Chpater oen prouloge

I absolutely can't wait to read this *eye roll*

The cats gathered around a pool. They all looked into it eagerly. A dark shape appeared on the surface. A blue she cat looked up. Her eyes were bright.

So far, so good.

"There is a prophecy!" She said. "out of the darkness, stars will come and get rid of the evil tiger and holly."

Do they mean Tigerclaw and Hollyleaf? Hollyleaf is on my Top 10 Warriors list. I take offense to this.

"Its about StarKit!" A white tom said. "Shes going to save the forest," He looked at a gold tom by BlueStar. "she has powers nobody dreamed of." Said the gold tom. "Should we tell JayFeather?" He asked. "Yes." Said BlueStar. "he needs to know."

Mary Sue alert. Also is the White tom Whitestorm, and the gold tom Lionheart?

She walked away from the pool to tell JayFeather about the prophcy.

Ok, one down, who knows how many more to go.


Chapter to the rose of a Heroin

Thunderclan does drugs and heroin now. Who started this?!

ok jazzie-kun pleas dont get mad at me cause your not in it yet. You'l apear soon dont worry.

There has literally been one chapter so far!

StarKit wock up and sunlit was in the branches. She closed her eyes againstill tired. Butter mom wouldn't let her sleep not today.

Butter moms and Jam dads

"Sweety its time to get up" said Dawnsparkle; her eys shinning. "Today is important today."

"What is it Mom" said StarKit awake right away. Then the she cat rememembered what today was.

"Ohmigosh its my serimony today!' she squelled excercisedly. Today was the day she was an apprentice!

Great, now she gets a promotion

She flicked outside not even waiting for her Mom. But her Mom cot up to her quick.

Did her mom throw a cot at her? I hate Starkit, but that is just kitten abuse.

"Sweety you know the clans don't except cat slike use sometimes." She said.

You're right. Mary sues are very much disliked in the clans.

StarKit glared. She didn't lake beig told that. Just because her Mom was a usedto be Shadowclan cat and her dad was jayFeather the medicine Cat didn"t mean she ws different!

Ok. Here comes my rant. This story takes place after Sunset. Jayfeather wasn't born until the next series: The Power of Three. Even then he was still a kit. My Conclusion: Jayfeather is a time-traveler, and for some strange reason, had kits with a Shadowclan Queen. Come on Jayfeather. You can do better than that.

"StarPaw come here." Said FireStar from the leg. He jumped down.

Leg?

"StarKit it s tome for you to become an apentice: he said. "Your a strong brave cat and because of that I will mentor with you."

Ever body gasped. StarKit did too. Se herd hear mother say "Wow!".

Firehert liked her shoulder. He whispered in her ear "youll be the best their ever was StarPaw I know ti."

Firestar x Shoulders. Can't wait until Sandstorm finds out.

Surpised she walked away when they were done howling for her./ Then she went ofer to JayFeathern and DawnSparkle who were very prod.

Can cats howl? Are there wolves sneaking into camp?

"Daughetr where very happy but he have to say something said Jayfeather his chest puffed ouit. "You see there is this prophcy Starcaln gave me it said that out of the darkness, stars will come and get rid of the evil tiger and holly."

StarPaw gasped. What does it mean?

lol I update fast dont i. REVEIW or ill hit over the head with a frying pan! XDD jk

You are not Rapunzel from Tangled. Put the frying pan down, now.


Chapter three the Battle 4 the caln

thx jazzie-kun 4 th good review! and stop flmaing the stroy!1 i bet u cant right such a good story!1!1

I wrote much better stories than this. Maybe once you get out of daycare you can read them.

StarPaw walkd over too the appentice's den. Insid she saw her sister's FlamePaw and lakePaw and hr frend JazzPaw (a.n: jazzie-kin ur my bff!) waz slepping on the mos.

Sisters? I never saw their apprentice ceremonies. Are you hiding something Dawnsparkle?

"JazzPaw get up." She cried. JazzPaw opend her brlliaint blu eyes and looked at hr.

"Do yo want 2 go on pattrol wit me?" she asked.

"Sure!" Said JazzPaw getten up from the moss. They leavt and went two the entrnse too camp.

But then, a cat came in thru the entrnce! It was BlackStar!1!11

Blackstar: Firestar! I need your help!

Firestar: What is wrong, Blackstar?

"Shadowclan are attaking!" She yelled. All the cats came out from there dens. She jumped on a cat and clawd him and he ran of.

Blackstar: Ahh! That's it. I'm leaving.

"Good job StarPaw!" FireStar called, "The last cat i new that culd fiht lik that was SandStrom. Your a good fihter!"

What Firestar meant was horrible job. Blackstar could have been asking for help for his clan, and Starkit probably just killed off half of Shadowclan because she jumped to conclusions.

StarPaw was happy. She wus a good fihgter! Maybey this was wat the prophcy meant.

thnkx and ples no more flams

Hides matches behind back, "What do you mean, no more flames?"


