Hi anyone that is reading! This is my first story and I have been hesitating to start it. I am going to start off with the first chapter, and if you guys like it i will carry on. Please let me know how my writing is - I accept constrictive criticism :) Before i commence chapter one, I would just like to thank in advance anyone who takes the time to read this or reviews. Here goes nothing :)
Chapter 1
Tris POV
His words stabbed me like a blunt knife.
'Why are you doing this Tobias? You loved me, you said you loved me!' I whisper through my violent sobs and hot, sticky tears cascading down my red cheeks. He doesn't respond, only sits there silent, no emotion on his face. I stand. He looks like the person he used to be.
Four.
I thought I changed him, I thought that we were going great, perfect even. I thought he loved me. I guess I was wrong about a lot of things.
I barge past him to grab my bag off the sofa. He is still and silent, his dreamy blue eyes fixated on this point on the wall. I can't quite tell what he is looking at, but it's late and we both have school tomorrow. No – stop Tris, he just broke up with you, be angry with him I say to myself as I walk over to where my coat is. I steal a glance one last time and he hasn't moved. He is still staring, his being paralyzed. I wipe away my tears as more start to fall and slam the door.
There you go guys! First chapter :) If you like it please tell me and I will continue, I have some twists planned ;) Anyway I hope you enjoyed and thanks again for reading. Even if you didn't like it, I still appreciate you taking the time to read my story. :) Fran x
