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RPG World

"My name is Tash.I love to play RPG's after school,during the week,mostly during my free time.My favorite RPG in the world is The World.The world has existed since my grandfather played and my father Shugo.Many mysteries have revolved around the world. Twice,people have had their minds destroyed while playnig this game,but the infamouse .hackers have always help."

"Tash?"My little cousin woke me from my daydream.her name is Sammy and she is a short blonde girl and usually very energetic. She's staying with us during the Summer."Me and your daddy are going to the store.Are you gonna come with us?"

I looked at the computer screen with the glasses sitting on top."I'm staying here.I may play The World later."She stared at me blankly."What's that?"I didn't enjoy talking about it because I had only started two weeks ago and was still considerd a newbie."Um...the world is an online game.And you make your own character.You kinda talk to other people and fight monsters to level up and um..."I couldn't think of anymore.

"Can I play?"she asked."Sure." I said.I turned on the computer and showed her a whole new World.

How was it so far?