This is merely a preview during the first chapter. Tell me what you think, please avoid the grammar mistakes, I need an honest opinion on weather or not I should continue this.
The presence was silent; an eerie cascading warmth tingled upon her dampened skin. Her breathing was heavy; moist as her mentality drifted into the solitude of darkness. Her mind was a blend of nothing; she felt nothing, but only a shiver that pierced upon her untamed figure. She gazed into his flamboyant tawny eyes as his smile teased her.
His fingers ascended down her supple pallid body as her breathing enlightened, and her thoughts spiraled in intimacy. "Zuko, I don't know if we should do this." She breathed as his touched continued towards its destination. He slowly pulled his hand away, staring into her tedious complicated gaze. He felt a peculiar perplexity intensify as her look tumbled away.
"But why Mai…? I thought this is what you wanted." He whispered as his hands stroked upon her glacial skin. "It is Zuko… But, I'm afraid. I don't know why, but I am… I don't understand it myself, but until I do… I just can't." Apprehension filled her vague eyes as she glanced away from the stare of the puzzled prince.
The breathing fell short as the baffled prince grasped upon the bed sheets of the hollow divan that rested below the two. "I don't understand it Mai…! What can I do to make you happy! Everything I attempt is never enough… I can't even get one damn smile to appear on your face… It's like you don't trust me, or don't want me around anymore. From the day I returned to this god forsaken place all I wanted was to find trust in someone, I lost that of my uncle's… I thought you were the one… I guess I was wrong… I should have known even when we were children nothing ever made you happy, and still to this day not one damn thing changed. Not you, my twisted minded sister, or the intentions of my father. Nothing has and never will change… I give up Mai… I really do."
Her eyes drenched in tears as the prince swiftly sauntered from view and away to the corridors within the palace. Her heart raced as she didn't know if that was the conclusion of it all. Mai gazed upon her ceiling as her thoughts knotted in complex tangles of thoughts and confusion. 'Why doesn't anyone understand me…?' It was a question she numerously asked herself ever since her quiet and unsocial childhood years, but yet it was never answered.
-Dear Diary.
My heart bleeds just for Zuko, but he'll never understand that… It's my fault actually, if I could just tell him the truth, it would all be better, but I can't. If he knew, he'd probably despise me, but then again they may understand me better. I'm so confused, my mind dwindles in thoughts that I can't explain. I wish for an answer, but it hasn't yet come true. I wish I knew… Maybe I could make this better. -
