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Slowly I exhale, experiencing a sharp pain in my chest. Feeling only the faintest form of cold, knowing that I should be freezing and unable to feel my fingertips. I began to take a mental note of my body's condition.
"What happened to me...?"I question aloud as if expecting an answer. Upon hearing nothing but silence.
"Where am I ...?" but no one answers. I'm not entirely sure if I should be thankful, or afraid of that. I crack open one of my dark brown eyes, fighting against the overwhelming sense of 'sleep' and fatigue that fell over me. Another exhale, followed by the small vapour of my warm breath. Something I wished that I could of experienced...Not allowing myself to be distracted any further, I open both my eyes, taking in my surroundings. I couldn't see anything but the faint bits of the moonlight barely illuminating the area around me. I arose to be pulled down by my legs not accepting to follow my orders, but nonetheless I still rose. I stared at the ground in front of me, to what looks like footprints leading away from my body, leading onto a path, one that scared me at sight. Broken and fallen trees decorated the ground and hearing loud crackles, my eyes flickered over to the shimmering of faint glimmers of fire and faint embers dancing around in a destroyed tree. My eyes adjusted to the darkness, no longer feeling fatigue, but fully alerted as my eyes fell onto the vague outline of something...
As if stuffed into a tree to hide evidence, I could make out several -body parts around it . Arms, legs-a head?! I found myself examining its face to find quite the deformed feature of elongated teeth, that made me question myself. I rushed away from the horrid scene,down onto the path that I had found as adrenaline pushed me to move on. A body-was it human...or animal?Who could have taken the time to decapitate it and put its head on a pike ?! I ran my full speed down the trail, ignoring my severe wound, an open wound that ran itself across my chest to the the side of my stomach.
"Maybe I can find help!" I say, relatively calm through the fear I felt. Every second I spent in this place-forest -whatever! Feels like an ETERNITY and like the path will never end!Crushing twigs beneath my feet ,I felt myself slammed into the ground .A heavy person,likely a male, attacks me. Kicking, screaming and trying to fend him off, I see that he's another one of those things, looking for something that I can fend him off with. I saw rocks, sticks or- an icicle... Hardly the prime source for a self-defense weapon, but I don't have any other options. He's tearing into my wounds that I barely had any time to heal when I had been supposedly knocked out, and I know that I will die if I can't do something. Reaching over , I managed to break one after several failed attempts, and plunged it into the side of his head, killing him instantly. Knocking him off, holding my stomach in pain and trying to ignore the blood that I feel seeping out, every step I take, I feel less and less of my pain. The cold is no longer hurting me and I feel a sense of almost 'peace'. Recognizing it as an early onset or warning for someone about to die, I fight to stay awake, but I am weak and fading away. My legs sink beneath my weight, forcing me to crawl, my blood staining the snow. Seeing a statue in my close range, I crawl over to it. Perhaps someone will find me ...even if they're too late -atleast someone will know. Those thoughts went away, as my mind goes blank and I pass out, hearing the faint steps of someone coming my way.
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