11-24-2014 \/ by Breanne Nedra

if i'm worth saving
someone please save me
i'm toeing the edge
of the eighteenth story
if it takes forever
forever it will be
'cause i can't take
another eternity

franklin's betrayal
came swift and sweet
shaking the ground
beneath my feet
flames charred the walls
the ceiling fell down
i screamed their names
but their answers drowned
flash like a sun
danger brewed away
i closed my eyes
fighting the pain
my head nearly blew
i wanted to cry
my lips barely moved
but i whispered "goodbye"

that was my first eternity

consuming dark
lost at dusk
save my siblings
i knew i must
i woke up fast
my breathing hurt
in the trash
blood soaked my shirt
i looked around
but they were gone
glanced out the window
it's almost dawn
in a flash
i released a scream
someone came in
but they lost me

that was my second eternity

she didn't see
as we sneaked in
disobeyed
committed a sin
she came in
and it turned bad fast
i covered my mouth
to hold in a gasp
i had to save them
it was on me
so i crept out
for eternity three
i collapsed
but we were saved
i'm glad to see
that they forgave

that was my third eternity

i was worth saving
and someone saved me
and i hope to get cured
by the end of the story
if it takes forever
forever it will be
'cause i can't take
another eternity


NOTE: The deeper into this story you get, the less proud I am of the individual lines, but I'm very happy with the way the poem as a whole turned out. It's one of my personal favorites that I've written.

If you need or want an explanation for the lines, keep reading. Otherwise, I hope you enjoyed it. (:

The beginning is Ned (the main character, as you may have guessed) simply lamenting about how his life is basically a nightmare thanks to his migraines and begging someone, anyone, to save him. He doesn't care how long it takes. It just needs to happen ("If it takes forever, forever it will be").

The explosion occurred at the Franklin Institute ("Franklin's betrayal") and the building burned and collapsed around them. He screamed for his siblings in the beginning, but he couldn't hear their answers ("I screamed their names, but their answers drowned"). A piece of ceiling hit him on the head, causing him great pain, and he fell, slipping into unconsciousness ("My head nearly blew; I wanted to cry. My lips barely moved, but I whispered 'goodbye'").

Still unconscious, he was faintly aware of being transported to the hospital and feared the worst ("Consuming dark, lost at dusk. Save my siblings - I knew I must") He woke up in the hospital, his breathing labored. The doctors had thrown away his clothes because they were so stained they couldn't be salvaged, anyway ("In the trash, blood soaked my shirt"). His siblings were nowhere to be seen, but he hoped they were just in another room ("I looked around, but they were gone"). He had been out all night ("Glanced out the window; it's almost dawn"). He got his first headache, and screamed in agony. A nurse rushed in, but the pain was so intense he passed out, and there was nothing she could have done ("In a flash, I released a scream. Someone came in, but they lost me").

Later on, during the Clue hunt, Sinead didn't see him and Ted as they disobeyed her direct orders to stay behind when she went to the Gauntlet by sneaking into the ultralight ("She didn't see as we sneaked in, disobeyed, committed a sin"). But then Isabel came and stole Ted away ("She came in and it turned bad fast"). Ned was horrified ("I covered my mouth to hold in a gasp"), and vowed to save his siblings since they were probably in danger and surrounded by enemies ("I had to save them, it was on me"). He got a headache while in the Gauntlet ("I collapsed"), but yet neither he nor his siblings died ("But we were saved") because Amy and Dan forgave them for how they acted in the beginning of the Hunt ("I'm glad to see that they forgave").

The end is another lament about how someone did save him, though not in the way he had originally intended. Still, he hopes to be cured of his headaches one day, and continues to wait patiently, because one day someone will save him. They have to. He doesn't care how long it takes. It just needs to happen. Because he can't take another moment like those.

- Bre