Chapter Three The Traning Under The Star
OMGOSH GUkys im so sorry but SOMEONE glares at rainy days FLAMED ME AND I GOT REALLY HURT. OKKAY IF you dont LIKE thestor y you dont have to readit u know.

Chapter Three The Traning Under The Stars

Shadowclan run from the camp. StarPaw smiled. Shed one! Noone cod hurt her family now .

She sheds fur. But she can control it so that she sheds one hair at a time.

StarPaw!" said FireStar. "Its time we train!" I want to show you how to fight!"

Yeah, it's not like the Warrior Code or learning how to hunt matters or anything.

"Ok." Sad StarPaw happl;y. "but yo just saw I culd fight, write?" "Well, ya." said FireStar. "But I wnted tol see if that was all you new."

Sad, happy, is this kit ok? Also, she literally just became an apprentice that day. She definitely doesn't know more than clawing and biting, right?

"Ok." They went to the frost togather and the other cats cleaned jp the bodies. "Ok StarPaw" said Firestar one they got their. "We'll start with how to dog."

Cleaned up the bodies?! What in Starclan's name was he teaching her? How to become Tigerclaw?! Also, how does a cat dog?

"Cmon thas too easy!" yelled StarPaw. Shed just beat BlackStar she was ready for anything!

Come on, kit. If Blackstar was going to fight you, you would lose in a heartbeat.

"ok Ok" mewled FiresTar, lets learn how to claw an oponit.

"Ya." Yowled Starkit. She jumped at FireStar not Giving hiM time to attakc. "She hit his side he didn't move he was to surprise.d she clawed him and he started bledding. "wow StarPaw" he said ".Your doing awesome." "Really?" gaped StarPaw. She didn't think she was doing that god was she relly special like the porphesy meowed?

She clawed her great grand-father until he was bleeding. Are you sure she isn't taking secret lessons from Hawkfrost or Tigerclaw?

"Yes StarPaw." Snarled Firestar. "I couldnteven get away in fast enough. Only scourg was did that before.,"

Wait, does he mean Scourge was fast enough to take away one of his lives? So this 6 moon old kitten is powerful enough to kill her leader if she wanted to?

"OMGOSH REALLY?" asked StarPaw. Scourg?1? THE SCOURG? She dherad so muchj about him he was really evil and killed alot of cats. "I'M LIKE SCOURG? "I didnt mean it like that" FirePaw sad fastly. "I ment you wer a good fighter. Its really cool." At that minute he thought to himself 'Starpaws so kawaii look at her eys and her fur.

Kawaii? Really? Firestar, you are the great grand-father of this 6 moon old kit. Stop, right now.

"Oh ok thanks." They trained floor awhile later StarPaw beat FireStar 8 times once she let him win to make him fel bettar and b y the last one she was alittle tired.

There is no way she could beat him 8 times in a row.

"Hey FireStar can we hunt now." Said StarPaw. "im kinda hungry."

"Oh we'll if you want." Firestar was disappointed he and; starPaw had been having so much fun. So they went huntng, StarPaw messed up a couple times but FireStar said it was okaysince it was only her second time (she'd had her first time when she was a littlekit and she and FireStar had snuck out together that's why he chose her as his apprentice_.

Oh, so she can mess up in hunting, but not fighting?

Later that night StarPaw locked up at the stars. She and Firestar had'd so much fun this day. Theyd brung back enough food for the hole clan.

Locking upn at the stars she turned to her best friend, JazzPaw, and said, "Do you think well ever be up there."

"Ya totally." Said JazzPaww. "I mean youll be l,eader and I'll be depudy one day well have too!"

I pray that Jazzpaw isn't foreshadowing anything.

"Ya." Said StarPaw smiling she loved JazzPaw NOT IN THAT WAY U SICKOS!) they were best friends. She loked up at the stars again and smiled and fell asleep wit the Starcaln voices whisper in her head.

I didn't really think that Starpaw loved Jazzpaw until you exploded like that. Now I just think that Starpaw has a secret kawaii crush on Jazzpaw.

REVIEW R MY LIFE

(lol u like it Jazzy I mead you as kawai as I could(


Chapter For StarPaws decids

flamrs ur all satanits!11 anyon who dosent like the stro is a staneist cause StarGIPaw has such a strng conecton with sTarcaln and thats why you dot like it, its cause u do ntlik JEZUS!

So if we flame or criticize this story, some 4 year old somewhere in the world will accuse us of worshipping Satan, and we don't know Jesus? As a Christian, I take heavy offense to that.

"StarPaw wok up its tim 4 parole."

Omg did Starpaw finally go to jail?! Why are they letting her on parole? Keep her there for life.

StarPaw opnd hr brite reinbow eys and locked arund.

Rainbow Eyes.

"Omigosh who wus tha!1!1"Sshe yellow.

Yellow!

"Its me GrayStipe" GrayStrip wisperd in her er. StarPaw gottedup.

