Hi, there, I'm just new here in fanfiction, I've been in Canada for almost
2 years, so I'm not really good at grammar, and like expressions and stuff,
so this is the way I can practise my English writing! So please review and
tell me how is it!
Italic= Kenshin's thought and Kaoru, and others "...." Speaking ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*
Chapter 1
"Give me the stuff you stole!" A man shouted, he was sitting in his so called, "throne", but it was just an old chair, with arms on it. He was looking at the other man with his golden eyes, well, amber eyes. (a/n: is amber the right colour of kenshin's eyes when he turns battousai??? )
"Here you go, Battousai" the man said, handing Battousai the bag, it was full, Battousai grab it and stood-up from his "throne" and walk away, his katana hanging by his side, his red hair up in his hair.
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"Daddy, I... don't want to go to the festival" little Kaoru said, she was mad because she don't want to where a kimono, but as you know, his father wont let her wish to be granted, "Honey, you're the main maiden in there, you have to go, its tonight, so you have to look pretty" he said softly, he stare on Kaoru's sapphire eyes. ( a/n: sapphire is Kaoru's eyes, right? ) She also stared on his father's eyes, "ok.... But can I wear other dress?" she said, more like pleading his father, "no sweetie, you have to wear your kimono, and go to your now, your maid will be waiting there"
Kaoru left his father's room, his father is the captain of their village, Kaoru is 15 years old, but his father treat her like a 5 year-old girl, I'm an adventurer, not a maiden for a festival!, she thought angrily, she open her bed room door, and saw 5 maid, they started cleaning her, and arranging her, they put making at her face, stupid make-ups!, she thought. And then the moment that everyone's waiting for Kaoru to go out to the festival, she was in a huge door, she was so scared, because when she was a little girl, her mother use to stand in the place where she is now, and her mother will go out, and dance with his father, and other man, and she will represent their god. Stupid life!,she thought again. And then the huge door was starting to open, Kaoru's heart was so loud ,you can hear it, she heard people clapping at her, and when the huge door is finally open, the villagers are stunned by her beauty.
She walk down the stairs, her father was waiting for her, she out-stretched her arms, her father took it, and they greeted the villagers. ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*
When Battousai was wondering around, he saw lights, and he can hear people cheering, time to get busy,he thought and uses his god-like speed.
When he got near the celebration, he saw a lot of the villagers wearing there most precious jewellery, he slightly smiled, this is too, easy, no soldiers guarding them!, he thought, when he was about to run, he saw Kaoru sitting at the edge of the celebration, perfect.
He dash forward, snatching the villagers jewellery, no body notice him, except for Kaoru, weird, I thought I saw shadows.
She stood up from her chair, her light blue kimono was so tight she can't hardly breath, she walked pass through the crowd, squeezing her thin body to the crowd, she stopped, a boy, his so fast!, she saw Battousai, when Battousai was going to pass again, Kaoru took the nearest wood she could see and slam is it to his head , Battousai feel the pain on his head, but ran-off, not using his god-like speed.
Kaoru was surprised that he didn't get dizzy, when he do that to his brother, Sanosuke, he got dizzy, but not this one, she followed him as fast as she could, her dad was her tutor for bokkens, and her brother.
She pull and push the bushes out of her way, nobody notice her walk away from the celebration.
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"That stupid girl!" he whispered angrily, his now in a tree branch, he put his hands on his head, and look at his hands, it wasn't bleeding, Battousai sigh in relief, but he heard branches snapping, he look down, and saw Kaoru, that girl......she is the one who bang my head, and she's the girl that Hiko told me about, the chosen one.......
Kaoru didn't know that he was watching her from a tree, but she got the feelings that she's being watched, someone's watching me, I have to get ready. She closed her eyes, trying to hear any sound of attack, nothing, she could just hear, birds singing, but then she heard a twig snap, she open her eyes and swing her bokken, well wood, but didn't heard a loud cry of pain, she open her eyes, and saw Battousai holding her bokken, battousai!
"Hi, little missy......"
