This is my first story and I hope you all enjoy it. I respect any criticism that I receive, and it only makes me a better writer. So go right ahead, and give me your best shot. This is an edited version of the original, as I fixed some grammatical errors.
Daniel's POV
"I am through with school! Why am I always the one to get picked on!" It had been another rough day for Daniel Dragonfang. He always ended up on the receiving end of practical jokes, and smart remarks about his last name. No matter who he told about it, or what he tried to do, he just couldn't stop the bullying. "Why can't I just go to another world, where life would be more interesting than tests and bullies!"
as he walked home he suddenly felt like he had fire being blown all over him, yet he felt no pain.
"Your wish will be granted." "Who said that? Oh, I get it it's just another cruel joke."
He looked around, but could not find the source of the voice. He shrugged and continued walking towards his house. He pulled out his keys and opened the door. "I'm home!" no reply. "Hello?" still no reply. He walked towards the center of the kitchen and saw a note from his mom.
"Your father and I are going out to eat, so it will just be your brother and you at home." Next to it was another note from his brother. "You lucked out today. I'm going out with some friends tonight to go see a movie" He sighed with relief as he walked towards the fridge. his older brother was always a pain in the butt to him, and seemed to just want to annoy him, as if he could make a living off of it. Harsh. He grabbed a burger and some chips from the fridge and walked up to his room. He set the plate down and headed off to the bathroom. He took a shower and changed into his favorite jeans, black t-shirt and blue jacket with hood. Then he headed back up to his room. He sat down at his desk, and opened his laptop. As usual he pulled up a forum on Spyro, his favorite video game character. Unlike most middle schoolers at his school, who spent their time playing sports or the brand-new games, Daniel prefered the company of dragons, rather than of people. His room was covered with all sorts of dragons: dragon posters, dragon figurines, dragon bed sheets, and every other dragon room accessory possible. He spent every spare moment reading the Spyro forums, and Wikis. He scrolled through page after page, late into the night, before he knew it his eyelids were drooping, and his head was sagging. He struggled to stay awake. His head finally fell forward, but never hit the desk.
So, how was the first chapter? Sorry if the chapter was a little short, but I wanted to get him into the dragon realms as soon as possible. Give me any suggestions and tell me if you want the chapters to be longer, or shorter like this one.