"Omigosh Graystip what do u want!1 she yelped GrayStrpe locked at hr. "Wll u be my mat" hE ESked.

She is an apprentice! You are at least 3 or 4 years older than her! This kitten is, like, 6 or 7 moons old! Did you get over Silverstripe that quickly? And what about being captured by Two-legs? New Theory: Graystripe is a wizard, and apparated into camp from the Two-leg place.

"OMigosh grayStripe thats so nic!" StarKit scremed. "but FireStar alredy esked me."

When did he ask you?

"wel then hes jst an idot."

I thought Graystripe and Firestar were best friends. Now there are fighting over a 7 moon old kit. And Firestar already has a mate.

"StarPaw wok up its tim 4 parole."

StarPaw opnd hr brite reinbow eys and locked arund.

"Omigosh who wus tha!1!1"Sshe yellow.

"Its me GrayStipe" GrayStrip wisperd in her er. StarPaw gottedup.

"Omigosh Graystip what do u want!1 she yelped GrayStrpe locked at hr. "Wll u be my mat" hE ESked.

"OMigosh grayStripe thats so nic!" StarKit scremed. "but FireStar alredy esked me."

"wel then hes jst an idot."

Repeating story.

y do u say tha?" yellED STARPaw GayStrip locked at hr meanly. "i dont lik him" sqeakd GrayStripe he locked arund fastly. "hes a mean cat!

Dude, you two were, like, best friends. Don't let some 7 month old purple cat come in the way of friendship.

"OMIGOSH U MEAN LIKE SCOURG?" STARPAW SHOCKED.

"No ur much prtter then sourg" said Graystripe he licked her on the head I want u to be my mat." he yeleled.

Graystripe needs a mat. Don't do it Starpaw, he will walk all over you.

"Well mabey. but what would FireStar say?" she wispereed. GrayStripe locked around agan. "I dont think he wuld mind." said GraStri;e

"OMIGOSH SUR THAN!" StarPaww yelleded happly.

Graystripe: Will you be my mate?

Starpaw: No, Firestar already asked

Graystripe: Firestar wouldn't mind at all.

Starpaw: OK!

"Wat ar uo ta;kin abut" said FireHert he was walkin up. He locked angrily.

Fireheart got a demotion for trying to court a 7 month old kitten, after he already has a mate and several kits. Brambleclaw is the new leader.

"oh uhhhh nuthin FireStar go back to sleep!" mwled StarPaw hoppin he would leaf so she culd be alon with grayStripe.

Hoping she could be alone with Graystripe? What are you implying?

"Yah FireStra theres nithing to wory about!" cherrid GrayStrpe but Firestar didn't leave insted he said i thought I herd you asking her to be our mate."

What does 'cherrid' mean? Also Firestar, who was up in his den, heard one cat all the way across camp ask another cat to be his mate. Somehow he instantly knew that this was Graystripe and Starpaw. Third Theory/Conclusion of the Story: Firestar is the cat version of the Vulcans.

"oh uh yeh. yELLED STARPaw but he didn;t leaf instead he jumped on GrayStripe!1!11

"I Want to be wit her!" said FireHart attakin GraySriep.

"No I do!" shouted.

Firestar, you have a mate and kits. Graystripe, you just apperated here from Two-Leg place. Both of you are way too old for this apprentice. Stop fighting right now.

"guysys stop fihting you can BOTH be my mats! StarPaw wispered apply like seCert."

"No we can;t do that their can only be 1!11 Howled Firestar. "Otterwies youll chet on us."

"So StarGleam, who will u pik?" giggled GayStipe.

Stargleam?! I thought she was Starpaw!


Chapter Five Untidles
UR OLL JUST SAINTS y cant u just except jEsuss it wold mae ur life so much mor engoyable u would never haf to worr/ again

Omg, are you calling me a saint? *tears up* Thank you, that is an excellent compliment! Also, having Jesus in your life doesn't mean you never have to worry again. I have Jesus in my life, but I stress and worry about everyday life all the time. Quit spreading lies.

StarPaw sad "I..i….." she was so foncusded! Thes to cats hard asked her to b there mates an wht was she supops to do? They we beoth handsome and althing, but bot had matss! Nhd she luvved them both! FirstAr wus so kind and he oviusly likked her allot. GayStirpe was so funny and col.

What does foncusded mean? Also, the author acknowledges that both cats have/had mates before, then literally tosses it aside and gets back to the horrible task at hand.

"!" said StarPaw a** she ruan in to the forest. It wus to muck# she culdnt choss!

Muck?

She run and ran and run til ur paws her hurtinged. Hen she rrellized she corsed the broader. Oih no she thugh Shadowclan will get me. "wut are you ding here?" sd BalkStar s he waked up.

She didn't realize she crossed the border because Firestar never taught her where the borders where.

"I'm sorry!" mewoed StarKit I didn't men too!'

