Example of Mary Sue or Gary Stu

This is a story I made for a course that I might be teaching at school...a fanfiction course! yay! Well, here it is :) It's supposed to be a short example of a Mary-sue...any comments, critisism, or praise?

Disclaimer: *throws hands up in the air* Not mine! Anything recognizable is J.K. Rowlings! No sueing please! (See what I did there ;) )

Anyway, I'm supposed to be working on even more homework, but here's the little one-shot...

Mary Sue

Harry was in trouble. Again, but this time he was in big trouble. Voldemort had somehow been able to catch him while he had been fumbling for his glasses. Surprising, right?

"Hey! That's not fair! You can't just capture me while I'm looking for my glasses! It's not my fault that they fell off while trying to defeat you!" Harry said as he struggled against the rope tying him to the ceiling of the Great Hall. The final battle had started, and it looked as if it were about to end, but not in a good way.

"Since when was I one to follow the rules?" retorted Voldemort, while twirling Harry's wand in his hand.

Everyone else in the vicinity was just staring at their dangling hero, at a loss of what to do. Harry groaned in frustration.

Suddenly, a girl stepped out of the crowd.

"I'll defeat you!" she screamed while pointing her wand a Voldemort, "I'm Harriett Lily Rose Potter! Your", she pointed to Harry, "long lost sister!"

Harry's mouth was open in shock.

"What the, how, why?" he spluttered, "What do you mean 'long lost sister'? I'm an only child. Duh."

Harriett flipped her knee-length auburn hair over her shoulder, "Well too bad. I am your sister. Deal with it."

Needless to say, Harry thought his sister was very cool.

Harriett turned to face Voldemort with her blazing blue eyes, but was faced with a nose less man cowering behind an innocent bystander.

"Really? Well then, I can play that game too." She then walked up to Voldemort and pushed Seamus Finnigan aside. Harriett then pointed her wand in Voldemort's face.

"Surrender." She said calmly.

Voldemort did an awkward bowing motion; his face was touching the floor, and said, "I'm sorry Harriett! I can't go against your power and talent! Kill me now!"

Her face slid into an easy grin that most started to stare at.

"Okay, Moldywarts. I'll kill you." She then bent down and gave him a light peck on the cheek.

Voldemort had a heart attack, and died.

The Hall erupted into cheers of, "Harr-ie-ett!" and the crowd started to carry her on their shoulders as they exited on their way outside, leaving Harry hanging from the ceiling; trying to figure out what the heck just happened and how the first seventeen years of his life could've been spared had this event happened sooner.

~finis~

By: IFlipForHarryPotter

***Mary Sue and Gary Stu stories can't really be terrible, as long as you include a character that's almost perfect with no flaws, then it's a Mary Sue or Gary Stu story!