Ok so this is my first fanfiction, like, ever, and I'm still pretty new to all this, so reviews and constructive criticism are greatly appreciated. Just, please don't flame me or anything like that. I tend to get discouraged very easily. Plus I'm already pretty shy, so yea.
"Almost there. Just a little more, Francis." Alfred panted, his sweat slicked body moving in sync with his partners. "Oui. S-same... here." They were so close, just a little bit more and- "Baise, I'm gonna-" Francis's hair suddenly fell into his face, blinding him. With the loss of sight, he slipped, landing face first in a mud puddle. "AHHHHH! SHITFUCKHOLYGOODLORDJESUSSAVEUSALL!" Alfred suddenly screamed at the top of his lungs, causing everyone at the construction site to look in their direction.
OoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoO~Later at the hospital~OoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoO
Francis stood at Alfred's hospital bed, holding a big tub of ice cream. "Um, Alfred... Are you alright?" Oh my god that's the stupidest question ever, of course not! He mentally cursed himself. Alfred looked at him, well really he glared at the Frenchmen. "Well let me see, Francis. The only thing wrong is that you fell over and basically dropped a two hundred pound steal beam on my foot, and now I'm in the hospital and out of work for at least a month so yea, everything's just fine. Nothing to worry about here!" He yelled sarcastically. "And on top of all that-" he was cut off by a huge tub of ice cream being shoved in his face.
"I'm sorry, Alfred! I was sweaty and my hair fell in my face and I couldn't see and I slipped and in case you didn't notice, I broke my nose! I'm sorry, alright!?" The two loopholes at each other for a moment before busting up laughing. Francis sat down and they ate the ice cream together and forgave each other. "But you know that I still really hate you right now, right?" Alfred asked. Francis looked down. "Oui." He replied. "Good. Because the hero will get you back for this as soon as I get out of here." He smiled and Francis looked terrified. Oh mon Dieu aidez-moi. He silently prayed.
Translations
Baise: Fuck
Oui: Yes
Oh mon Dieu aidez-moi: Oh dear God help me
So sorry it's so late. My family just moved to Tulsa so I haven't had much free time lately. Well, tell me what you think and if I should keep writing. Remember, I am new to writing -well, more like new to writing things that I actually post- so try not to flame me to hard. And this is my first one so yea. Review and tell me if I should keep writing, thanks!