That's ok" sed blackStar. "no wons perfeck.""no that's not true." Said StarPaw, offed. "StarClan is.""Waht do you mena?" wemed BlackStar.

"well the give us all this halpand stuff" said Starpaw. "without them we wold be lust." She said.

Lust? I believe the cats would be much worse than lustful if they didn't have Starclan.

"I gess that's ter " balkcStar said, "besid I didn't relly mean that neway.

"o really why?" said starpaw. "becus yo are."

'WHAT' YOWLED sTarpaw jumping away BlackkStarTried to nugle her. "WHAT ARE O TRIG TO DO MOLE STRAEP ME?1?"

Mole straep? Did they mean molest? Also, Blackstar is trying to become mates with an APPRENTICE from a DIFFERENT CLAN. Think about that. Wait, no don't think about it!

"e—" BlakStar started too expaln, but, StarPw wass to quick

"no" she Sid "I don't doned another tom after me!" "I got enog porbelms arigt now anywy!

"but yor pahfect." Said Blackstar. "you betted me in badle you HAVE TO BE "

One cat beats another cat in battle, therefore they MUST be absolutely perfect.

"NO!" sh***ed SarPaw Again runnin into the forst. Ters ralled down her checks she was cyring. 'its too much" sahe though. "Starcalnb help me….!"

I don't feel sorry for you.


Chapter Six Desions,

STUP GLAMING!11! IF YOU'R AN FLAM,E YOUR A STNITS AND WIL BUN IN HEIKL!

So if I criticize a story written by a 4 year old, then I will burn in hell.

LASTEST TIEM ON STARKITS PROPEHY:;

"NO!" sh***ed SarPaw Again runnin into the forst. Ters ralled down her checks she was cyring. 'its too much" sahe though. "Starcalnb help me….!"

Copying and Pasting.

Afert tat StrPaw walkde thru the frost. She wus so depresedded! Hu was seh sapost to pik?/?/ Then she saw JayFethre cumin thru the forst tords her.

A 7 or 8 moon old kitten has 3 toms chasing after her, and so she decides to become depressed.

"JayFeathr im soooo confusedd wat do i do she yelled their are three toms atref me! TREEE!"!

i know" sed jayFethr he locked happy. "thats good four you it menzz that p[eo[le like uo. he told he smilling.

How is having 3 toms, two of them leaders of different clans, lusting after you good?

"NO NUT I LUV ALL OF THEM" sed StarPaw back waling upst. "I DON'T KNO WHO TO [ICK!1!1"

Don't pick any of them. You are not old enough to take a mate.

"wel ten let me tel yo a stor.y said JayFeathern and he sat don. Onceu pon a tiem there were afew cats that I licked."

"hu where they sad StarPaw snifing.

"theyre names were DawnSpark;e and... Stick/ saud JayFeather.

"OMG STICK wispred StarPaw "YOU WHERE IN LUV WITH A STICK? She culdnt belief it. After al this tim she finds out that her fathe loved a sTICK. SHE GAPD IN SHOC.

I understand the story with the Stick. Maybe he had fallen in love with Half Moon, and, as a result, fell in love with the Stick so he could keep going back in time and be able to see Half Moon.

"Wat did you do? she esked thoug cuase she was crios.

Wel I culdn have kids with a stcik now culd i?" said JayPaw and he locked confuded. LIKE HE DIDN;T EVN KNO SHE WAS GNNA ASK THt qestn.

"sO YOU WENT WITH DAWNSPARKLE INSTD! YELLED STARpaw locking vry happi. "but that doesn;t help me what am I spost to do?/?

"Folo youre hart said Jayfeahr. "Who do yo want to be wit/"

Follow your heart, but take your brain with you. Don't know if that will help the situation or make it worse.

Hmm StarPaw taught for a secund. FireStar!" she yelldd and then run of to tel him that she ;oved him

Firestar has a mate and kits!

NO FLAMSE!1!12!1


Chapter Ate The Serimmony 1
STOP REVOFIGN BAD! but than u JASZpAW for tehh godo revewis uve ben levving

Jazzpaw needs to stop writing good reviews for this. You're just encouraging her.

StarPaw skided into de Camp. "FIRSTAR" SHE YOWLED "I ha to tel; uo somesting?"

"nut ow StarOaw" he sadi "yuve gut to become WARRIOR!'

NOOO!

"MOGOSH REALLY creamed StarPaw.

YEAH SAID firestar "Youv been a war for onll 3.14 dayss butt u are the best apent ice in the cAlan. Ur perfect. We ndd you to help dfeat BlackStar and ShadowclaN. And all teh other calns. Tehy are tyring 2 attack us were in the meddle of a warr. "

3.14159265 days? Also, what did the other clans do? Hurt Starpaw's feelings? Also, if you are in the middle of a war, it's totally normal to get attacked. Don't make such a big deal of it.

"omgosh WE ARE?" scremmed StarPal she sus so surpissed!

I would be pissed too if we were attacking the other clans for no reason whatsoever.

