My first fanfic. so I'm not really sure what I'm doing here. :\
Here's just one of the part's that I've been thinking of, so it might seem a little weird. It's going to be further on into the story. If i can ever keep up a good writing pace then I might just continue this.
The wire slung back and forth as they both fought. Kirby fought for balance on the wing of the Halberd but found it difficult due to the fact Meta Knight was practically unleashing an attack every second. The electrical wire headed straight for the both of them, but being as Meta Knight is, he dodged.
"Kirby, look out!", Tiff screamed.
As soon as she had said something the electrical wire broken off from one of the broken side panels on the Halberd, wrapped itself around Kirby's right ankle and knocked him off balance, as it electricuted him. Yelling out from the electricution he slowly rolled toward the edge of the left wing. Clouds flew past as Meta Knight steadily marched his way forward, his red eyes on Kirby. The wire attached to Kirby's foot slung Kirby with a violent force, and pulled him off the edge. The only thing keeping him from falling into the giant waters, miles below, was the wire latched around his foot. Helpless, everyone watched from the sidelines, the rails on the sides basically prevented them from doing anything. Meta Knight, looked over the edge, about to cut the wire with Galaxia, his sword, as Kirby fainted. The wire slowly uncoiled around his foot and he began to slip toward the rapid waves.
"META KNIGHT PLEASE DON'T!"
Meta Knight looked over to see Tiff trying to climb over the railing. Giving out a low, mild chuckle, he looked back toward the limp Kirby with his crimson eyes. Right then, the wire undid it's coil around Kirby's foot, sending him falling unconsious toward the sea's below.
"NO!", everyone shouted nearly at the same time. Right at that moment, Meta Knight's eyes turned their regular aureolin color. Turning to everyone shouting at him, he titled his head. Then finally noticed, and looked off the side of the wing. Without even hesitating he jumped off and dove after the falling Kirby. Souring like an eagle throughout the sky, he put his whole body into a dive position, accelerating toward his target. His wings unfolded and arched themselfs to give him more speed. Kirby was far ahead of him, he didn't think he would reach him in time. Still diving, he somehow accelerated speed and finally reached Kirby. Grabbing him he embraced him tightly, close to his chest so that he would'nt fall from his arms. Noticing how far they had fallen, the water about 5 feets under them both he started to incline the front of his bat wings. His right wing skimmed the ocean surface, but not enough to actually pull them under.
What just happened here? Have I been inthralled? Flapping his wings up toward his ship, he seemed rather dazed. He wasn't sure waht to think, he wasn't sure what even happened for Kirby to fall off the edge of the Halberd wing like that. Wait. I saw that wire, it was holding him from falling, and he slipped? I don't know. I'll have to see.
Agh.
Please don't flame, and ohhhh boy do I know that's short, yes, but it was just an example.
only to see what kind of people like my writing style. And if people like this then I'll write my REAL story. (this is indeed part of it).
R&R.