Hello Faolan 211 here posting my first chapter of the first story I've put on Fanfiction. It's rather intimidating but I can handle all forms of criticism. I'm using an alias for my name and a town I used to live in so there's no need to worry.
P.S. I have asked my friend Frostbiteandsilverwind to fix my story and correct it as best he can.
As I lay there bored out of my wits my younger brother sleeps, and I'm thankful as can be for the fact that he's asleep. Don't get me wrong, I love my bro with all my heart, but we are polar opposites when it comes to personalities. He has a very hyper personality while I'm laid back and try to keep calm, even when freaking out. I have lost my cool while talking to leaders though. Sorry, how rude of me to not introduce myself. I am Rick Sanner a seventeen year old male that lives in Griffin Indiana. My interests are swords, meditation, and gaming. No I'm not a Buddhist monk, but I do like meditating to keep calm. Only a couple of things make me pissed and those are people invading my personal thoughts, a man striking a woman, and a one sided fight. "Man why is my life so boring" I said to no one in particular
Now don't think badly of me when I say I wouldn't mind dumping this life for a new one. Now I know what you're thinking, "How bad is this guy's life that he wants a new one?" That's just it; I don't have a bad life. No bullies, no bad parents, and no horrible disease. It's just so dull that I want a change from boring and normal to exciting and adventurous. I've always wanted to travel somewhere no man has gone before, like mars or even another dimension, but that probably won't happen any time soon. I might as well meditate till it's time to sleep.
Time frame one hour later
As I get up to stand I look directly into the eyes of a creature not of the human or animal variety. I think two things. One, what demon is in my presence and two, my closest blade is under my bed five feet from where I am. I jump for the blade but I never hit the ground, instead I'm floating two feet above the ground with a black aura surrounding me. I look to the demon.
"OK I'll bite what you want?" I said. Keeping calm after all meditating for an hour will make you very mellow.
The Demon smiled a toothy smile "Surprising a human not too terrified to scream and take action. Well since you asked I'll tell you. I'm here to send you to a new dimension while I take your position on the human plain."
"Interesting idea. I was just thinking about leaving this dimension" I said.
"So what's the problem?" said The Demon
"Well I have friends here that I happen to like." I said.
"I can make it so that your friends remember nothing of you and neither will your loved ones. Unless you're like the 4th most important person in their life that is" said The Demon.
"Well that won't do at all. Won't people will think my families crazy for looking for someone that doesn't exist?" I retorted back.
"Ah a man who takes the big picture and doesn't sweat little things, I like that." said The Demon sounding pleased with his pick.
"Wow I'm getting compliments from a demon, I didn't think I was that special" I said.
Not SPECIAL YOU'RE ONE OF THE MOST IMPOR… um let's just say everyone is important in their own way." said The Demon with a bead of sweat going down his head.
"Okaaaaaaaaay I'll ignore that last part. Do you plan on world domination? And please don't lie; I'm not going to tell you not to. Just to help my loved ones out when you do okay." I said looking serious.
"You have my word that when I rule this world that your loved ones will have special connections." said The Demon taking on what feels like an unnatural tone of seriousness.
"Great, now if I'm going to a new realm can you give me some things that are in the line of super powers?" I asked sounding hopeful.
The Demon just smiled even brighter, "OK, if it's in my power I'll give you what you want." he said still smiling.
Please Review. I will look at them and PM you on it unless you're a guest, then I can't but if you ask a question in a review and you're a guest I'll answer it in the next chapter at the beginning of the story. If you read the story you'll know you asked the question. I only have one review and 139 views. I don't know why no one reviews but I get sad when I look at my story and see so many have read the story and give no feed back to it. Is the story that bad? I am second guessing myself and it's causing writers block, so please end my writers block and review. Even if it's short, saying keep going, or just good chapter, or hell it can even be negative. I don't care if you write a review longer than this chapter saying how much the story sucks. At least I'll have some form of feed back.
P.S. If you read up to the forth chapter send a message stating what you would do while in Equestria. If I like it enough I might make my charcter do it. If I get enough demand for it I might do a clop scene, but that is unlikely. maybe if I get 100 people to ask for it I might do it, but no CMC.
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