So. Hey there guys. First ever story posted on the internet...Yaaaayyyyy... Anyway, tell me what you think. If its liked I can turn it into a series, if not Ill tie it in a burlap sack and throw it into the river. Reviews of all kinds are welcome, from grammar to writing style. Um, here ya go.
"Goodby Finn.." Those two words seemed to echo throughout the goblin city. Drowning out the cries for help and the screams of pain, they bounced back at him over and over again. He reached up to feel the fresh burn on his cheek, wincing lightly as he touched the sensitive flesh. It hurt, but strangely not near as bad as the pain in his chest. It didn't sting or burn, it wasn't a pinch or sharp spike, it just hurt. A throb of agony with every heartbeat.
Finn looked toward the horizon, and watched as the Flame princess's burning trail slowly diminished. He watched as she kept moving further and further away from him. No doubt heading towards the fire kingdom, back to her solitary prison in the lamp. Oh how he wanted to stop her again, to tell her to stay with him. But she was right, they were opposites in every way. She was royalty, he was just a hero, she was raised among nobles, he was raised by dogs, she was living flame, and he was just a human. The last human.
The last… Was he destined to be alone? Wasn't it enough to be the only known human in Ooo? Would he have to live the rest of his life without the comfort of someone beside him? That's just not fair. He fights for justice and good, he throws himself at danger to protect everyone else. So why is he the..
"FIIIIIIIIIIINN!" A large yellow dog climbed up beside him, knocking him out of his soul searchy mood.
"Finn, oh my glob man, everyone's dead man! They're all burned! There's barbecued bods everywhere." Jake yelled wide eyed.
"WHAT?" Finn was on the verge of losing it. Not only did the girl he liked reject him, he couldn't save anyone!
" Nah, I'm just kidding. I saved them, everyone's fine see?" A crowd of goblins waved from behind him. And a few gave him the thumbs up. A flood of relief passed through him, followed by a flash of annoyance. But before he could say anything Jake spoke up.
"So how'd everything go with flame princess?" asked Jake.
"She hugged me then left."
"Whoa, how did it feel?"
"It hurt." More than you'll ever know..
"C'mon man, lets head home." The yellow dog stretched his hand onto Finn's shoulder.
"Yeah.. Let's go."
The young human stared at the ceiling, his face contorted in concentration. It's as if the ceiling knew the answer to every problem he had but was too much of a butt to tell him… Nah, it was just a ceiling. Gentle snores wafted through the air along with the occasional grunt or whispered word from Jake. He turned on his side, staring out of his sleeping bag and through the battered window. It was no use, he just couldn't sleep. Not with her on his mind.
"Man, this bites." He got up and fumbled around in the dark a bit. A red flash cut through the darkness as he lit a match for his candle. Finn didn't have to go to the bathroom, he wasn't hungry, and he certainly didn't feel like going outside. So why did he need the light? He realized, he just wanted to see the flame. It danced and shuddered on its wick, casting blinking shadows against the floor and walls.
"Oh glob, Im turning into a pyro." He whispered to himself. Imagine that, the great hero of Ooo likes to start fires and fell in love with a princess made of flames. Finn stared into the orange glow, his eyebrows furrowed in thought… A pyro... Wheels started to grind and turn in the youths head, bouncing in and out of comprehensible sentences. And then it hit him, a bolt of an idea so strong he sat straight up in his sleeping bag.
"Why defy nature…. When I can become part of it?" he whispered into the air. "JAAAAAAAAAAAAAKE!"
The golden canine yelled as he was blasted awake by Finn's insane call. He flipped out of his drawer and landed on his face with an oomph. Quickly recovering he took a guarded position while scanning the room.
"WHAT, WHO WHERE? Finn, what is it man!"
"I know how I can be with flame princess!" Finn yelled excitedly, he jumped out of his sleeping bag and started dancing around the room.
Jake just looked at him with a tired expression before facepalming. "Couldn't you wait till morning to say it? You scared the blubber out of me!"
"Nah dude I can't, it's just to rad of an idea to wait!" he continued to bounce around the room, oblivious to the fatigued dog's stares.
"Alright, fine. I'm awake now so I might as well hear it." Jake made one of his hands into a lasso and threw it at Finn, trapping the bouncing boy and stopping his bouncy rampage of bouncing. With a tug he tossed him back on the bed, while he sat down next to him.
"Man I don't know where you get all that energy from but you need to chill out homy. What's the plan that's got you all excited?"
Finn gave him the biggest grin his human features could achieve.
"Im going to make myself a fire elemental!"
Jake just stared at him, no emotion visible on his canine features.
"Give me a minute bro." He turned and stretched down the stairs heading for the kitchen, more precisely, the coffee maker. After adding the beans and water he turned the home brewery on and studied his nails as it gurgled along. Several minutes later a small ding signaled the coffee's completion. Mug of said steaming beverage in hand he headed back upstairs and returned to his adopted brothers side. Finn was still smiling giddily as he stared into the distance. Jake took a large gulp, turned his head, and proceeded to spew the dark liquid with a delayed shock reaction…. right into Finn's still smiling face. Despite the searing temperature, the pleasing aroma and the 75 percent dog slobber composition of the liquid, Finn kept on smiling.
"I know dude." He said as the coffee ran down his features. "I'm a genius."