Ok this is my first story and I just want some constructive criticism and feedback. So thanks and enjoy the story

Dipper's POV

"We're finally home, summers over, and schools starting tomorrow!"

Mabel looked down at me from the top bunk and said:

"Why are you always so excited for school?!"

We both laughed. Just then everything started to spin and fade into dark and I heard an unmistakable cackle and felt searing pain.

"Bill? But your dead! We defeated you! You were erased from time and space!"

Bill appeared and started cackling again but stopped for long enough to tell me:

"Erased me? Listen Pine Tree, when I possesed you I knew you would try to use the mind eraser on me so I cursed you. You and I are connected. I'm part of you. The only reason you are alive is because of me!"

"No you can't be part of me!"

"Well guess again kid, you and I share this body now. Oh and I take part of your physical form too."

"Wait, N-"

Then I woke up but I wasn't on my bed anymore, I was wearing some sort of blue gown.

Then it hit me. I was in the hospital. I couldn't see Mabel,my parents, or the doctors anywhere. I tried getting up but then I saw the machines. one was taking my heart rate while the others were doing who knows what, all I saw was my heart rate

One short small beat every minute.

It was so slow I should have been dead. No wonder no one was here, they thought I was dead

But just then I heard the doctors and my parents coming. I heard my moms sobs and her asking how this happened. When they opened the door I saw Mabel sobbing holding on to Dads arm. Then I heard a sudden gasp from the doctor as the machine taking my heart rate started the long beeeeeeeeep that it was supposed to do when people were dead. He looked at the machine then at me in amazement, and he grabbed the phone and called someone. Mabel finally looked up to see why mom stopped crying and why dad was gasping. She took one look at me gasped then ran over to me to give me a neck breaking hug. She said:

"Dipper! You're alive! What happened? Why were you out for a week?"

Then she heard the long droning beep coming from the heart rate machine and looked from me to the machine to mom and dad.

"Dipper, why aren't you dead?"

Then I felt the searing pain again, this time I could locate where it was coming from. I rubbed my eye and forehead before removing my hand as fast as I could. My birthmark, it was literally searing hot.

Just then the doctor came back in with a mirror.

"Mason Pines, we regret to in form you that for some unknown reason you were unconscious for almost and entire week.

"Wait? AN ENTIRE WEEK?! But it only felt like a minute..."

Mom came in and started to explain:

"Mabel just thought you were so sleepy you fell asleep mid-sentence. But when we came in to wake you guys up for school you wouldn't wake up. We tried every thing, and eventually called 911 to come pick you up. On Wednesday your heart rate started slowing down and the doctors said you were were about to pull the plug when you woke up."

I was shocked. Then the doctor started again.

"Mason-"

"Please call me Dipper."

"Ok, Dipper, is it ok if I perform some tests just to make sure everything is ok and we don't need to hold you any longer."

So he ran his tests, and every thing was fine until he checked my heart beat.

"Ok just one more test to go then you are free."

"Thanks!"

He started checking my heart beat and blood pressure.

"Wait, how is this possible!?"

Then he checked my pulse.

"WHAT?!"

Mabel seemed worried. So my dad stepped in.

"What is it Doc?"

"Your son doesn't have a heart beat or a pulse or any blood pressure!"

This couldn't be happening. Could it have something to do with Bill?

All I knew was that I was technically not alive.