Okay, i'm sure MANY of you will hate me for trying to make a good version of My Immortal, but give it a try, this one has almost no grammar issues, no Mary Sue Ebony, and it's not OOC, if no one likes it then i'll just remove this fanfic

Disclaimer: I don't own Harry Potter, thank god i don't own My Immortal, and i don't own Ebony but i do own her new personality here


In Slytherin's Common Room there was a girl that was sitting in her bed holding her diary

She had black hair tyed into a spiky ponytail

She was wearing Slytherin's normal uniform

"Dear diary," She wrote

"My name is Ebony Dementia Raven" She wrote (AN: i removed the Dark'ness and Way because they seemed pointless to me)

"Though some students call me 'Enoby' instead" She wrote

"I have pale skin with blue eyes" She wrote

"I'm 17 years old and i'm in Hogwarts 7th year, i'm in Slytherin" She wrote

"And... well, um, i am a witch/vampire hybrid since i have the look of a normal witch but i have to feed myself of unicorn blood since without it i can't live" She wrote

"Even though i'm from Slytherin i hang out with one of my 2 best friends, Hermione Granger" She wrote

"She's from Gryffindor and one of the most smart students in school" She wrote

"And well, it's 5:00 AM, and soon i'll have to go to class, so, bye diary" She wrote and then she closed her diary

3 hours later

"Ebony?, Ebony!" A girl said

"What...?" Ebony said sleepy

"We're late for class!" The girl said

That was Willow, Ebony's best friend

"WHAT!?" Ebony said as she got up from bed as fast as she could

She got dressed quickly and then she grabbed her wand and they both ran to class


This was short i know, no this is not a troll-fic, i'm just trying to make My Immortal a good fanfic, that's almost impossible but at least i'm trying!, good? bad? let me know in the reviews!