibly bored.
"Nooooo……I'm sooooooo bored…" Naruto groaned and flopped onto the ground.
They were in for a long wait.
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Hikari was panicking. She didn't know where she was, there wasn't any signs of civilization around, she had absolutely nothing to survive on, and-omigoshwasthatwastotallyredcloudsonablackcloakthatcanonlymeanonething, AKATSUKI!!!!
"Well," Hikari thought, "At least there's people here, crazy cosplayers or not."
She crept cautiously towards the place she saw the flutter of cloth and ducked behind a tree.
"Why do we have to do the stinkin' espionage mission? Leader-sama should have gotten some of the newbies to do it."
"Kisame. Shut up."
Silence.
Hikari peeked out from her hiding place and saw the two figures that were cloaked in black walking towards her, well, at least towards her tree. She ducked back behind.
"They're only crazy cosplayers, they're only crazy cosplayers," Hikari chanted in her mind while squeezing her eyes shut and crossing her fingers. Her gut was telling her that these people were not good news.
More silence.
Carefully, cautiously, Hikari opened her eyes and saw red and black.
"Uh oh,"
She looked up into Itachi's eyes and fell victim to his spinning Sharingan.
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Itachi watched impassively as the strange girl collapsed on the ground. Kisame, who was standing next to him, wondered aloud, "What did you do that for? She probably didn't even know who we are. She doesn't look like a ninja…"
"Why do you care? Getting sentimental?" Itachi swept off into the forest.
Kisame looked shocked for a second before stumbling after him, "No, you asshole! I was just curious!"
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"HINATA!!! WHERE ARE YOU!!!! I FOUND THE CAT!!!!!!!" Kiba was shouting for all he was worth. In his arms was a squirming, struggling cat. "Dammit, why do we have to do this mission, isn't it usually Naruto's team that does this?"
"I wouldn't know." Shino adjusted his glasses.
"That was a rhetorical question."
"Ah."
There was an awkward pause before, "HINAAAAAAATAAAAA!!!!!!"
This time there was a response. Hinata came crashing through the bushes and stuttered out, "T-there's a g-girl who's unconscious, we h-have to help h-her!"
"What?"
That too, was a rhetorical question. Hinata turned around and sped off as Kiba and Shino dropped the cat to follow her. Together, the three genin crashed through the bushes to find this mysterious and unconscious girl.
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"Hn?" muttered Hikari blearily. Her head hurt like crap, her vision was blurred, and she didn't remember how she got unconscious. Why the hell was she in a forest? She woke up to see… a puppy? It was licking her face. It looked familiar somehow, like she'd seen it before…hmm…isn't it Akamaru?
Wait a minute, Akamaru?
That means…Hikari looked around in shock to see three concerned faces, faces she could put names to. Hinata, Kiba, Shino. That must mean……she was in the Naruto world. Her eyes widened in shock. The information was a bit too much for her. Hikari passed out again. The three genin exchanged glances before nodding in agreement: they needed to get this girl to Konoha and fast.
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Hikari woke up in a hospital room, one that looked very much like the ones that Naruto was always in. Sunlight was streaming through the window and she could see the expanse of Konohakagure. She put her hands on her head. It still pulsed faintly of a headache.
"Ugh," she moaned. "Guess that means it wasn't a dream." How was she supposed to get back home? How did she get here in the first place? Why did she end up unconscious in the first place?
There was a flash of pain and Hikari clutched at her head. But she remembered something about red clouds on black cloth. From this, any Narutard could figure out that the Akatsuki had something to do with the …incident. Maybe she encountered them in the forest and then they knocked her out or something like that. Whatever. She needed to find out what they were going to do and then try and stop them. Not to mention she needed to keep them from finding out she knew they were up to something.
Another flash of pain. Someone's voice filtered through. "why…espionage…newbies…" That probably meant that someone was watching the village, she didn't know who, but they were probably the ones who knocked her out. She needed to make sure that whoever was watching didn't suspect that she knew anything about the Akatsuki. Only one way to do that.
The door to her room opened and Shizune came in, carrying a tray filled with food.
"Ah!" exclaimed Shizune, "I see you're awake! Would you like something to eat?"
Hikari's stomach grumbled as she realized she was ravenous. "Thanks! I'm starving!"
Shizune chuckled and set the tray on her lap, then sat down beside the bed. On the tray, there was a bowl of soup, several dinner rolls and a few sticks of dango. Hikari's mouth watered.
"Oh man, what do I eat first?"
"Take your time. But meanwhile, care to tell me anything about yourself? We don't know anything about you, you know. It doesn't look like you're from this village and Team 8 found you unconscious outside in the forest."
Hikari dipped a roll into her soup and tore off a piece with her teeth. After she swallowed she said, "What about you? I don't even know your name." She cringed mentally. I hope that was convincing. Never been a particularly good liar.
"Yeah, I guess that was rude of me. My name is Shizune, I work for the Godaime Hokage, and you are in Konohakagure. Your turn."
"Um…well," said Hikari, stalling for time. "Gotta think of a good lie, gotta think of a good lie!!!"
"Um, my name is Atomi Hikari, I think I'm fifteen years old and I don't remember much else." I hope she believed it. They would never believe me if I said that I was from another dimension.
Shizune looked dismayed. "I was hoping you could at least tell us how you got to be unconscious, but if you can't remember…" She stood up to leave.
"No wait! I think I remember something!" Hikari cursed to herself. She wanted to get close to some of the ninjas, hopefully genin- she knew them the best, not to mention she thought it would be really cool to meet her anime heroes. "I think someone was chasing me…"
Shizune sat back down. Her eyes told Hikari that she wanted to know more.
