Author's Note:
It has recently been brought to my attention that there were several problems with this story- they have been (for the most part) corrected now. And my sincere thanks to the reader who pointed them out to me!!
Here are the issues raised by the reviewer:
".there are some things I think need to be changed a little. For instance, one who has not read the fifth book, and doesn't want to know anything (contrary to any previous beliefs of my own) you might want to put warning that there are spoilers in here."
".... Another is abbreviations. DADA. It took me a moment to figure out that it was Defense Against the Dark Arts. You might want to put in what us writers call "Author's Notes" aka, AN: . That way it doesn't disrupt the story at all, and the people reading understand a little more."
".Are you going to make more of it, or is this it? I would suggest that maybe you would put a little "flashback" or memory stuff in there. Like Peter and Serah's wedding. Stuff like that. Hope to see more."
Here is my response to the review:
Hi, and thanks for your review. I am sorry about the spoiler- I totally forgot that the book had only just come out... *winces at own stupidity* I'll fix that, and thanks for pointing it out. This is definitely not "it" I have plans for Serah and Rianna. I may even totally revamp this chapter, because I'm not sure I like how it is. I needed all the information there to begin with the rest of this story, but I'm planning to insert the information in a different way- Rianna needs to find out about Serah's life in a more gradual way. You see, Serah is not the central character, though she is the "main" character- do you understand? See, the "central" character is really Remus, but you won't really see that until I've written a bit more... *grins sheepishly* I hope that clears some things up for you... Beth
Disclaimer: I do not own any of the following characters, with the sole
exception of Serah Townsend and Herold.
Rating: PG-13 (for now)
Pairings: ST(oc)/RL; ST/PP; RL/SB; JP/LE
Warnings: Slight slash in future chapters, rape/non-con in future
chapters, torture, angst, SPOILERS FOR ALL FIVE (YES, THAT'S RIGHT, 5!!) HARRY POTTER BOOKS!!
It has recently been brought to my attention that there were several problems with this story- they have been (for the most part) corrected now. And my sincere thanks to the reader who pointed them out to me!!
Here are the issues raised by the reviewer:
".there are some things I think need to be changed a little. For instance, one who has not read the fifth book, and doesn't want to know anything (contrary to any previous beliefs of my own) you might want to put warning that there are spoilers in here."
".... Another is abbreviations. DADA. It took me a moment to figure out that it was Defense Against the Dark Arts. You might want to put in what us writers call "Author's Notes" aka, AN: . That way it doesn't disrupt the story at all, and the people reading understand a little more."
".Are you going to make more of it, or is this it? I would suggest that maybe you would put a little "flashback" or memory stuff in there. Like Peter and Serah's wedding. Stuff like that. Hope to see more."
Here is my response to the review:
Hi, and thanks for your review. I am sorry about the spoiler- I totally forgot that the book had only just come out... *winces at own stupidity* I'll fix that, and thanks for pointing it out. This is definitely not "it" I have plans for Serah and Rianna. I may even totally revamp this chapter, because I'm not sure I like how it is. I needed all the information there to begin with the rest of this story, but I'm planning to insert the information in a different way- Rianna needs to find out about Serah's life in a more gradual way. You see, Serah is not the central character, though she is the "main" character- do you understand? See, the "central" character is really Remus, but you won't really see that until I've written a bit more... *grins sheepishly* I hope that clears some things up for you... Beth
Disclaimer: I do not own any of the following characters, with the sole
exception of Serah Townsend and Herold.
Rating: PG-13 (for now)
Pairings: ST(oc)/RL; ST/PP; RL/SB; JP/LE
Warnings: Slight slash in future chapters, rape/non-con in future
chapters, torture, angst, SPOILERS FOR ALL FIVE (YES, THAT'S RIGHT, 5!!) HARRY POTTER BOOKS!!