A/N: I am not Tara. In '06 and '07, when this was on I was 8 and 9.
My lab partner told me to check this fic out. I did. My main thought: This is terrible. I just want to print it off and cover it in red pen to fix all the errors so you can actually read it.
So I did. Enjoy. I also censored all of Tara's cussing, in her version and the correct one. Don't hate me for it.
BTW: I'm a freshman in high school, so if I miss a few errors, feel free to tell me.
Non-bold: Oridginal story.
Bold: Corrected spelling &grammar
[bold square paranthieses-things]=translation/my opinion.
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Chapters 1-4
Chapter 1.
AN: Special fangz (get it, coz Im goffik) 2 my gf (ew not in that way) raven, bloodytearz666 4 helpin me wif da story and spelling. U rok! Justin ur da luv of my deprzzing life u rok 2! MCR ROX!
AN: Special fangs [thanks] (get it, 'cause I'm Gothic?) to my gf (ew not in that way), Raven, bloodytearz666 for helping me with the story and spelling. [She sure did a GREAT job.] You rock! Justin you're the love of my depressing life, you rock too! MCR [My Chemical Romance] rocks!
Hi my name is Ebony Dark'ness Dementia Raven Way and I have long ebony black hair (that's how I got my name) with purple streaks and red tips that reaches my mid-back and icy blue eyes like limpid tears and a lot of people tell me I look like Amy Lee (AN: if u don't know who she is get da hell out of here!). I'm not related to Gerard Way but I wish I was because he's a major f*cking hottie. I'm a vampire but my teeth are straight and white. I have pale white skin. I'm also a witch, and I go to a magic school called Hogwarts in England where I'm in the seventh year (I'm seventeen). I'm a goth (in case you couldn't tell) and I wear mostly black. I love Hot Topic and I buy all my clothes from there. For example today I was wearing a black corset with matching lace around it and a black leather miniskirt, pink fishnets and black combat boots. I was wearing black lipstick, white foundation, black eyeliner and red eye shadow. I was walking outside Hogwarts. It was snowing and raining so there was no sun, which I was very happy about. A lot of preps stared at me. I put up my middle finger at them.
Hi, my name is Ebony Dark'ness Dementia Raven Way, and I have long ebony black hair (that's how I got my name) with purple streaks and red tips that reaches my mid-back and icy blue eyes like [liquid?] tears and a lot of people tell me I look like Amy Lee (AN: if you don't know who she is get the hell out of here!). I'm not related to Gerard Way, but I wish I was because he's a major f*cking hottie. I'm a vampire, but my teeth are straight and white. I have pale white skin. I'm also a witch, and I go to a magic school called Hogwarts in England where I'm in the seventh year (I'm seventeen). I'm a Goth (in case you couldn't tell) and I wear mostly black. I love Hot Topic and I buy all my clothes from there. For example, today I was wearing a black corset with matching lace around it and a black leather miniskirt, pink fishnets and black combat boots. I was wearing black lipstick, white foundation, black eyeliner and red eye shadow. I was walking outside Hogwarts. It was snowing and raining so there was no sun, which I was very happy about. A lot of preps stared at me. I put up my middle finger at them.
"Hey Ebony!" shouted a voice. I looked up. It was…. Draco Malfoy!
"Hey Ebony!" shouted a voice. I looked up. It was…. Draco Malfoy!
"What's up Draco?" I asked.
"What's up, Draco?" I asked.
"Nothing." he said shyly.
"Nothing." he said shyly.
But then, I heard my friends call me and I had to go away.
But, then I heard my friends call me and I had to go away.
AN: IS it good? PLZ tell me fangz!
AN: Is it good? Please tell me, fangs! [thanks]
Chapter 2.
AN: Fangz 2 bloodytearz666 4 helpin me wif da chapta! BTW preps stop flaming ma story ok!
AN: Fangs [thanks] to bloodytearz666 for helping me with the chapter. BTW, preps, stop flaming my story, ok!
The next day I woke up in my bedroom. It was snowing and raining again. I opened the door of my coffin and drank some blood from a bottle I had. My coffin was black ebony and inside it was hot pink velvet with black lace on the ends. I got out of my coffin and took of my giant MCR t-shirt which I used for pajamas. Instead, I put on a black leather dress, a pentagram necklace, combat boots and black fishnets on. I put on four pairs of earrings in my pierced ears, and put my hair in a kind of messy bun.
The next day I woke up in my bedroom. It was snowing and raining again. I opened the door of my coffin, and drank some blood from a bottle I had. My coffin was black ebony, and inside it was hot pink velvet with black lace on the ends. I got out of my coffin and took off my giant MCR t-shirt which I used for pajamas. Instead, I put on a black leather dress, a pentagram necklace, combat boots and black fishnets on. I put on four pairs of earrings in my pierced ears, and put my hair in a kind of messy bun.
