This is my first one-shot so give me some advice on how to make my next one better.
Disclaimer: I don't own harry potter!
"Guys I've got an idea-"
"Happy anniversary"!!
"Okay what was that about?"
"That Prongs was congratulation on your happy 100th idea! "
"WOW Mooney you could remember that!"
"Of course I could Padfoot!"
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"Any way …onto my idea. So maybe we could make a map of the entire school"
"Wow your first good idea"
"Shut up Padfoot"
"Yeah" Padfoot gives Wormtail a death stare.
"Hey I've got an idea for it. How about we make a password so that only we can open it!"
"Yeah and then we can make ourselves Animagi. I mean come one do you guys really think we a, bunch of third years, can make a map of the entire school then put a spell that doesn't exist on it so that only we can open it!"
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"REALLY!!!!????"
"Oh come on Padfoot that's not all were gonna do to it."
"Hu"
"Yeah I was thinking we could put a spell on it to make it so we can see where every one else is too."
"Padfoot are you okay you're not usually the one to be reasonable, that's usually me"
"Oh never mind if you think it could happen I guess it will."
"Good lets get started"…
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"A month later and we accomplished it" Mooney looked so proud of himself.
"Wow Mooney this is better than I thought it would be"
"It's perfect"
"I like it to Mooney"
That my reader is the Tail of the Marauders Map.
Please review and give me advice.
I know it's short.