My first chapter of my first fanfiction so please review!
Winter sunlight flickered over Marnie's hair as she tried to run, laughing, in the thick snow. Raven, ahead of her, turned and grinned. You'll never catch me! he said joyously, using his hands to talk.
Marnie said nothing, but pushed her way more forcefully through the snow. Raven tried to run, but she caught him and pushed him over, then ungracefully sat on his stomach.
I win! she said triumphantly, panting from the hard run and watching Raven struggle to breathe. He stuck his tongue out at her, then motioned to the river.
Come and see, he told Marnie. The water is all frozen. You can walk on it-I used to do it in Torcurra.
She clambered off him, and they walked together to the frozen river.
You can't walk on this one, Marnie told Raven. The ice is too thin. As he ignored her and began to walk towards the icy river, she poked him gently and added, You'll fall in. He grinned at her and kept going. 'Stubborn male,' she muttered, not bothering to use her hands, and reluctantly followed him.
Raven edged slowly onto the ice. It seemed to hold his weight…more confident now, he slid to the middle and stopped.
Look! he signed to Marnie, trying to use his voice as well. I told you- suddenly the ice cracked and gave way, and he plunged into the freezing water.
Marnie ploughed quickly towards the ice. She was almost there when Raven surfaced, gasping for air and looking very cold and rather sheepish. He swam to the bank as best he could with his numb limbs, and allowed Marnie to pull him out and bundle him into a thick cloak. She began to say something admonishing, but he put his hands on hers to stop her. She merely shook her head and walked him back to the wagon that was now their home, pushing him through the door firmly and shutting out the cold white fields.