Hello, readers. This is the first chapter of my first story. Please review so I can know what I'm doing wrong/right. I hope not to disappoint :D Credit for the image goes to my friend Nooga on PokEdit.

CHAPTER 1: THE START OF A FRIENDSHIP

Deep within the darkest parts of an uncharted, enormous cave in the Kanto region, there lies a young Zubat. He may not have been the strongest, or the most threatening, but he was quick, above the average for a Zubat his level. He lived with no one except the numerous other Zubat in the cave. His name? Justin.
Justin was known for two things: his red bandanna around his head and pulling pranks.
His pranks were mostly harmless. A supersonic here, a leech life there. Nothing to the point where someone would look too far into revenge, because that would have been foolish. He tried to know who to prank and who not to. For example: An underground lake with Magikarp? That's an OK prank target. But a Machamp trying to train by sumo-wrestling others of his kind? That's NOT an OK prank target.

However, things went wrong when he'd pulled the wrong prank on the wrong Pokemon...

Justin was flying through a brighter portion of the cave, using the power of echolocation to maneuver, when he picked up on a group of Geodude. Feeling his instinct to mess around and gain some levels, he flew in quickly and used Supersonic to confuse the poor boulder Pokémon.
He was successful in his attack. Most of the Geodude there got confused. However, there was something Zubat neglected to notice on his radar. A couple of Graveler and a bad-tempered Golem were there, asleep. Justin's not-thought-out attack led them into a rage. The Golem picked up both Graveler and threw them at Justin.

He'd had about 2.8 seconds to react. He responded in about 2.5 by going into a steep dive and swerving to the left. That was close! I'd better be more careful! Justin thought to himself.
"ROOOAAAR! I WILL HUNT YOU DOWN, You puny maggot! I will destroy you!" the Golem shouted.

The Golem then used rollout to gain enough speed to pursue the Zubat.
Oh, no... Oh Arceas help... Justin thought as he flew for his life. Oh, WHY couldn't I have left those Geodude alone? he thought.

Zubat was flying as fast as he possibly could. It was a matter of life and death, so who could blame him? However, he just wasn't fast enough to escape, and the Golem was slowly closing in.
"Run, run, RUN, I am coming for you!" laughed the Golem in a singsong voice.

Well, Justin thought, guess that's it then. He's closing in and I'm going to die. Never thought that it could happen to me. I was always planning my pranks thoroughly! WHY didn't I do it this time? I am such a fool. Such… a… fool…
"I REGRET NOTHING!" he shouted.

Wow, I couldn't come up with better last words than that? Just... wow!

Justin thought he was done for. Just as he was giving up hope...
That's when he heard the smash from directly behind him.

He turned around and saw...
a Machop had just Dynamic Punched the Golem.
The Machop looked a bit large for his species. He wore a blue bandanna wrapped around his arm.

"...ouch…" Mumbled the Golem, shaking off the confusion effect as he slowly got back out of his rollout stance. "What was that?"
"It was ME, ya' overgrown River pebble!" The Machop said. "Now, ya' got yerself TWO options here. Walk away, right now, and be embarrassed for the rest of your life as the ONLY Golem who ever ran away from a Machop. OR ya' can try to tangle with this cave's one and only blue-wearin', butt-kickin', Golem-slayin' Machop! Now, which is is? Walk away, or get WHOOPED?"
The Golem growled, "Do you even know whom it is you're DEALING with? I'm the most powerfu-"
"Shut yer mouth, gravel-for-brains, and make a choice! I know EXACTLY who you are! You're that temperamental Golem who wouldn't know a threat from a Caterpie if they teamed up and ROUNDHOUSE-KICKED YOUR FACE!"
"ROOOOAAAAR! I will have your head runt!"
"Ya' wan't some Machop? THEN COME GET SOME MACHOP!"

The Golem then used Rage, stampeding straight for the confident Machop. The Machop used Dig to burrow under the Golem, who accidentally stepped in the hole made by the Machop's dig. He tripped, twisted his ankle, and started to roll down a slope, which went directly off a convenient underground cliff. Whoops.
"AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!" roared the Golem, in pure terror, as he spiraled down the cliff.

The Machop stood there, looking rather pleased with himself. Justin was hanging from the ceiling, in absolute awe.
As the Machop began to walk away, Justin snapped out of it and flew after the heroic fighting-type. "Wait! I didn't get to thank you!" he called out to the Machop.
The Machop turned and said "Don't sweat the light work, kid. Just be more careful."
"Light work!? You just saved my life!" Justin said ecstatically.
"Aw, shucks, tweren't nothin'." The Machop said as began walking away again.
"Can I at least get your name? You ARE my hero, after all."
The Machop stopped and sighed. This bat ain't gonna leave my alone, is he? He thought.
"Well, when you put it that way, th' name's Milo. Pleased ta' meet ya'."

Well, what do you think? Tell me how I can improve and how NOT to get worse. Tips and tricks of the trade are appreciated! :D