I wouldn't exactly say this was my first story, but nor is it my last. Also, this is my first time showing one of my pieces of work on writing story's on the internet, so of course I'd appreciate comments. Well, here's the story:
Chapter 1
Shivering, and fearful, sat a lone figure inside a huge building with a large cavern. She had no idea where she was. She knew how she had gotten there though. Her people possessed a special ability to travel through dimensions. They all would learn how to do it when they were a hundred years old though. The lone figure was only fifteen though. She had much training though, ever since she joined the warriors village, mostly in getting stronger first, not learning how to fight better or yet to learn elegance. Unfortunately though, even getting stronger didn't feel like it was enough to help her out. Considering that she didn't know where she was or how much her strength alone would help her out.
"Amber, get it together, or else you won't figure out how to get back." She whispered to herself over and over. Because she had gotten there by accident and wasn't trained yet to actually traverse dimensions or used to actual fighting, she was feeling to much unease to actually rest and get a grip on herself. After all, if she didn't figure out how to go back soon, then it'd be a whole year before her people would come to fetch her. In human years, unfortunately it'd take ten years.
Amber looked at a puddle of strange smelling water and started at her reflection. A dog ear and a cat ear was planted backwards in fear, her brown eye and orange eyes usual cat slits were wide enough to look circular, and her brown and black stripes against her orange fur were puffed out, giving her a comical appearance, despite almost fully grown. The diamond on her choker, which represented her emotions, was shaped to look like a tear drop, which showed her true emotions. Her long hair made a sort of loose curtain around her head though, since her entire body had that of a humans, and was coated a with slightly puffed up fur coat. The brown end of her tail twitched nervously as Amber's face was disconcerted by drops of the water like substance dropping into the pool.
The only sound in the cavern was her breathing and the dropping of water. That's when, Amber heard a door opening. Unsure of whether to investigate or not, curiosity won out and Amber could be seen walking to the edge of the shadows to see the who or it. Seeing a green colored person walking out, Amber blinked in surprise at the strange robotic-like looks on it and the flesh covering some of the machines parts. Curious as to whether it is alive or not, due to both a flesh and machine smell coming from it, Amber stayed in the shadows quietly watching until several more mechanical looking beings came in.
Also, I'm still new to writing stories, so any sort of criticisms you have, don't be scared to show it. I'm always looking forward to getting better. ^^ And who get's better unless they have criticism? Also, I plan to update around 1 to 2 weeks on average. At least if I have the next chapters written.