UPDATE: Okay so I'm thoroughly pissed off now. I just posted chapter 2, and it hasn't shown up on the site. it has been more than 4 hours - it did not appear - and no one is viewing it. I'm sorry about deleting in in utter raving madness, but I'm going to wait an undisclosed amount of time before I repost chapter 2.
Please, be patient. I will be continuing this story just not until a couple of weeks at the least.
(Okay, this will be my main hub for all my reviews. Mostly they'll contain reviews, which I cited as important to the flow of the story. Thanks to Guest 1 (i suggest giving yourself a name because someone else will use guest in the future), the first chapter (second chapter including the prologue) is now back up. I see that Moon of my Heart's problem was the understanding of the characterization or some other unknown problem she had reading. Hey, she might have read to fast even. And yes, I was going to take the plunge and give Naruto a different team. You'll see very soon.)
Thank you to Ryuujin96, Noivier, Ejammer, Guest, Moon of my Heart, Good (Guest 2), and Tygercore in no order of particular.
Hey everybody.
This will be next updated when I decide to cite a review (any review I see that I need to cite information from in this story I will. One person doesn't matter to me if they get mad and quit reading because I called them out.)
Okay, to my biggest concern; Moon of my Heart, your 2nd review is the only one that concerns me.
You said:
'This chap is little confusing. I don't know why but still. So little change will be needed'
One possible problem you could be having in is that quite possibly any one of you didn't understand or read the first paragraph in the Prologue. I suggest everyone that's been having trouble reading it rereads that if you have trouble. I know it sounded big and literary; but it explains a lot about Naruto's character. After the extremely figurative part, I decided to tone it down a bit when it was necessary.
Another possible problem that is related to the first is that you may not understand why Naruto is the way he is.
He's been kicked out of every social situation and group of people in his life; every store, and every place to eat; and he's had no friends or life for a longer time than he really needed. Intend to do a lot of this, so I will redo this part in Chapter 1 (second chapter down the list). Also, Naruto hates everybody but Iruka, Teuchi, Ayame, Hinata, and Hiruzen (Sandaime Hokage).
So, there are probably other problems, and I'm not denying their existence at all, but I will see them all eventually. I suggest everyone reads again to understand the flow, the characterization, and the figurative speech I use.