Hey all. I've decided to use the first chapter for an introduction, otherwise everyone who read the actual fan fiction would be very confused... I'll try to keep this as coherent as possible: For a while I had been toying around with this idea for a fan fiction in my head, occasionally writing very hasty bits and pieces of it. Then, one day, decided to use the main character in my story, Relford, in an online role-play. My partners wanted to know a few things about him, especially his mysterious past and behavior, so I sat down and wrote the two chapters that I posted here. After doing so, I've decided that I really do want to write the rest of it, but I want some feedback first, as the story in its entirety will be quite long and take much time and effort to write. So... I've decided to submit it to the wonderful people here on (that's you guys). Please read my story and review it (oh, please review it; that's why I put it up here). Based YOUR opinion, I'll either trash the whole idea or go all the way with it. All right, now for some background and a few details!
This story I set thirty years after the Fall of the Galactic Empire. The remainder of the broken Empire was thrown into civil war without a Dark Sith Lord to lead them. After nearly five years of galactic war, a faction was finally able to seize complete control: the New Imperial Legion. Under the N.I.L., the shattered pieces of the Old Empire were beginning to be reformed. However, during this time, Grand Master Jedi Luke Skywalker had found all the remaining Jedi he could and re-established the Jedi Order. After training many in the ways of the Jedi, they opened a hidden school for new recruits: the Jedi Academy. The master and students at the Academy, in partnership with the Rebel Alliance, now an even more formidable force led by Prime Chancellor Organa, began to systematically destroy the N.I.L. before it could truly consolidate its power and begin a new cycle of tyranny. But, along with the return of the Jedi came the return of the Sith. Darth Vader's apprentice fled the Old Empire along with the few Sith that still remained and formed a secret empire of their own. The Order of the Sith also has an training academy, but no being except for a Sith knows where that is. And they don't give away their secrets. They are a kingdom unto themselves; their driving purpose is to destroy the Jedi and, eventually, rule the known universe.
Whew... Well, now that that's out of the way, I can begin Relford's story! A sixteen-year-old student at the Jedi Academy (during its first year), he is tall and athletic with shoulder-length messy brown hair and amber-brown eyes. His proffered outfit is simple: a black cloak, gray long sleeved tunic, and black pants with black leather boots. Cariss is also a sixteen-year-old student at the Academy. She's slightly shorter than Relford, beautiful with long brown hair and green eyes (side note: she wields a single green lightsaber) and her preferred outfit simply a tan long sleeved tunic with brown pants and brown leather boots. All right, I know that those were absolutely explicativey descriptions, but without the rest of the story fully in tact and re-written, it's that best I can do. The rest that I did write is pretty self-explanatory.
I should probably finish this before I start to ramble. I rated the story "T" because it has quite a bit of violence, blood, and "adult type themes" (that's the best way that I know how to describe them). As you read and review (if you are kind enough), keep in mind that this part is set near the very end of the story and there is MUCH more to it. Well, I'm done just filling up kilobytes now. Enjoy the story!