"Ya DustPelt did while U were away in your walk Rivrclan attacked us." Said SandTrom. She locked sortaf sad she New FireStart lovved Stargleam. But it wass ok she newt wht wus best.

One cat left the clan, so Riverclan decided to attack. And SANDSTORM YOU PIECE OF DUNG! Don't you ever give up your mate, who saved Thunderclan on multiple occasions, to some kawaii, purple-furred, rainbow-eyed 7 moon old who literally did nothing except try to attack the leader of another clan. This story is rubbing me the wrong way.

"OMGoht" sid StarPaw. "Quickk mack me a warrror!"

You impatient little thing.

"Oak" said Firestar. He wlaked up to StarPaw. "aLL Cats Gather Round Who Are Older To Cach There One Prey!"

"Tday we are making a new Warrior."

The calnn GASPED!

Don't be so surprised.

"SarkPaw! StarPaw!: shouted the clan. They all new infancy it was she whom was beng mad a warrior.

Infancy? Where did a 4 year old hear this word?

Starpaw was so exited! She'd never bin so hap inner life!

"StarPaw….." said FirePaw. He was simile like shed never sent him simle behfore. "Are you ready to become a Warrior in the Name of Starcaln?:"

His simile made her as happy as...well something that is happy a lot.

"Yes!" she shock3d.

"oak." Eh sad. "Then by the powers of Starclan, I gave you this narme. From now on, you will be none as StarPaw for your pel which sings like the starss and ur conectin 2 StarClann. We onner you'r bravvery and" " kindness."

Starpaw never got her warrior name.

"SarkPaw! StarPaw!: shouted the clan. They

They what? What did they do?

StarGleam girned. She wass a Warrior! At least!"

"FireScar," she said, cuming over 2 him. "I wanna tell u somesing." They locked sirously at him.

Who is Firescar?

"yeah wat is it?" he sad, hop shinning in his eayres.

Dos he knew? StarGlema think.

"Firestar…." She brethed. She cullednt she was actually dong this after so lung.

"I….."

WINDCLAN ATTAK! Shioted a voise from obove the Camp.

It was….

HOLYLEAF!

Once again, Hollyleaf is one of my favorite cats. I seriously dislike this story. Also, Hollyleaf is a time-traveler, too. So far we have two Time Lord Cats, one Wizard Cat, and One Vulcan cat.

I workd reall' herd on dis chapter n tired 2 spell good so plzz review NICE!


Chatter NEIN Teh Evil Tigger and holY

Evil Tigger.

I SAID NO FLAMES! YOUR JUST JELOS YOUR GOING 2 HEL LJESS IS OYUR SAVER

I know Jesus is our Savior. Quit pounding it into my head.

"Ohno its HolyLeaf!" yelled FireStra he ranned away. SandStrom wnet aftre him.

Firestar is afraid of his own time-traveling grand-children.

StarGlaem locked up. HolyLeaf was stnding their and their was anodder chat with hr.

"OMIGOSH ITS TIGGERSTAR!" she hossed. "WHTA WIL WE DO!"

Tigger is now leader of one of the clans.

"we figt." saud Jayfeathre and he ran at HollyLeaf. StarGlema washed as HolyLefa locked at JayFather and kiled him with one shot.

A blind medicine cat tried to fight. Also Hollyleaf just killed her brother without any sign of remorse or guilt. This story is taking a turn towards the Dark Side.

"YOU KILDED MY FTHER! she yelled and she attcked HolyLeaf. HollyPaw gut out of the way and StarPaw attaked TiggerSar.

No! Don't attack Tigger! He's one of my favorite characters from Winnie the Pooh!

"U killed TigerStra!" uelled FiresStar he locked happy. "You are speshil!"

Wait, where did Tigerstar come from? And how did Stargleam kill one of the most evil cats in one blow? Come on Tigerstar, I know you're better than that.

StarGleam was sooo happy, she didng notse as HollyLea grabbed Firestar and took him way.

"OH NO" yelled StarKit. "WE HAVE TO SAVE HIM!

Hollyleaf captures her own grandfather, leader of Thunderclan, in broad daylight and nobody does anything. Also, Stargleam got demoted back to Starkit because no one loves a Mary Sue

a cilf hunger1!111! see im a god riter i no what thta id thx f4r the good revweiws JzzPaw && everon else WHOSE NIT A FALMER

Omg I wrote a cliffhanger, therefore I am a good writer.


Chapter Ten The Recluse

Recluse? As in the Brown Recluse spider (which should die burn in hell because it's a spider)?

"EVERONE FALLOW ME" meowled StarPleam as see charred for th3 entranse to eh camp. Tares stremmed down her face1 she wuss so sad her fahter had deid her leader was gunn. "FLAMEPAW LAKEPAW DUSTPELT MOM LOINBLAZE FALLOW ME." She said. "I NEDD A PAROL."