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Hi, I know it was short! But that's I think a cliff hanger, I don't know where I learn that, but yeah, please review! REVIEW
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Italic= Kenshin's thought and Kaoru, and others "...." Speaking ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*
Chapter 1
"Give me the stuff you stole!" A man shouted, he was sitting in his so called, "throne", but it was just an old chair, with arms on it. He was looking at the other man with his golden eyes, well, amber eyes. (a/n: is amber the right colour of kenshin's eyes when he turns battousai??? )
"Here you go, Battousai" the man said, handing Battousai the bag, it was full, Battousai grab it and stood-up from his "throne" and walk away, his katana hanging by his side, his red hair up in his hair.
~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~
"Daddy, I... don't want to go to the festival" little Kaoru said, she was mad because she don't want to where a kimono, but as you know, his father wont let her wish to be granted, "Honey, you're the main maiden in there, you have to go, its tonight, so you have to look pretty" he said softly, he stare on Kaoru's sapphire eyes. ( a/n: sapphire is Kaoru's eyes, right? ) She also stared on his father's eyes, "ok.... But can I wear other dress?" she said, more like pleading his father, "no sweetie, you have to wear your kimono, and go to your now, your maid will be waiting there"
Kaoru left his father's room, his father is the captain of their village, Kaoru is 15 years old, but his father treat her like a 5 year-old girl, I'm an adventurer, not a maiden for a festival!, she thought angrily, she open her bed room door, and saw 5 maid, they started cleaning her, and arranging her, they put making at her face, stupid make-ups!, she thought. And then the moment that everyone's waiting for Kaoru to go out to the festival, she was in a huge door, she was so scared, because when she was a little girl, her mother use to stand in the place where she is now, and her mother will go out, and dance with his father, and other man, and she will represent their god. Stupid life!,she thought again. And then the huge door was starting to open, Kaoru's heart was so loud ,you can hear it, she heard people clapping at her, and when the huge door is finally open, the villagers are stunned by her beauty.
She walk down the stairs, her father was waiting for her, she out-stretched her arms, her father took it, and they greeted the villagers. ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*
When Battousai was wondering around, he saw lights, and he can hear people cheering, time to get busy,he thought and uses his god-like speed.
When he got near the celebration, he saw a lot of the villagers wearing there most precious jewellery, he slightly smiled, this is too, easy, no soldiers guarding them!, he thought, when he was about to run, he saw Kaoru sitting at the edge of the celebration, perfect.
He dash forward, snatching the villagers jewellery, no body notice him, except for Kaoru, weird, I thought I saw shadows.
She stood up from her chair, her light blue kimono was so tight she can't hardly breath, she walked pass through the crowd, squeezing her thin body to the crowd, she stopped, a boy, his so fast!, she saw Battousai, when Battousai was going to pass again, Kaoru took the nearest wood she could see and slam is it to his head , Battousai feel the pain on his head, but ran-off, not using his god-like speed.
Kaoru was surprised that he didn't get dizzy, when he do that to his brother, Sanosuke, he got dizzy, but not this one, she followed him as fast as she could, her dad was her tutor for bokkens, and her brother.
She pull and push the bushes out of her way, nobody notice her walk away from the celebration.
~*~*~*~*~*~~*~*~*~*~~*~*~*~
"That stupid girl!" he whispered angrily, his now in a tree branch, he put his hands on his head, and look at his hands, it wasn't bleeding, Battousai sigh in relief, but he heard branches snapping, he look down, and saw Kaoru, that girl......she is the one who bang my head, and she's the girl that Hiko told me about, the chosen one.......
Kaoru didn't know that he was watching her from a tree, but she got the feelings that she's being watched, someone's watching me, I have to get ready. She closed her eyes, trying to hear any sound of attack, nothing, she could just hear, birds singing, but then she heard a twig snap, she open her eyes and swing her bokken, well wood, but didn't heard a loud cry of pain, she open her eyes, and saw Battousai holding her bokken, battousai!
"Hi, little missy......"
~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~
Hi, I know it was short! But that's I think a cliff hanger, I don't know where I learn that, but yeah, please review! REVIEW
REVIEW
REVIEW