Hello first time writer here. This is just the prologue for now, if I get a good review I shall proceed to put in the first chapter!
Any constructive critisism would be very nice as well
-The Crayon of Benevolence
--PROLOGUE--
--Victoria--
In a strange land filled with an equally strange aura, a chain of dark events were unfolding. In a small clearing of a leafy forest two men in casual clothing were in deep conversation. A short distance away another dark character hid in shadows of the trees in perfect silence listening intently to their whispered conversation. The two men hastily finished their conversation and teleported away leaving the hidden person behind.
"Oh shit, Julius the situation is worse than I thought." she spoke quickly into her wrist, " They have started the ceremony much earlier then we believed and it has almost reached the final stage. However I did happen to overhear their next meeting place..." At this particular moment she felt a cold presence and turned quickly to observe. It happened to be one of the two men who she was eavesdropping on.
"This is an interesting find now isn't it?" he spoke sweetly but had a deadly edge to his voice, "Little children should not meddle in affairs that are not theirs." She kept a calm face and didn't show any sign of fear on her face. "Hmm... don't feel like talking right now? Fair enough." He said quietly to the spy. Smoothly slipping into a battle position he calmly awaited her next move.
"Suzy! Suzy!" a small voice buzzed from her watch, "You are not to stay and fight. That man is a user of forbidden and illegal magicks. Evacuate now. This is an order." Suzy began to make her move and slipped into her battle stance with a retreat.
"Suzy was it? Wouldn't you and Julius just love to know my name?" he chuckled to himself, "Shame I'm not planning to tell you anytime soon... Now freeze." With those last words Suzy stood completely still.
"Bastard, what do you plan on doing with me?" Suzy spat the words harshly at his face.
The mysterious stranger recoiled with mock innocence on his face. "Such hatred my dear, I'm sure we can work something out between us..." He held Suzy's face close to his. Suzy in the meantime was still glaring at him. The stranger suddenly changed moods and spoke "Julius. Mark my words. Give. Up. I'm surprised at you though, such... determination. All you are doing by chasing after me is losing men... or in this case, women. Now don't even think about trying to use my voice or the hidden camera she has to track me down. You should know perfectly well I can change my appearance and voice as easily as I can breathe. Farewell Julius, me and Suzy have something to do now. Try to keep my words in mind." he calmly spoke and promptly disabled the microphone function in Suzy's watch, "Now miss Suzy. I'm afraid I cannot have you telling him anything else... like our next meeting place for example. So I'm afraid I'll have to leave you here. Don't even try trash talking me, that freeze spell should have disabled your voice as well as your movement by now..." The stranger smirked at Suzy's crestfallen face when she realized he was right and drew a few signs in the air with a practiced hand. Powerful dark lighting coursed through Suzy's body while she was simultaneously released from the freeze spell earlier cast. With her voice finally working she screamed curses at the stranger who coldly watches her. "Humph. Lets turn it up a notch then." he impatiently spoke and drew more complicated signs into the air. The signs became red and faded away while Suzy could feel her life force fading with it.
"Julius... I'm sorry... I'm... so... sorry..." She whispered as her body fell to the ground in a lifeless bundle.
The stranger finally satisfied teleported away again leaving Suzy in the clearing and a few words ringing in the air, "Pathetic Julius... Pathetic. "
--Orbis--
"Dammit. Dammit. Dammit." Cried a man in odd white robes to a blank screen, "That's another one... Dammit Suzy I... argh!" Another intelligent looking woman interrupted,
"Julius, don't be too harsh on yourself... she knew the risks. We all do. And Suzy would have much rather died for this mission then of old age, she has told you that many times." She looked at Julius sternly, her gaze demanding him to pull himself together.
"Thank you Jenn"
"It's my job Julius. What should we do now? We can't just quit and let Suzy's sacrifice be in vain can we"
"...We both know Suzy would kill us if we just let him be. Bring in the outsiders." Julius' normally obedient assistant paused and just blinked at him.
"Did you hear me Jenn"
"Uh. Yes I did. But uhm... these outsiders have not been trained nor introduced nor do we know if we can trust their judgment and loyalty. The outsiders were only a suggestion from the council and and it's sti-"
"Jennifer Hawkins. I told you to bring them in" Julius interjected emotionlessly.
Jenn promptly strode off to a machine and inputted a few commands. Many thoughts ran through her mind as she did this; Julius doesn't usually get as cold as this, is Julius about to jeopardize the whole mission or is he just desperate?, will the outsiders actually have a chance or will they be lost like Suzy and the others?. Finishing her chore she turned around and saw Julius looking at her remorsefully.
"Look," he said quietly, "I shouldn't have gotten mad at you like that. You are one of the most important members in this project and the one who trusts me most. But we do need to bring in the outsiders trained or not. They are the only ones who stand even a small chance of survival and success. Suzy said it was almost at the final stage, the earlier we bring them in, the better the chance they stand. Now all we can do is wait till they arrive."
That's all for now! Like I said, a review would be nice and first chapter will come if someone likes it so far.
-The Crayon of Benevolence