From Author:
Hey people this story is about Oban Star Racers. The main Paring is Akkia and Molly/Eva. Our story starts around episode 26. Ok then let's start. Oh and give me some slack it is my first story.
Part 1
Everything had gone from good to bad to worse in a matter of hours, Eva won the Great Race of Oban, every thing got wipe out when Kanaletto got out of his cage, Seits was gone, Akkia, Jordan, and Molly were going into the temple so molly can become avatar and to top it off Kanaletto was already there waiting for them.
Thump… thump… thump…
"Shhh…"whispered Akkia
"I can't help it this things heavy" indicating to the gun he was carrying
Molly rolled her eyes
They continued on silently until they cam upon a huge chamber. The chamber looked like it was light from bellow the bridge.
Molly stuck her head over the bridge
gasp
Below them has a river of light it was the most beautiful thing she has every seen. There were ten of thousands of different shades of white in the river all dancing around.
Molly didn't even notice the small trembles they came from the bridge, until they were so strong she started to lean forward, not knowing what she was doing .
"Molly!!!"
Just as she was about to fall over two strong arms encircled her waist. Before she could protest she was pulled backwards with such a force that it knocked her off her feet taking down the person holding her.
Whoever it was that had her fell backwards and she landed on top of them. She was just about to yell at them for pulling her and making her fall…
When all of a sudden a blast of the water from below exploded just where molly was standing a few seconds ago.
Molly sat there dumbfounded
"Uh… Molly…"
Still dumbfounded she turned to her savior to see…
Sorry for the short story but I need to know if it was good.
So what you think message me with some ideas I could use them and tell me how to make my story better.
Thanks
HorseGal248