Here's another quick update regarding the first chapter of my Charisk series. And yeah it's still bad, it's taken me this long to actually look back through y'alls comments about how to improve. And I am seeing that I'm still telling them showing. That will be fixed in the future chapters. It's just in not use to making these types of things but I really want to cause I love writing. I'm just use to script writing then normal writing. Cause for me anyway in script writing I have to tell what is happening directly so I can animate each scene. In writing however I have to show what's happening instead of telling. So I hope you keep that in mind while reading my stuff. Thank you for understanding.