I am new to writing fanfictions and have just started this story. Please tell me what you think about it.

Disclaimer: I do not own Mew Mew Power. (I do however own at least 4 characters in this fanfic since I created them with my imagination.)

The Pro log:

The story begins with a happily married couple standing on a balcony looking up at the starry night sky. The woman was pregnant with triplets! She and her husband both knew that they were having girls. The couple was of royal blood. The man was 9' 10" tall. He had dark blue hair and chocolate brown eyes. His name was Adam Hansen. He was a very kindhearted and considerate man. He was selfless and would do anything to protect his family.

The woman was 7' 6" tall. She had cherry red hair and chocolate brown eyes. She was a very caring woman and in order to protect her family she would put herself in danger. Susan was a very intelligent woman, but she was a little impatient. Her name was Susan Aki Hansen, and she was a dritemon.

A dritemon is a creature that is part angel and part demon. Her husband Adam was a fraigon, which is a creature that's half fairy and half dragon. King Adam only told the royal adviser that his wife was pregnant, did not tell him the number of children she was going to have! The royal advisors name was Frank, he always seemed to disappear after receiving news from the king.

The king and the servants didn't know why that was, but the queen had a very bad feeling about Frank, and didn't trust him at all. So she didn't want her husband to tell the adviser how many babies she was having. The happy couple turned around and started to head back inside of their castle, and headed to the baby room. Inside of the baby room were different cribs.

When Susan and Adam had entered the baby room Susan started to feel immense pain, that was coming from her abdomen After a minute she heard a splash. Realizing what was happening she looked at her husband, and said, "Honey, it seems that my water broke. We need to go to the hospital now!" Adam called for an ambulance, and told them what had happened!

Adam rushed around the room getting everything that they needed to bring with them! Once he was done he brought his wife outside to wait for the ambulance to arrive. It took the ambulance fifteen minutes to arrive, and five minutes to get the queen onto the stretcher. But it took them almost no time to arrive at the hospital. Then when they had arrived they were brought to the delivery section of the hospital. They were brought to a room were the queen put on a hospital gown.

The queen was put on the hospital bed when the doctor came in to the room. He walked over to the queen and found that she was ready to give birth. So the Doctor told her to push. After ten minutes of pushing she was told to stop and catch her breath. Then after a while she finished catching her breath she was told to start pushing again. This cycle went on for at least two hours before a cry was heard. The queen saw her firstborn baby being handed over to a male nurse. The male nurse left the room with her oldest baby to get the blood on her cleaned off.

The queen saw the male nurse return but not with her baby, and was told that her baby had died due to being born three months early. She had a feeling that the nurse was not telling her the truth, but before she could say anything the doctor said, "Your second child is ready to be born. You need to get ready to push." Then after five minutes the queens second daughter was born. Before the male nurse could take the second child another nurse came in and confirmed the queens earlier suspicions of the male nurse. The second nurse that had arrived was a female with black chin length hair and black eyes. After informing the people in the room that the male nurse had been seen giving the queens firstborn daughter to some strange looking men the king called for his guards to arrest the male nurse! (A/N I forgot to mention that the royal guards were following the ambulance in a black limousine!)

The royal guards came into the room and did as they had been ordered. The king then ordered two of the guards to search everywhere for the missing princess. After a while the nurse was asked to help out with the second, and third child. The female nurse agreed and left with the queens second daughter to clean her up. Then after two minutes the female nurse arrived with the queens second daughter swaddled in a pink blanket. She handed the baby to another female nurse, and then returned to the doctors side to help the queen give birth to her next child.

The queen had already started pushing again while the female nurse had cleaned her second daughter up, and when the nurse returned the queen was told to take a break to catch her breath. The queen only took one minute to catch her breath. After twenty seconds the doctor told her to push again since her third child was ready to greet the world. After one minute and forty seconds the queen heard the cry of her third and last child as she was welcomed to the world. As soon as her third daughter was born she was handed to the female nurse to be cleaned, given a diaper, and swaddled inside of a blanket that was just like her sister.

Five minutes later the nurse reappeared with the third daughter, and the queen had finished with the afterbirth. Before the nurse with black hair returned holding the youngest daughter of the king and queen the royal guards arrived with grave news. Sir Francis said, "My apologies my king, and queen, but We have lost the kidnappers trail." Sir Francis is the head of the royal guards. He has light blue hair and dark blue eyes. Sir Francis has a son named Lance that was ten years old.

When the two female nurses handed the royal couple their two remaining daughters they asked for the names of all three daughters. When the queen almost started to cry for the loss of her oldest daughter, but then the nurse with black hair said, " Fret not I just know that your oldest daughter is alive, and that you'll find her someday." After hearing this the queen smiled and said, " Thank you." After that the queen said, " I would like to name my oldest daughter Zoey Strawberry Rose Hansen."

The nurse with black hair said, " That is a beautiful name." The other nurse was filling out the paper work and birth certificates for the three kids. Then the king and queen noticed that both of their children that weren't kidnapped had birthmarks. One of them had a visible dark red birth mark on the back of her neck, it was in the shape of a heart, and whiskers underneath. The little girl that he was holding had a birth mark that was blood-red colored in the shape of a heart, and whiskers underneath on the back of her left shoulder.

"I would like to name my daughter that has a birth mark on the back of her neck Zena Cherry Rose Hansen," declared Adam. "We should agree on what the name of the little girl with a birthmark on the back of her left shoulder should be," decided Susan. They both went over a list of girl names that started with the letter z and decided on the name Zona. Adam and Susan decided that their daughter Zona would have Raspberry Rose Hansen as her full name. They let the nurse know, and she took the children to get their footprints and hand prints done, and to give them their first bottle of animal blood. The nurses came back with the two babies, and handed them over to their parents.

After handing one of the daughters over to their mother one of the nurse's said,"We already did the hand, and foot prints of your eldest daughter before that male nurse took her away." The nurse with the black hair then looked at the father and said, "So it should be possible to find her no matter how old she gets." The nurse with the black hair then looked at Susan and said, "your daughter Zoey has a pink colored birthmark in the shape of a heart, and whiskers underneath, and it's located on the inside of her right leg." Susan said, "Well, thank you very much for telling me it might be more possible to find our daughter Zoey now," Adam added. After the nurse and doctor left, Susan fell asleep. Exhausted from the child birth, Adam decided to watch over his wife and three new family members. The nurses came back with two incubators one for each of their daughters.

That's the end of the first chapter please tell me what you think, did you think it was interesting, boring. Tell me if you think there's too much detail, or not enough detail, or if you think it's perfect. And if you catch any spelling errors please let me know I would love to hear from you about what you think of my story. This is the revised version of my story. Please tell me if you like this version better than the old version. I will attempt to update at least once a week. I almost forgot to tell you that at the beginning of this pro log it is March 14, 1997 10:30 P.M. By the time my story gets to the hospital it's March 15, 1997 12:00 A.M. :)

P.S. do you think I should make it from Zoey's point of view or keep it as it is?