1. Why is the clan taking orders from Stargleam, who just became a leader that day?
2. Why doesn't one of the older, more experienced warriors (such as Cloudtail, Brambleclaw, Dustpelt or Thornclaw) take charge
3. Stargleam went back to jail. She now needs a parole.
4. Lionblaze is also a time traveler. Now we have 3 Time Lord cats, 1 Vulcan Cat, and 1 Wizard Cat.

The run into the frost their pass working fastly. She wood kill HolyLeaf and TigerSar for what thed don!

Didn't you already kill Tigerstar?

She batlecried using his nose to tar down the evill cats. Her heat burneded!

She battle-cried through her nose.

Sune they had funded them. They were hidnig bwhind a bolder. "HAHAHAH" LAUGHED HOLylesf putting er claw on FiresTarS thort. "IVE GOT YOU KNOW!"

Hollyleaf is about to kill her grandfather for no reason whatsoever. Can you give us a reason why Hollyleaf hates her grandfather so much?

StarGleam gasped. "noooooo Fireheat!" she scemmed "FalmePawgo!" she said.

Firestar got demoted back to Fireheart because he allowed his time-traveling granddaughter to kidnap him. Also 'Falmepawgo'? Are you trying to become a wizard cat like Graystripe? If you are so angry, Stargleam, why don't you attack her yourself?

Flamepaw hurled at HolyLeaf. Hollyleaf laked at her in suprise. "What how could they have fallowd me." She dogged at Flamepaw her blue eys fallshig.

Oh wait, Falmepaw is Flamepaw. Also, Hollyleaf has the power to dog other cats.

"NO FLAMEPAW" whaled LakePaw seing her sisters about too die. "I LOVE YOU FALMEPAW." She yowled jumping herself in front of HOlyLeaf.

HollyLaffs paw cutt into hir throt blood came out LakePaw felt down.

I think anybody would fall down if someone cut your throat

"NOOOO!1!11" StarPaw screamed. "FLAMEAPWWW!" She ran for HoltLeaf but it wass no us. LakPaw was dyeing. "I lofe you StarGleam." She wisperd before er blue I's cosed.

"NO WAKE UP LAKEPOOL" shoited Stargleam-she was so sad and depersed she was cyring!

How many cats just died? This story is moving too fast. Also, I think anybody would start crying if they witnessed a time-traveler just kill their clanmates.

"hahaha" laughed HollyLeaf evil. "u just dunt gedot d o you Im one of teh Tree! I have pows beyound ur emaginating!" nd then…. She turned in…. A BARE!

OMG A bare! What's a bare?

"Gasped" gasped everyone. It was a bare!

A bare!

"IM A SHAPSH***ER!" siad Hollylea joyly.

Hollyleaf is now has powers.

"stargleam." Said FalmePaw cryingly. "I nedd to go back 2 the damp. I goat bury laekpaw. Ive neverbeen out of camp before how do you get back!"

You seriously never left your own camp? How bad is your mentor?

"U ju wak to te the est. said StarPaw."

Thaks said FlamePaw crying she piced up the LakePaw and putter on her back and run.

"nut so fast!" said Holyleaf! "Your not gunna get away that easly!" Wit a rar like an volcano erection she jumped at StarGlaem!

Everone! Gasped! "NOOOO." Yowled STarGleam as sumething lung and sarp pluned into her bk. "YOU CANT GET ME THAT EASLY."

I! Really! Dislike! This! Story!

Everyone jumped at the HoBare! The bare rared in pane! Starepaw sent her teeth into its for. It rared.

This Hollybare is so rare I threw an ultraball at it.

"oak oka" HolyLeafthe bare said. "i no know Your not guna be bettin that esliay." Suddenly she was a cat1 then her body dropped her eyes went drka she was on the grund. Suddly ther wass howl from the other side of the froste. It was LaFlamePaw!

Laflamepaw? Is Flamepaw French? Comment fou cette histoire peut obtenir?

"LAKEPAW UR BACK!" SHE SAD

Lakepaw just died! But now, since she came back to life, Lakepaw gets the (dis)honor of being Jesus cat

WHT SAID SPARGLAME. Thenshe locked. It was LakePool! She was runnin tord the forest starGleam was so appy. Then she sawyer eyes.

THEY WERE OLLYLEAFS!

the next chatter wil coke soon! AND STUP FLAMMING YOU HAETRS. YOU JUST DONT BELVE IN GOOD.

Coke? Like the Coca-Cola soft drink? I love coke! Also, I do believe in God, how dare you.


Catter 1 The Fiht Aganst the Sitters 1

Fight against the Sitters? Like Kit-Sittters?

"Oh nose!" yellded StarPaw she wus so horrorifed. "LakePaool is buck and seh is NUT OKA!"

Nose.

"Of coarse im not okay!" LakeFall screchemd loadly she issed at StarGlame. "I'm being posesd by HolyLeaf wut do you THINK!" she yelddl and hulrd hesselv at StarPaw. StarGlme was so surpissed she culdn;t mofe

If Hollyleaf was possessing Lakepaw/Lakepool/Lakefall then I doubt she would be able to talk or speak. I guess she would be a blank slave, I guess.

