This began as a creative writing prompt in one of my English classes. It takes the poem of Jack and Jill, and it is in the perspectives of Jack, Jill, and their mother, Dame Dob.
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Jack,
Jill, and Dame Dob in the Story of Fetching Water.
Jack.
Jill and I had reached to top of the hill, and we quickly filled a pail with
water from the well. Neither of us enjoyed the errand for Maman, but she would
punish us if we didn't do as we were told. As we turned to go back down the
hill, I tripped on a rock. It set me tumbling down the hill, my sister not far
behind. I couldn't stop, couldn't slow down as I rolled over and over, cracking
my head on another rock at the base of the hill.
Tears sprang to my eyes, but I could not, should not, would not cry in front of
Jill. Strong boys don't cry. Ever. Even when my body aches from the tumbling,
and my head is spinning; my brains feel like scrambled eggs. There is blood on
my clothes, blood dripping off my face. Jill looks ready to puke. She's soaking
wet from the pail, which is now completely empty.
"Jill, Jill, go fetch another pail of water," I told her. "I'm going to find
Maman to stop this bleeding." I will not cry. I will not cry. I will not
cry! The mantra pounded in my throbbing head, vision blurred as I stumbled
towards the cottage. Jill stared after me anxiously before complying, and
running back up the cruel hill for more water.
Jill.
I reached the hilltop once more, shivering slightly in the breeze. My clothing
was soaked, and I'm sure I got a bruise on my bottom from that fall. At least I
wasn't bleeding like Jack. He's so brave. I could see he wanted to cry. He must
be in a terrible lot of pain.
Quickly, I refilled the pail with water, and carefully, if hurriedly, made my
way back down the hill. I would not trip over anything, and get soaked again.
Poor Jack. I hope he is all right. I'm sure Maman will fix him up just like
new.
I stepped into the kitchen of the cottage, placing the pail by the door, and
then went over to the fire where I stripped my clothes off. I could hear Maman
in the other room fussing over Jack, and smirked. If I could just get changed
before Maman finds me and the wet clothes, then I will be able to play some
more later. Quickly grabbing my wet clothes, I snuck up the stairs and into my
bedroom. I moved a chair near the corner of the room where I got some heat out
of the kitchen chimney. I slipped into another dress and stockings, put on my
other shoes, and went downstairs again.
Dame Dob.
I had just finished cleaning up my young Jack from his tumble with vinegar and
brown paper when his little sister came stomping down the stairs. Her hair was
still wet, but she'd changed into dry clothing—the girl hates it when I make
her stay inside.
She took one look at her brother, and started laughing. Now, I wasn't going to
have none of this. It's not kind to laugh at him in his situation. "Don't you
laugh at him little Dame," I scolded her. "It could just as easily been you. I
see you got wet, still."
She looked at me wide eyed, innocent-like. I refused to let it work. I took
that ripe wench into the kitchen and gave her a good whippin' for her
insolence. This of course set her into tears and she slunk into her room to
sulk.
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A/N: More will come later! It started off short, but I see advancements, surely!
