Chpater oen prouloge (Oh, this looks promising!)

The cats gathered around a pool. They all looked into it eagerly. A dark shape appeared on the surface. A blue she cat looked up. Her eyes were bright.

"There is a prophecy!" She said. "out of the darkness, stars will come and get rid of the evil tiger and holly." (Proof that author most likely never finished the series. Plus, HollyLeaf died protecting SorrelTail (I think) from HawkFrost!)

"Its about StarKit!" A white tom said. "Shes going to save the forest," (Grammer mistake, plus, great job WhiteStorm for knowing a prophecy out of your shadow!)

He looked at a gold tom (SunStar? LionHeart? Every other golden tom there ever lived?) by BlueStar. "she has powers nobody dreamed of." Said the gold tom. "Should we tell JayFeather (No, because you shouldn't disappoint him that his daughter is a frikin Mary Sue)?" He asked. "Yes." Said BlueStar. "he needs to know." (Poor JayFeather)

She walked away from the pool to tell JayFeather about the prophcy. (JayFeather, don't go to sleep tonight...)

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Chapter to the rose of a Heroin (The rise of the chemical)

ok jazzie-kun pleas dont get mad at me cause your not in it yet. You'l apear soon dont worry. (I'm pretty sure Jazzy-kin is crying that she is in the story. Not being angry.)

StarKit wock up and sunlit was in the branches. She closed her eyes againstill tired. Butter mom wouldn't let her sleep not today. (*eating butter mom* Nom Nom, StarKit, your mother is very delicious.)

Sweetly, its time to get up" said Dawnsparkle; her eys shinning. "Today is important today." (Don't you dare tell her)

What is it Mom" said StarKit awake right away. Then the she cat rememembered what today was. (No...)

Ohmigosh its my serimony today!' she squelled excercisedly. Today was the day she was an apprentice! (Kill me now)

She flicked outside not even waiting for her Mom. But her Mom cot up to her quick. (Great, that little bastard can teleport..Also, a piece of butter can beat StarKit? StarKit, you need to stay in the nursery!)

Sweety you know the clans don't except cat slike use sometimes." She said. (Yup, Mary Sues are not permitted in the world.)

She didn't lake beig told that. Just because her Mom was a usedto be Shadowclan cat and her dad was jayFeather the medicine Cat didn"t mean she ws different! (You have purple fur and rainbow eyes; Plus your a Mary Sue, how different can you get?)

"StarPaw come here." Said FireStar from the leg. He jumped down. (Did you like that leg FireStar?)

"StarKit it s tome for you to become an apentice: he said. "Your a strong brave cat and because of that I will mentor with you." (Oh yah, SURE! HOW ABOUR YOU MAKE AN APPRENTICE A FRIKIN MENTOR AND MAKE HER OWN APPRENTICE A DOUBLE MARY SUE!)

Ever body gasped. StarKit did too. Se herd hear mother say "Wow!". (Yah, everyone is gasping that StarKit is still living)

Firehert liked her shoulder. He whispered in her ear "youll be the best their ever was StarPaw I know ti." (How was that shoulder you perverted FireStar?)

Surpised she walked away when they were done howling for her./

(You sure they weren't howling for her to kill herself?)

Then she went ofer to JayFeathern and DawnSparkle who were very prod.

"Daughetr where very happy but he have to say something said Jayfeather his chest puffed ouit. "You see there is this prophcy Starcaln gave me it said that out of the darkness, stars will come and get rid of the evil tiger and holly."

(You rarey ever tell prophecies to other medicine cats or leaders but you trust a Mary Sue? JayFeather is SO out of character along with the other characters)

StarPaw gasped. What does it mean?

("It means you mouse brain" JayFeather said annoyed.)

lol I update fast dont i. REVEIW or ill hit over the head with a frying pan! XDD jk

(Don't you dare ruin and steal Hungary's job!)

A/N: Did you guys like it? I will try to do more if I can!