Stolen Innocence Version 2.0 - The Prologue
In 2007 I first wrote the story Stolen Innocence. While it was a fun story to write, often without a proofread, I found it both lacking and disturbing. I know that I could do much better, and have wanted to rework the story using more matured standards. This is revision of that story.
I have decided to merge the story Call of the Valkyrie within this new version, seeing as I never really completed that story arc, and have lost whatever plot I wanted to write about anyway. Speaking of plots, this new version of Stolen Innocence has been modified slightly. It is similar to the original story, but defiantly not the same story. I've added a few additional characters, which also be effect added additional plot points to the story.
The main reason I've wanted to rewrite this story was to remove quite a bit of the 'tartness' (Lemon related scenery) from the story. It's distracting, and I feel it's distasteful in its presented form. This new version of Stolen Innocence will remain suitable for teenagers to read (13+), being a drama, but also I wanted to bring out more of a romantic plot device, rather than a lustful one. The main 'pairing' character has also changed quite a bit. While originally, the pairing character of the original story was defiantly not a self-insert as some think, he was, not suited for the role.
I feel pleased with this revised version of the story, and hope that you all will enjoy this adventure as well if not more than the original version. I will not be removing the original version though. I have fond memories while I was typing it out, as well, it was my first openly published story, so while flawed, it does hold a special place in my heart.
I hope with kindness that you will read and critique this work, as I truly do want to better my writing style. I will be proofreading this story as I go, however, mostly it will be a story without much of a plan, like the first version was. I've found through trial and error, that flying by the seat of my pants is a lot more fun and exhilarating than writing a planned or outlined story. I recognize one of my writing flaws is... lack of descriptive dialog, by that I mean I tend to use a lot of "he said, she replied" stuff. This is something I want to desperately fix. Feel free to point out places where I've done this so I can revise it. I shall try my best to correct that before publishing each chapter here.
At this time, I want to give thanks to all the fans of the story, as well as to Mr. Kosuki Fujishima for creating the wonderful story and characters of Ah! My Goddess, that this story is based on, for without his creative imagination, none of this story would even be possible.