this is my first story so comments would be welcome.
takes place in the years after naruto becomes hokage and a new clan is created
It all started the night that the fourteen-tailed demon attacked the hidden leaf village and almost destroyed the demon tamer clan and the leader of the clan sealed that demon in his own son. But now lets get back to the present.
I rolled over trying to get what sleep I could, but all the noise coming from the kitchen. Kate yelled at me "Hey sky get up your going to be late for the graduation!" I rolled out of bed got dressed and met up with Kate and we started going to the Hokage building.
We where ten minuets from the Hokage building, so I thought I would start up a conversation "So how has your family?" her response was interesting "They left the village a week a go and made me head of the family. So you want to move in with me?" I frantically looked away and nervously answered "I like you but where just friends and that would be weird…" she laughed at me and play fully shoved me then ran off I followed her down a ally.
I finely found her but she was being attacked by some sound ninja "We will let you live if you get the Hokage's scroll for us!" I yelled at them and ran kunai in hand "Let her go or ells!" they threw a hand full of kunai an I blocked them with no trouble but I soon was cot off guard and ended up pressed to the floor with a kunai to my throat he told me to say my prayers and slit my throat.
A poof of smoke came from my clone and Kate disappeared and landed be hind me on top of ichiraku's. I jumped at him and a black Rasen-Shuriken formed in my hand with out me knowing and I was about to complete my attack when every thing went black around me...
so how was it? i'm open to ideas.
also sky my OC has black chakura and the demon is in side him.