My friend, Willow (AN: Raven dis is u!) woke up then and grinned at me. She flipped her long waist-length raven black hair with pink streaks and opened her forest-green eyes. She put on her Marilyn Manson t-shirt with a black mini, fishnets and pointy high-heeled boots. We put on our makeup (black lipstick white foundation and black eyeliner.)
My friend, Willow (AN: Raven this is you!) woke up, and grinned at me. She flipped her long, waist-length, raven, black hair with pink streaks and opened her forest-green eyes. She put on her Marilyn Manson t-shirt with a black mini, fishnets, and pointy high-heeled boots. We put on our makeup (black lipstick, white foundation, and black eyeliner.)
"OMFG, I saw you talking to Draco Malfoy yesterday!" she said excitedly.
"Oh my f*cking God, I saw you talking to Draco Malfoy yesterday!" she said excitedly.
"Yeah? So?" I said, blushing.
"Yeah? So?" I said, blushing.
"Do you like Draco?" she asked as we went out of the Slytherin common room and into the Great Hall.
"Do you like Draco?" she asked, as we went out of the Slytherin common room and into the Great Hall.
"No I so f*cking don't!" I shouted.
"No, I so f*cking don't!" I shouted.
"Yeah right!" she exclaimed. Just then, Draco walked up to me.
"Hi." he said.
"Yeah, right!" she exclaimed.
Just then, Draco walked up to me. "Hi." he said.
"Hi." I replied flirtily.
"Hi." I replied flirtatiously.
"Guess what." he said.
"Guess what." he said.
"What?" I asked.
"What?" I asked.
"Well, Good Charlotte are having a concert in Hogsmeade." he told me.
"Well, Good Charlotte's having a concert in Hogsmeade." he told me.
"Oh. My. F*cking. God!" I screamed. I love GC. They are my favorite band, besides MCR.
"Oh. My. F*cking. God!" I screamed. I love GC. They are my favorite band, besides MCR.
"Well…. do you want to go with me?" he asked.
"Well…. do you want to go with me?" he asked.
I gasped.
I gasped.
Chapter 3.
AN: STOP FLAMMING DA STORY PREPZ OK! odderwize fangs 2 da goffik ppl 4 da good reveiws! FANGS AGEN RAVEN! oh yeah, BTW I don't own dis or da lyrics 4 Good Chralotte.
AN: STOP FLAMMING THE STORY PREPS, OK! Otherwise, fangs to the Gothic people for the good reviews. Fangs again, Raven. Oh yeah, BTW I don't own this or the lyrics for Good Charlotte. [You love this band, but can't even bother to spell their name right?]
On the night of the concert I put on my black lace-up boots with high heels. Underneath them were ripped red fishnets. Then I put on a black leather minidress with all this corset stuff on the back and front. I put on matching fishnet on my arms. I straightened my hair and made it look all spiky. I felt a little depressed then, so I slit one of my wrists. I read a depressing book while I waited for it to stop bleeding and I listened to some GC. I painted my nails black and put on TONS of black eyeliner. Then I put on some black lipstick. I didn't put on foundation because I was pale anyway. I drank some human blood so I was ready to go to the concert.
On the night of the concert, I put on my black lace-up boots with high heels. Underneath them where ripped red fishnets. Then, I put on a black leather minidress with all this corset stuff on the back and front. I put on matching fishnets on my arms. I straightened my hair, and made it look all spiky. I felt a little depressed then, so I slit one of my wrists. I read a depressing book while I waited for it to stop bleeding, and I listened to some GC. I painted my nails black and put on TONS of black eyeliner. Then I put on some black lipstick. I didn't put on foundation because I was pale anyway. I drank some human blood, so I was ready to go to the concert. [….this is not how I prepare for concerts at all….]
I went outside. Draco was waiting there in front of his flying car. He was wearing a Simple Plan t-shirt (they would play at the show too), baggy black skater pants, black nail polish and a little eyeliner I went outside. (AN: A lot fo kewl boiz wer it ok!).
I went outside. Draco was waiting there, in front of his flying car. He was wearing a Simple Plan t-shirt (they would play at the show too), baggy black skater pants, black nail polish and a little eyeliner I went outside. (AN: A lot of cool boys where it, ok!).
"Hi Draco!" I said in a depressed voice.
"Hi, Draco!" I said, in a depressed voice.
"Hi Ebony." he said back. We walked into his flying black Mercedes-Benz (the license plate said 666) and flew to the place with the concert. On the way we listened excitedly to Good Charlotte and Marilyn Manson. We both smoked cigarettes and drugs. When we got there, we both hopped out of the car. We went to the mosh pit at the front of the stage and jumped up and down as we listened to Good Charlotte.