Then... "OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!" It was...

A wolf!

REDPAW! Redpaw runnth over to StarPaw and jumped in font of herr and LakePolawm hit her insta.

Wait a minute. Who is Redpaw? I don't remember Redpaw.

"Nuu Redpaw!" chked StarGlamea and she locked at RedPaw. "RedOaw are yu okayo?" she esked upsed. RedPaw cughed. "No im not but at leaat I sawed yuour lif! she sed and then he did. StarFlame locked at RedPaw she wus so buttifly then StarGleam shock her hud. "No Im STRREET!" she taught madly. "but now what do we dao agant LakePaw!" she lucked up. LakePaw was runnen toward Loinblzx and she was WIDESPED!

Stargleam is now a street. What should we call her? Mary Sue Avenue? Overpowered Boulevard?

"NOWWWWWWW LIonHEAR!" wisprd StarGalem and she ran towed LionBlaze and she hit LakePaw, who did to.

Lionheart, don't do it. This purple kitten is trying to get you to kill your own sister.

"StarGlame I will get u for thiss11 sed LakePaw as SatinClaw drag away to hellClan. He waswerng oink naie Polish. then StarGlame stinted to crry as she realed that her sitter a** ded.

Satanclaw? Hellclan? Wearing pink nail polish? Are you kidding me? Also, who did he drag away? Hollyleaf?

"you killd my Subjt!" HolyLeaf rared turng back in a bare. "Ilus get you for thi!" she saud and then she rudhed at StarPlame. "Oh o!" yelld every1 "tarPaw got our of the Way!"

Hollybare is back. Also, Stargleam got a demotion back to Starpaw because I hate her.

Tim semd to slow danw as StarPawlem run awy from the bare. But she ran left into... TIGGERSTAR!"

Tigger is back!

"Fuhrstar! yellded a TiggerStraw. "You ar gong to did now!" And he held out... SOME JEW!

Tiggerstraw. Also Jews? Now I am 95% sure this story is promoting Christianity whilst attacking Jews

"Omg jyew!" elld FamePaw she locked at the yew. "But it wooden work becas thers a lizded on it." They all locked at the lizard. It wus a newt. The nwt ran away.

Oh wait, it's yew. Also, why you gotta be hating on newts? It probably ran away once it realized what story it was in.

"... NOOOOOOOOOOOOO!" yelled FamePaw. "Now the yew is gunna wkr!

So it wouldn't work because some innocent lizard was on a leaf.

"Ete the yew!" sadi TiggerStar he thirst it at StarGlame StarGleam baked away. "You're never get moi to ete it!" she esked and then she held "YOUE NEVER TOOK ME ALIV!"

Stargleam can bake now! Can she bake some Apple Pie? Beignets?

"are you so sur?" aksed TigerClar and then he lung at StarGlema and grabed her and ran away. "Youl never cathg me!1111 he laght meanly. "Im gong to Shadowcaln!" And then he luf.

Tigerstar got demoted back to Tigerclaw. Because why not? And Tigerclaw, you are almost as stupid as Sandstorm. You told the cats that they would never catch you, then you told them exactly where you were going. Nice job, now they are going to catch you.

Guyx I ben working relly hard on this wile I was gon. im sor'ry for the wait. Revew betetr and ill updat mor quick


Cahpter 12 The Sark Forest

The Sark Forest?

"NO!" yewled StarKit. She run after TigerClaw. but he was to fat. She cudlnt catch up. Finly she stoped. She was so tried so sad, Teres begun to role down her face: her sitser was deed and tigerstar had ExcapeD!

Not only did both Stargleam and Tigerstar get demotions, but Tigerstar is now fat enough to outrun a 7 moon old kitten.

"y am I so ulsess?/?/' she dsked. "why couldnt i kill her?" "its not opur falt. Sadi a voice from bedide her. "WHAT WHOSE THEIR" SHE SAID JUMPED.

It juts me. " said JayWing waking to bedside her. "Yo couldt kill im becas u're nut dead." "what" said StarGleam "What dlo you men."

Wait, Jay's Wing? As in the Tribe Cat who cast the final vote to move to the Mountains?

"hes in the Dakr Froset!" said JayFeather. "hess allready ded!" oh no what do I do thouth starGeam.

"we can go to teh Dark Forste but its ver danger." Mewled Jayfeater. "tack me their!" sad StarGleam.

Just in case you didn't know already, the Dark Forest is dangerous.

She slepped and then they were in the Fark Forest. It was dark. Here was no mono 2 lighte the way and it wass heard to see. They herd voices! It wass TiggerStar!

Tiggerstar is back!

