This is my first story I have ever really accually written I usually just think of it in my head and leave it at that but i decided i would sit down and write one up I came up with this one right when i wrote it i didnt think of any of it ahead of time please tell me what you think if i need to do something better or what i did good
Vision of Perfection
Prologue
It was early so early the sun hadn't even risen up over the jagged edges of the Spine and wouldn't for a long wile. Nysrim a young Dragon Rider had already been fleeing the lost battle at Vroengrad on his dragon Ashund for what seemed like days but was only a few hours they had plenty more ahead of them. Ashund had been wounded on his upper right wing and could barely fly much less carry a full grown elf so it would take them more that twice the normal time to get to the coast. Those dammed Forsworn they butchered all of our friends and mentors I hate them curse them! Howled the furious green dragon. Don't think about it we need to worry about safeguarding this egg it is our most important task and we can not afford any distractions. Advised Nysrim, What do you propose we do with it we cant just hold onto it there and thirteen other riders searching for us and we are more likely than not to be found and if we keep the egg that means they find it too. Ashund muttered, Nysrim said, You think I don't know that I have been considering place after place only to find some part of it that wont work it might be stolen or lost I cant think of anywhere that would be a safe long term shroud to Galbatorix's eye.
I don't know but it would have to be some where along the coast brining it to Ellesmera would take to long and we would be seen and caught flying over a distance that long. Stated Ashund, That doesn't really help much it just lowers the number of places we can take it. Nysrim replied, Ashund enthusiastically declared, At least we have made it over land we failed to notice it we should pay attention to our surroundings we could be ambushed at any time. Just then Nysrim swore he could hear a faint crackling sound. He turned around to see a huge red mass of energy propelling towards them and yelled, Skolir nosu Fra brisngr but was too late Nysrim was knocked of his life long friend and could already feel Ashund's conciseness slipping away at a frightening rate NO ASHUND! He bellowed, But he was already gone. As the rider began to fall he could see an enormous red dragon bearing down on him with a rider upon its back holding a blood red sword over head. There was only one thing on Nysrim's mind… the egg. Galbatorix would surely have it now but no Galbatorix and the Forsworn had taken the lives of most everyone he knew he would not take the egg. Nysrim hollered, Brisngr the rider did what the elf had Hoped he countered the spell temporally blinding him with fire and smoke giving time to teleport the egg down below. Seeing as he had no idea what to do with the egg sending it to the middle of a forest seemed like the best idea and in fact it was.