This is my first fan fiction, i welcome constructive criticism. please review
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Shearwater Close in Penarth. Just a normal road, with normal houses and normal cars on normal driveways. But in the back garden of number six things were not normal. Just the average family: mum, dad and two kids. But this is far from an average week.
"Look Arthur, can you see it? It's my ring. See all the swirly patterns." Oliver asks pointing towards the trees.
"Yes i see it Olly, it's pretty." Replies Arthur.
In the kitchen the boys mums sit drinking coffee. "Bethan, what's up in the trees? Olly and Arthur seem fascinated."
"Thats Oliver's latest imaginary object. He calls it his ring. He spends all his time down here."
"Oh right, Arthur doesn't have any imaginary friends or objects." Lorraine sits and looks at the boys.
"That's perfectly normal Sally never did, she had so much around she was barely alone long enoughto make up things." Bethan replies, looking at the clock on the wall " Gosh is that the time, Sally will be back from ballet soon."
"I best get going, the boys will be wanting their dinner. Arthur come on time to go."
The bright sunshine and warm breeze bring the perfect day for a picnic. Oliver and his sister Sally settle down on a blanket at the end of the garden near the trees. In such a perfectly peaceful afternoon Bethan decides she'll get her book and join the children. On her way back to the patio doors she hears a strange growl. She rushes and then suddenly stops. Oliver is stood by a tall figure. At first she thinks it's a man, then she sees the face. A distorted face, with prominant teeth. She wants to scream but no sound escapes.
Just then the door bursts open. Bethan feels someone pull her to the side, and four people people run past. "It's okay, we can help, we're Torchwood. I'm Ianto. Is it just the one?"
"N...No i have two children"
"No, the creature, just the one creature? Don't worry about the children they are safe" Ianto reasures her. He feels her relax and he lets her go.
"Yes just the one creature, i dont know how it got here, i just went to pick up my book, two seconds, then i came back and it was there." Bethan explains.
"It's fine, we'll explain, my collegue Toshiko is bringing in your children." Tosh brings the children into the living room. Ianto sits them on the couch and talks to them about their adventure.
Outside Jack and Owen wait for Gwen's signal. Then they sedate and restraine the weevil. Tosh scans the rift crack and explains to Jack "It's only half open, i can close it now."
"Then close it so we can get going." He says making his way towards the house. Gwen and Owen not far behind with the weevil. Tosh closes up the rift and follows. Inside Jack is sat explaining that they are taking the weevil home, because he doesnt belong there. Owen and Gwen have taken the weevil to the SUV. Tosh says goodbye, gathers up the kit and takes it out. Ianto brings through tea and milk with the retcon in. They sit and talk until Bethan, Oliver and Sally fall asleep.
Once again number six Shearwater Close becomes a normal house, with a normal family, in a normal road.