"ok tjen well kell her ND invade Thundercaln" he was said. "WHAT NOO!" said StarPaw she jumped at him. she was aboot to hit him when BlackStripe was there! "TIGERSAR WATCH OUT" said BlackStrip. TierStar loocked at her and he clawed her. It wasnt fare!

Who is Blackstripe? Also, one cat claws another cat, therefore nothing is fare.

StarGleam fell to the ground blood was cuming from a wand on her sholder. It was a lot of red blod. HawekFrost Looked at her. She was so buetiful so kawai, he was thought just like FirStar. He loved her. He had to save her.

Really, Hawkfrost? You would attack your own father to save some rainbow-eyed, purple furred overpowered 7 month old kitten?

He jumped in TiggerStar! He bit him! But it wa s to lat. StarPaw was dyeing. "it was turning balkc. "I love you seh said as she did.

AND THEN STARGLEAM WAS DIED!11!111!11111!1!11!

YYYEEESSSS! *jumps up and down waving flags and throwing confetti*


Cahpter 13 The Metang wit Sartcaln
"Omigish what happnd! shrekd StarPaw. She looked arung. "am I in Starclan?" she eskes when she say the cats that she new.

You don't deserve to go to Starclan. Go back to the Dark Forest.

"No of cours not your in the Daek Forest!" gagged a gray he-cat. StarGlame locked around windly for TiggerStar but she culd;nt sea him. "Yes your in SatrCaln! said the she-ca. It was YellowFang. "Wher else wood you be?"

Daek Forest? Did she mean to say 'Dank'? Because the Dank Forest..full of dank memes?! *goes to hide in a corner*

"Yuo dont need to be so red! said StarGlame she was mad."

sorry said YelllowFang but that made me made."

"its ok" said StarGleam. "but i was in the sark forest so...HOW DID I DYE?

I knew that purple fur wasn't natural, she just dyes it every night.

"TigerStra killed you" said BlueeStar cumin over to her. "he can send cats to starcaln even from the drk Foret"

"Wait so then I'm died?" StarGlame. "What do i do no? I cant safve the frost like this!"

You can't save frost. It just melts.

"That why we aer gong to send you bak to Thnduer clan!" saud WhitStrip. "But we also have somsing very imptent to tell you first."

Who is Whitestrip?

"Omg what is it" lauged StarPaw she stinted to jump up and down with joe." "I wnat to knew"

"wel their are ten thigs we ned to give you before you goe" said LeafPool and she gave StarGlame 2 rocks with writting on them. "their the ten commons!"

"OMG THE TEN COMMONDENTS" squelled StarGleam and she was so exited. "I GET TO HAVE TEN COMMNDMENTS?"

Did you seriously just task a 7 month old kitten to bring the 10 Commandments to the clans?

"Ya" said BleuStar "we need to give them to the calns but they wont liten. Thats why we nedd you to do it four us!"

"Okay" said StarGlame and she left Starclan talking the rocks with her.

My Theory for this Chapter: The author went to Sunday school and learned about the Moses/The 10 Commandments, and decided 'Hey! Tihs wood b gud ot ptu ni my storii (Translation: Hey! This would be good to put in my story)


Chapter Fortene The Ten Commdaments

Stargalme come down in2 thunderclaln camp. It was dark. Their were no cats otusdie. "SLL CATS GATER" she sadi. They cats gatehred. "I have Tebn Conmondants frum Starclam/" she said. The cats gapsed. The started to mummur. "be quite" starGleam sad. Tehy were quite.

Great. *sighs*

"here she said pushing th3 roks foreword. "Loack at the them. Yu must fallow these commodents fur your hole lifes if you wnt to ge5t into Starcan." She said. They loked at the roxk.

I hate this cat

"1. thou shat not belive in other goIncesters

2. Dont make any picturs of anyhing and warhip them. If ou do ai will punsch you an ur grankits.

Don't war hip pictures, because I will punch your grandkits.

4. don't say Starcclan in vane.

5. Work for 6 days and worshipe me on 1.

Mary Sue needs to be worshipped

6. Repsect our mom and dad.

7. Dont kill otters unless in batl.e

8. don't br unfateful to our mat.

Don't be ungrateful to mats. Just walk all over them like you're supposed to.

9/ Dotn steel things from he other cland.

10. Dnt lie aboot yiour nieborgh.

10. Don't be jelos og your neiborgh.

11. No BENG GAY!f

No being gay is not in the 10 Commandments.

The cat GAPSED. "Im sorry" said DaysPow. "ive ben a sinner. Ill do better next time!" Al the cats agred. StarPaw was happy! Teh were aon the write pat! If hey fallowed Sartclan thay woud neber go wong!

Who is Dayspow?

But suddenly she saw somesting! It was….. REdpaw and LakePaool KISSING

Ok, listen up everybody. This is no longer a fanfiction/trollfiction. This is just an advertisement to go to church every Sunday. I do believe in going to church/believing in Christ, but this person is doing it in the completely wrong way. If you are going to write a story, try not to bring controversial issues into it, such as religion and sexuality.