Be gentle with my heart as you read this and criticize it please :)


Crossing the River

He sits on the bank, he gazes out
Across a vast expanse of glittering silver
That sparkles under golden sunlight
And blinds when he
Stares

Blackened, dead grass spreads beneath his weight
His demon smirks and chuckles as he sits
Wondering what is on the other
Side

Standing, his demon smirks and hisses poisonous words
Its horrible laughter echoes all around
As the heavy chains rattle
And remind him that he is
Trapped

Straining his eyes, he can see that
On the other side
The grass is
Green

There are
Flowers

There is
Life

And a boy
Beckons with an open
Hand

He turns away
And drags heavy feet

Behind him, the glimmering water
Seems to
Cry

No…

Not the water,
The boy
Calling out
Begging with lovely
Amethyst eyes

So
With hands that shake
And tremble
And my demon shrieking in protest

I bend

I unclasp my shackles

I wade into the water

I cross the river

And leave my demon
To drown
Behind me


This poem, amateurish though it may be-what can I say, I'm a novice poet-is basically Ryou crossing the metaphorical river that seperates him from Yuugi and their potential friendship and finally leaving Bakura to drown behind him. There you go, now you understand if you didn't already.

So...Review please?