The "Soft Spot"
This is a Misgiving Writer Warrior Challenge Forum Challenge. It is for Death as a kit. It is written in the main character's point of view, so enjoy! Read and Review Nya! ~
It was leaf-bare, and I was freezing cold, standing there, waiting for my mother and father, who would never come back. "Stormkit?" someone asked me. I angled my head at the cat who called for me, but I wouldn't look at her. She took notice that I moved to look at her, so she continued. "Stormkit, you and your sister are going to be mine okay?" At that word mine, my tail shot up in surprise and I looked at her.
"What do you mean, mine?" I whispered in a small voice. "Your never going to replace my parents when their still alive somewhere!" I wailed in distress. I ran into the nursery where my sister stood there tears beginning to form in her eyes. "I-is it true Flowerkit?" I said. "Tell me it's not true!"
Flowerkit just stood there, tears flowing like streams done her cheeks. "I-I'm sorry Stormkit. I wish I could believe that, but….." she started sobbing hysterically when Morningheart came over and wrapped her tail around us.
"It'll be okay…" she soothed. I wish that I had Morningheart instead of Frostcloud. I mean, her name doesn't make sense to me!
I shoved her tail off even if I liked it there and stormed up to our leader, Risingstar. "Risingstar! Get your body right over here!" I shouted to his face. He looked very surprised at my outburst. "You killer! You let my mother and father die! You knew they were, and you let them fall to their deaths!" I shouted. Soon, everyone was looking at me. I knew I couldn't stop. "Who knows what you are going to do next? You might as well kill me and my sister!"
Everyone stared at me with odd faces. Soon Risingstar began to laugh. "Little one, I have found your warrior name now." Soon all cats began to pester him, what my name would be. "He has shown courage to tell me this, and is very bold. I can tell he will be just like his father. His name will be Stormclaw."
I was proud of my name which was my father's name. He was Blackclaw. My sisters' name will probably be named after our mother, Fernsong. But then, I remembered why I was here. I gave him on last loathing look, and raced out the camp. I could only hear Morningheart shout out, "Be careful little one! Come back safely. Do not go there at all!" but I didn't stop to listen. That, was my biggest mistake of my life.
I ran through our territory, to get to the woodland part. That was the border of ThunderClan, so I could race up the trees and curl up on my favorite branch to think. I had to cross over a stream, but with the big leaps I could make, I passed it easy. Until today. As I leaped over the stream, my feet landed on the spot no one should ever land on. The soft spot. I landed on the soft spot, and fell. It was called the soft spot because it couldn't support much weight and was very moist and soily. As I fell down, I whispered good-bye to my sister, wishing her good luck in her clan, saying sorry to her, because she was the only one left. I said a sorry to Frostcloud for being so ridiculous, and to Morningheart who gave me the advice that costed me my life.
As I closed my eyes, while tumbling down into the water, I could see a path made of stars, welcoming me to an unknown place. I ran down, and I saw my parents waiting for me, but so sad. I had finally found a place where I belonged.
How was it nya?~ Review please! Give me some feedback. Was it good? Bad? Where can I change it?