Hello Everybody! I am going to rewrite some parts of CP's books to let Eragon shine. I love Chris, but he never lets Eragon get his hands to dirty, and it bugs me. So every once and awhile, I will post a chapter that is rewritten whole chapter, or part of a chapter. starting with Eragon's escape from Gil'ead (Sp?) to make him fight a little more.
Eragon woke up with a start. He suddenly felt energetic despite his hunger. He reached for his Magic and found he could reach it.
The drug must have worn off! With a smile, he walked up to the door and, instead of blasting the lock or door, simply raised the tumbler. He peaked out from the steel door. Then he thought better of it.
I could wait for the guards to pass by and then I can move. Best to catch them by surprise or go completely unnoticed at all. At least until they find out I'm gone. Eragon smiled inwardly, sat back, while keeping a close eye on the window of his cell door.
Eragon heard the sound of boots on stone so he got up and neared the door. He peaked out the window and saw them passing. As soon as the last one past he opened the door quietly, silently sneaked up to the last guard, and promptly snapped his neck and took his sword as fast as he could.
The guards whipped around and the assumed captain yelled "Charge!"
With words of power on his lips, he killed the first one with magic, while the third and fourth one felled by his blade. The fifth and last one charged.
An arrow breezed past Eragon and killed one of the soldiers while Eragon hit the other with pommel of the sword. Eragon looked quickly behind him towards a bearded man with a crutch on the ground obviously not need for he was standing strait up without trouble.
Eragon yelled "Wait! Don't kill the last one." The man nodded and lowered his bow and walked toward Eragon.
Eragon looked down towards the soldier who was coughing up blood.
"Where is my sword, the blade along with the sheath is red, and where is the elf?" Eragon said. The soldier shut his lips defiantly.
Eragon sighed. "Do you know what happens when you combine super heated sand with You?" The soldier shook his head. "twenty years of pure agony as the sand slowly slips through your body to the soles of your feet." The soldier had pure terror in his eyes but still kept his lips shut.
Eragon shook his head while he reach down to scoop some stones of the ground.
He inspected it uninterestedly. "Not as fine as sand and will go through quicker, But it will still leave a big hole.
To prove his point he heated the stones cherry red.
The soldier's eyes went really wind and then he burst out sobbing. "I don't know where your sword is but I think it is in the armory. As for the elf" He paused "I-I think she's in the last cell on the left but the door is locked. Just please, don't kill me!"
Eragon smiled and whispered "Syltha"
"Did you Kill him?" The Man Eragon Identified as Murtagh said.
"Murtagh?" Eragon said "What's going on?"
"There isn't any time to explain. By the way very nice fighting back there" Eragon smirked at the comment. "but we need to go. Did you kill him?"
Que rest of the chapter.
Well that is it for now. what you think? *Cue big puppy eyes* I. WANT. REVIEWS! that is all