"Umm, I don't remember really well, but," Time to play the I'm-really-scared-card, thought Hikari grimly, "But, it was really scary, and it was dark and loud and and, and…"
Seeing Shizune becoming more concerned, Hikari broke off and started shivering.
Shizune got up and started to comfort her. "It's all right, I'm sure Tsunade-sama, our Hokage, will get someone to protect you."
Hikari looked up with wide eyes. "Really, you think so?" She put as much hope into her voice as possible.
"Yes, I'll go ask her now. Okay, stay here and finish your soup, I'll be back soon." With that, Shizune walked out the door.
As soon as she left, Hikari broke into a wide grin. Maybe my bullshitting skills aren't as bad as I thought. I should be an actor!
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In the Hokage's office, a busty blonde was looking very bored.
Shizune was rambling, "-really scared and maybe she has an abusive family or boyfriend or -are you listening to me?" she suddenly demanded.
Tsunade immediately sat upright and said, "No, I mean, yes I heard everything you said, now-what-was-it-you-wanted-me-to-do?" really fast.
Shizune sighed. "The girl that Team 8 has brought in seems to have lost her memory and was probably chased around by something that caused a loss of memory. Since this girl doesn't seem to have anything special, it was probably an abusive relationship that got out of hand or something. Whatever it was, it really scared her and I told her that we could get some ninja to try and protect her."
"Geez," whined the Hokage, "Why did you promise her something that you couldn't guarantee? Getting someone to protect her means more paperwork for me."
Shizune got very angry. "Does the safety of an amnesic girl mean less to you then doing more of what you're supposed to be doing?"
Tsunade got very uncomfortable. "Well, I didn't say that, but-"
Shizune glared.
"Fine," Tsunade sighed, "I'll get the little brat's team to do it. He's more trouble than he's worth. Maybe taking care of the girl will teach him some responsibility."
Shizune smiled.
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The sun was shining brightly over the heads of team seven. Naruto had finally managed to pick a fight with Sasuke so they were duking it out on the training field while Sakura was cheering Sasuke on.
"Katon: Goukakyuu no jutsu!" Sasuke blew a giant fireball in Naruto's direction.
"GAH!!" shouted Naruto as he dodged. "Sasuke, you bastard, that could have fried me!!"
The commotion made sure that Kakashi's entrance was unnoticed.
"You guys have a mission," he drawled.
At the sound of a mission, Naruto snapped to attention and practically rushed his teacher. "Are we escorting the Daimyo through dangerous territory?!?!?!? Are we protecting a princess from a faraway land?!!? Huh? Huh?"
The answer was short and simple.
"No."
"Awww…"
"Our mission is to guard a 15 year old girl while she regains her memory. Apparently, she lost it after being chased through the woods by someone, she can't remember who. Since this girl has no money, we have to do this for free! Also, we'll all be living together!!" Kakashi's single eye turned all happy as he radiated family togetherness. "Isn't that nice?"
"WHAAAAAAAAT!?!?!" exclaimed both the boys simultaneously, "I HAVE TO LIVE WITH HIM!?!?!" they screamed while pointing at each other
"…"
"STOP COPYING ME!!!"
As the two boys started to fight again, Kakashi said, "Sakura, after those two break it up, tell them to be at the Hokage's office in half an hour." With that, Kakashi poofed out. Sakura sighed. Why do I have to take care of these idiots…
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In the next half an hour, Sakura managed to get the two boys apart and made them promise not to fight, get a change of clothes, and be at the Hokage's office in half an hour. It was quite a battle. However, in half an hour, team seven, minus Kakashi (as usual) was promptly in Tsunade's office.
"Baa-chan, who's this girl we have to protect? Why can't we get a better mission? And most importantly, why do I have to live with him!" complained Naruto while pointing at Sasuke.
Tsunade sighed. "This girl is called Hikari. She's fifteen and she was chased around a dark forest sometime 2 days ago and lost her memory due to some obscure incident. That's all she remembers but from her reaction to the memory, it must have scared her badly. Shizune wanted me to assign a couple ninja to protect her from her unknown assailant because of sentimentality."
Shizune blushed.
"Also, Hikari-san doesn't have any money so you will be doing this for free. Of course I'm sure Kakashi has already addressed you about that."
The three genin looked slightly disgruntled.
"However, during this mission, you can take other missions as well, so long as one of you stays with Hikari-san."
Team 7 looked considerably happier about that.
"Besides, Hikari-san has already volunteered to help with housework and the cooking, so you will have more time for missions. It's just time now for you to meet your client."
With that, the door opened and a girl with black hair with red streaks in it walked in. She was wearing a dirty red sweater and dirty jeans. Her clear brown eyes passed over the three genin. She put out her hand.
"Hello, my name is Hikari, what's yours?"
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Hi, this is dreamkinen. Hikari1994, whom I call hikari-chan to not mix up with Hi-chan, whom I also edited a chapter for(her username is HikariRosalie), asked me to be her beta…er for the rewrite of her story. I decided not to add funny editor's notes(see HikariRosalie's 3rd chapter of her story, random twilight shizz) into the story in case she killed me for it. Hi people!
(She put comments in anyways. I deleted them.)
So yeah, this seemed to be a good enough place to stop as any. It certainly would be less dramatic if she went through the old plot and went straight to the nicknames. And she's wearing her old dirty clothes simply because she can't go meet her bodyguards in a hospital gown. You have probably all noticed that Hikari's character changed quite a bit from the old Hikari. Less crazy and all that. But before all you crazy Hikari fans decide to mob me, she will still be rather silly. She just showed a bit of her darker, calculating, more manipulative side in this first one. I could have just kept on writing, but that would be a really long chapter, so I'll give your eyes a break while the page for the next chapter loads. So yeah. Read and review people!!!! You guys are awesome!!