Rated for language, and some fluff later on. No lemons though!
So this is my first written story. Ever – Please help me improve by giving me some advice on what points of my writing i should keep, and which I shouldn't; I'd appreciate it a lot :)
I'll be saving the A/N for the bottom of the document though. Onward! :D
"normal" = Talking
'italic' = Thinking
"Bey City east station."
A crowd of people streamed out of the train and within that crowd was a girl with unusually light-blue hair and aqua-marine coloured eyes. She was in a hurry, because it was getting dark and her dad had expected her to be home long time ago.
'I'll take the shortcut through the alleys home' she thought to herself. She ran down the back alleys and soon found herself in the maze she knew so well. Quick as a cat she ran through back alleys of East Bey City, and ended up in a backyard she couldn't recognize. There she saw a gang of boys standing in a circle, looking at something on the ground.
'Strange' she thought, 'it looks like they're doing something with it'. It wasn't until a moment later that she realised that the thing she had seen on the ground wasn't a thing – it was a boy! Without thinking, she rushed head-on into the situation, yelling whatever was on her mind at the boys; which was something in the way of "GET OFF OF HIM!".
Her sudden appearance sent a slight shock through the boys, as they began looking at each other, and that was enough time for her to get a good look at who she was actually trying to save. She looked down at him, and their eyes met for a few seconds. She found herself staring deeply into his raven-coloured orbs that hold a power she couldn't quite identify. Before she knew it, the boys had drawn their blades and were ready to take her down. She hastily set up her black blade for launch, and after a few seconds, blades were hitting the ground and taking off like rockets. The boys' 4 blades were making a beeline to her blade, and the only counter she could think of was what she did the best – fend them off with a solid defence, coated with a bit of luck on the top. The blades ganged up on her, and before she knew it, they were all around her, slamming her from every side. After what seemed like an hour to her, they began closing in for the final attack, right until another orange blade mingled with the others and began to make some room between them and the black blade.
A slightly annoyed voice cut through the noises from their beyblades.
"Four against one is hardly any fair, is it? Seems like I'll have to even things up a bit."
That being said, the orange and black blade was standing side by side to fend off the four gang members blades, but after a few minutes of blades grinding against each other, the difference in number was beginning to show. Orange and black blade alike was wobbling and almost down for the count, when suddenly the sky turned black, soon followed by a bright flash that lit the pitch-black sky for a split second. A furious growl resonated, sending shockwaves through the air and the bladers' bodies. Another flash of light came, and this time something that looked like white bundle of flames soared through the air, and once it was over the competitors' heads, it began dropping at a breakneck pace. Just before it hit the ground it changed its course slightly, and hit the wobbling black blade. At the same time her blade began glowing, a tickling sensation began to form in the back of her mind. 'Something', she thought, 'Something is trying to tell me something. But what?'
Then realising what had just happened, she looked at the boy at her side for advice; she didn't know why she did it – she simply did! Then, a faint smile appeared on the beaten boys face. When he opened his mouth, the only thing she heard before it was closed again was "Let's do this!"
The boy seemed to be summoning his last ounce of strength, and she mimicked him, thinking he probably had some sort of plan. When they both were ready, he set for the four blades in a beeline, and she was right behind him. When he had almost reached them, he suddenly laid his head back and screamed something she couldn't quite make out. 'Sophia? Why would he yell that name at a time like this?'
The next few things happened too fast for her to really grasp what happened.
His blade's bitchip began glowing, and then a light rose from it. That was strange enough, but what was even stranger was that her own blade mimicked his, and the same strange light shot up from the middle of her black blade. A joint army of animals, consisting of an overgrown fox and something that looked like a turtle – but with a spikey shell – rushed straight towards the four gang members' blades.
"Fiery Rush!" The orange blade began to glow with a weird, red-ish light and started picking up speed. When it made contact with the first blade, it instantly threw it in the air, heading for the next one, while the aqua-marine eyed blader took out one on her own. Once all four of their blades were down and somewhat trashed, the raven-haired boy made to get out of there.
"Come on, let's ditch this place."
After a while they had reached the park where the beydish were at, and they sat down on the swings.
The blunette was the first to break the silence:
"That sure was something, huh? I thought we were done for back there. What happened? And... Who are you?"
The raven-haired boy looked at her and was silent for a few moments before he started speaking.
"That was my bitbeast – and you got one too. You should've noticed the picture on your bitchip. Whatever is in that picture is your personal bitbeast. I don't know why it chose you, or how it found you, but one thing is for sure: Without the proper training, you won't be able to control and use it at all." The black-eyed blader locked eyes with the blue-eyed and continued: "And I'm Nanji. You?"
'Damn, I forgot to introduce myself! How embarrassing is that?' A little flustered at this sudden realisation, she fumbled with the words she was trying to produce. "Erm, I'm Ri.. – ehh, Marina. I'm Marina!" The last statement came out a little louder than intended, and this just made her already forming blush to deepen a bit. Nanji looked her over and couldn't help but chuckle at the sight of this seemingly goofy girl.
"Glad to make your acquaintance" was all he replied. "Maybe you should head home. I'm sure your parents are worried about you being out so late."
Marina tilted her head slightly to the side when she asked "What about you? Your parents must be worried too..." But at this Nanji just laughed and shook his head mildly. "Naah, my grandpa knows I'm alright. But yeah, he is gonna give me a lecture about discipline and the priority of the family". He rolled his eyes at the thought of the oncoming night. But the blunette kept going.
"You live alone with your grandpa? Where?"
The spikey-haired boy looked a little curious at her, but after a moment he replied. "Just outside of town – In the old house with the huge garden. Now go home, I don't want the blame for keeping you out this late!"
She couldn't help but giggle at the thought running through her head. 'He worries about my situation. How nice...'
"Okay!" was the only thing she said though. Jumping down from the swing and running a few meters before turning around and looking at him she yelled: "I'll see you around!" With that, she ran out of sight, and left the raven-haired boy to his thoughts. 'I Wonder who she was. Oh well, chance is that I won't see her again..." and with that in mind, he too turned towards the outskirts of the city.
A/N: I know its a little short... The next chappies will be longer, I promise! XD
Okay people, thats the first chapter! Please do give me some feedback and constructive pointers. Even a "Nice story, hoping to see more" will be very appreciated, since I have zero idea about how many actually reads this ^_^;
Anyway, throw me a PM, review, whatever you feel like, and tell me if you maybe would like to get a sneak peak on the upcoming chapters – at the cost of correcting some few mistakes and if there's a problem with the understand-ability – is that even a word? :S Now it is! Understandability! And also, if anyone has some ideas, feel free to tell me, and I'll see if I can incorporate them in the story! :) It needs to be said though, that I have the first 6 chapters or so roughly drawn out. Still, inputs are always nice, and it might help me think of something good! :P
I'll see if I can do chapter 2 fairly fast, so you guys can get a feeling of where I actually want this to go. The main plot is revealed in the next chapter, so stay tuned! :D
Also on a sidenote, if you guys out there want to know more about me, tell me on a review or PM and i'll add some entertainment regarding myself as a person and writer in the bottom of the A/N :) Help me by giving me some questions i can answer, and if you guys tell me to, i'll make some myself too! :)