"Hi, Ebony." he said back. We walked into his flying black Mercedes-Benz (the license plate said 666), and flew to the place with the concert. On the way, we listened excitedly to Good Charlotte and Marilyn Manson. We both smoked cigarettes and drugs. When we got there, we both hopped out of the car. We went to the mosh pit at the front of the stage, and jumped up and down as we listened to Good Charlotte.
"You come in cold, you're covered in blood
They're all so happy you've arrived
The doctor cuts your cord, hands you to your mom
She sets you free into this life." sang Joel (I don't own da lyrics 2 dat song).
"You come in cold, you're covered in blood
They're all so happy you've arrived
The doctor cuts your cord, hands you to your mom
She sets you free into this life." sang Joel (I don't own the lyrics to that song).
"Joel is so f*cking hot." I said to Draco, pointing to him as he sung, filling the club with his amazing voice.
"Joel is so f*cking hot." I said to Draco, pointing to him as he sung, filling the club with his amazing voice.
Suddenly Draco looked sad.
"What's wrong?" I asked as we moshed to the music. Then I caught on.
"Hey, it's ok I don't like him better than YOU!" I said.
Suddenly, Draco looked sad. "What's wrong?" I asked, as we moshed to the music. Then I caught on. "Hey, it's ok, I don't like him better than YOU!" I said.
"Really?" asked Draco sensitively and he put his arm around me all protective.
"Really?" asked Draco, sensitively and he put his arm around me, protectively.
"Really." I said. "Besides I don't even know Joel and he's going out with Hilary f*cking Duff. I f*cking hate that little b*tch." I said disgustedly, thinking of her ugly blonde face.
"Really." I said. "Besides, I don't even know Joel, and he's going out with Hilary f*cking Duff. I f*cking hate that little b*tch." I said disgustedly, thinking of her ugly blonde face.
The night went on really well, and I had a great time. So did Draco. After the concert, we drank some beer and asked Benji and Joel for their autographs and photos with them. We got GC concert tees. Draco and I crawled back into the Mercedes-Benz, but Draco didn't go back into Hogwarts, instead he drove the car into… the Forbidden Forest!
The night went on really well, and I had a great time. So did Draco. After the concert, we drank some beer, and asked Benji and Joel for their autographs and photos with them. We got GC concert tees. Draco and I crawled back into the Mercedes-Benz, but Draco didn't go back into Hogwarts, instead he drove the car into… the Forbidden Forest!
[Heads up, this has what Tara calls a lemon.]
Chapter 4.
AN: I sed stup flaming ok ebony's name is ENOBY nut mary su OK! DRACO IS SOO IN LUV wif her dat he is acting defrent! dey nu eechodder b4 ok!
AN: I said stop flaming, ok, Ebony's name is ENOBY [You just misspelled your own character's name. Really?], not Mary Sue, ok! DRACO IS SO IN LOVE with her that he is acting different! They knew eachother before, ok!
"DRACO!" I shouted. "What the f*ck do you think you are doing?"
Draco didn't answer but he stopped the flying car and he walked out of it. I walked out of it too, curiously.
"What the f*cking hell?" I asked angrily.
"DRACO!" I shouted. "What the f*ck do you think you're doing?" Draco didn't answer, but he stopped the flying car, and walked out of it. I walked out of it too, curiously. "What the f*cking hell?" I asked angrily.
"Ebony?" he asked.
"Ebony?" he asked.
"What?" I snapped.
"What?" I snapped.
Draco leaned in extra-close and I looked into his gothic red eyes (he was wearing color contacts) which revealed so much depressing sorrow and evilness and then suddenly I didn't feel mad anymore.
Draco leaned in, extra-close, and I looked into his gothic red eyes (he was wearing color contacts), which revealed so much depressing sorrow and evilness, and then suddenly I didn't feel mad anymore.
And then… suddenly just as I Draco kissed me passionately. Draco climbed on top of me and we started to make out keenly against a tree. He took of my top and I took of his clothes. I even took of my bra. Then he put his thingie into my you-know-what and we did it for the first time.
And then… suddenly, Draco kissed me passionately. Draco climbed on top of me, and we started to make out keenly against a tree. He took off my top, and I took off his clothes. I even took off my bra. Then he put his thingy into my you-know-what and we did it for the first time.
"Oh! Oh! Oh! " I screamed. I was beginning to get an orgasm. We started to kiss everywhere and my pale body became all warm. And then….
"Oh! Oh! Oh! " I screamed. I was beginning to get an orgasm. We started to kiss everywhere, and my pale body became all warm. And then….
"WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU DOING YOU MOTHERF*KERS!"
It was….Dumbledore!
"WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU DOING, YOU MOTHERF*KERS!"It was….Dumbledore!
Well, what do YOU think? Tell me, por favor.
I'll be adding the rest, 4 or 5 chapters at a time, later. Bye!