Ed Edd n Eddy The Dark Bloody Report Revised
By Matfix
Notice
This is a retold version of the Ed Edd n Eddy Elfen Lied Crossover The Dark Bloody Report. Sinced the first version was horribly written with too many mistakes I've deicided to start the story over hoping for better reviews than the last one got. For all the fanfiction authors who didn't like the first version and complained about the writing I'm going to listen and rewrite this story. Please help me as much as you all can to make this story better because it's very very important that this story has as few mistakes as possible note I will not change how the story will end or lucy's death I might change the monster that is sealed inside Double Dee. I won't take out Nazz's speach because that's important for the aftermath of Lucy's death however I will make spelling corrections rework some of the chapters and be specific of where each chapter takes place such as the nightmare chapter. Also this story might be a little longer than the original version. Anyway here's the rewritten version of Chapter 1 Enjoy.
Note I don't own Ed Edd n Eddy of Elfen Lied
Chapter 1 Lucy's Escape
The story begins on an Island across the coast of the Pacific in a top secert lab where the scientists are studing the Diclonius mutated humans with two horns and a sixth sense.
"Okay tell me again why we have stay in this room with that diclonius?" asked a guard
"To make sure she doesn't try anything funny." said another guard
"She's lock up tight, what can she do?" asked a guard
Suddenly the guard's arm was sliced off.
"Ahh my arm!" screamed a guard
"Holy shit." said another guard
Suddenly the keys levatated in the air opening the lock to her cage then she killed the guards and headed out the door.
"Kurama Lucy's escaping." said a scientist
"Guards stop her we can't let her escape." said Kurama
So the guards headed off to the hallways hoping to stop Lucy.
"Alright her vectors has a 2 meter radius; if we can stay at least that far from her, we'll be safe." said a guard
"But didn't he also say, that she can levate objects as well?" asked another guard
Suddenly a pen that the guard had on him levatated and stabbed him in the eye.
"Damn it fire." ordered a guard
The guards began firing but had no effect Lucy then used her vectors to kill the guards while making her way to the exit.
"Shit get a sniper up there hurry." order the General
"On it." said Kurama
So Kurama and a sniper went up to the sniper post and waited for Lucy.
"Are you sure that rifle will stop her?" asked Kurama
"This is an 50-caliber anitank rifle, as storng as her vectors are; there's no way she can defect this bullet." said the sniper
A few minutes later Lucy came out the door and the sniper was aiming for her.
"Got her locked." said the sniper
"Fire!" shouted Kurama
So the sniper fired and hit the helmet on Lucy's head causing it to break and Lucy fell into the ocean.
"Did that do it?" asked the sniper
"No it didn't, it only destoryed the helmet, and wounded her slightly." said Kurama
"Damn it." said the sniper
"We'll find her somehow, we have to." said Kurama
End of Chapter
Author's Note: This first chapter is a little more in line with the beginning of Elfen Lied compare this chapter and the one from the first version of the story to see the difference. Note the charaters are still gonna be the same from the first story. Although some chapters are gonna have so changes.
P.S Eric Wong I've decided that I might put in those other characters you mentioned in your review of the previous version of the story only one problem though I have no idea what kind of roles would these characters play in this story maybe you can tell me how should these other characters be used in this story once I put them in the story will be almost competely different from the first one. Don't get me wrong I like your ideas and I think this redux of the story should be like the manga considering that the manga had better reviews then the anime. Although it's been awhile since I read the manga so my knowledge of the manga is a little weak. I'll make sure to reread the manga when I get the time to.
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