Hi, thanks for looking at my story! It's my first try at a Hetalia fanfic, or for writing at all...besides essays and such at school...so constructive criticism is appreciated!
I felt really fancy when writing this, but it'll probably melt into a more relaxed/funny style as it goes on.
Cold. It was the first thing you felt. You peeled open your eyes, and looked around. There were mounds of white powder- the word "snow" came to mind. You slowly lifted your stiff body up, shivering and looking around. You had no clue where you were, or, for that matter, who you were.
A voice called out.
You looked around, seeing nothing but the sky and snow. You rubbed your small hands together, wondering what the strange words meant. You hadn't learned language yet, you only thought in pictures and feelings.
It spoke again, this time, you could tell where it came from. You started looking around at the ground, having to use your fingers to block out some of the blinding white. You could see what looked like a faint blue colour glowing in the ground near you.
You waded through the white sludge, and started digging around. Something flew out.
Describing it would be like trying to describe colours to a person born blind - you just can't know what it's like until you experience it yourself. But I'll try anyway.
The thing was about your size, maybe two or three feet tall, and slender. It had a sort of feminine shape, but walked on four legs and had a long, thin tail. Some sort of feathery, frozen crest grew from the back of its head, and arched over to the front, almost like an angler fish - but much prettier. It was mostly dark blue with a soft, snow-like texture. A few gems that reached like roots across its body pulsed between dark blue and white.
You reached out to touch it, and it winced at first, but let you, though it seemed rather annoyed. It was velvet-like, and soft and slightly warm, a nice contrast to the rest of what you'd been exposed too. You shivered again, looking at the blue tips of your fingers.
It sighed loudly, causing you to look back up. It started to walk away, beckoning for you to follow. You did, though waddling through the snow on your chubby legs took a lot more effort than you'd hoped. You watched enviously as the creature effortlessly walked on top of the snow, not even leaving footprints.
Soon you could see something dark on the horizon, which was nice to look at, like the creature, since everything else was eye burningly bright. As it got closer, you could tell it was some sort of structure. Not man-made, to be clear, it looked as if a large tree, or maybe several, had somehow grown together to create a sort of shelter.
You followed as it stepped into the tree building. It turned around, and looked at you.
Soon the cold was replaced by a lovely warm feeling.
And everything went black.
The next time you woke up, it was no longer cold. Everything was painted in a bright array of colours. Blades of tall, thin green rose from the ground, maybe a foot or so, which was nearly up to your chest. It was very bright, but in a pleasant, peaceful way. Little shapes flew between each tree, and you could hear what sounded like chirping in the distance.
You looked around for it, the creature that had led you here. It was standing behind you, watching, almost seeming amused at your awed expression. It had changed colours, too - instead of the icy, dark blue it matched the lovely spring colours. Purples, pinks and pastels glowed in its crystals. The rest of it was a vivid green with little pieces flaking off, like leaves.
It spoke something. "I will teach you." In a gentle, motherly tone. Somehow, though you didn't know language, you still understood what it was saying.
Teach me what? You wondered.
It replied simply, "All you will need."
I hope you enjoyed, and continue reading! I'm not sure if I like this enough to continue, but hopefully I will.
