Hi this is my first attempt so here is just a small part of a story I'm hoping to write please give me feed back if you want me to continue

The sun rose with agonising slowness, as if it was afraid to start the new day, but it was inevitable the sun must rise and fall. Welcoming a new day and turning

its back on the day just past. Unbeknown to anyone a young man sat on a dew covered hill. Raising his glistening tear filled eyes to the heavens. He spoke "I

must do this I have to, for my sister I must, for my brothers I must and more importantly for you Anita, I have to do this for you, I love you too much to see you

suffer because of me, because of my impertinence and reluctance I have cursed you, so with my life I will save you" with this said he pulled out a gem incrusted

dagger, that he had hidden within his clothing and with one last deep breath he plunged the dagger into his stomach with every ounce of strength that god had

gave him. No sooner had he done this that a young virtues' maid was dragged to the top of the hill. When her eyes meet the dying boy her screams and attempts

for freedom halted, she was frozen to the spot and tears streamed down her face. The boy's eyes looked into the eyes of the one person that he wished to save.

Knowing now that what was about to happen was his fault because of his actions he had allowed the next events to happen. All he wanted was to leave and to

die now so he would not have to watch but fate played a cruel joke and kept he alive long enough to see and hear her screams of pain and anguish.