Good Evening! So, I started writing this idea I had, with lots of flat and underdeveloped characters. I know it seems very bleh, but I do have plans for this story, and hope I can make this good, since all the writers in this fandom are either good writers or have amazing ideas. I liked the idea of Gemlings, and decided to try my hand at it, slightly different than what is usually written for this concept. I started this on AO3, and decided to put it up here too, so, if you have any reviews or want to see more then feel free to do so! Here is the AO3 summary I had:
A story with many OCs, but only a few will actually be important.
Homeworld is running low on resources, that was common knowledge, but their method of trying to fix it was unconventional. since all Gems have the ability to reproduce, they use that as a way to raise their population. Any Gemling born will be tested and trained to be exactly what Homeworld wants, if they aren't, they will be used for other things. If they become what Homeworld cannot use, due to imperfections, or a mindset against what they are meant to do, Homeworld sends them out to be destroyed and abandoned in the middle of space.
The Captain of the ship Star-rise, decides against what the Homeworld Gems have done and lands her ship safely on Earth, now only needing to convince the Gems that reside there that she and the crew mean no harm, which turns out to be harder than she thought. Hopefully she finds a way to convince them that she and her crew were worth keeping around.
Does not follow after 'Reunited', Ruby and Sapphire still get married, but the Diamonds do not come for the cluster. The rating and relationships will change in the future.
I just want to see if I should continue with this general AU/idea I had or not.
So, please review and stuff for any thoughts! Constructive criticism is welcome, but not too harshly please.
Alarms blared and the lights flickered, the ship was going down. No one did anything to stabilize the space craft, they knew that this was their fate, the reason they had been sent out in the first place. They were considered too defective to be harvested, and the group of them were sent out on a ship, but the engines were rigged to malfunction and leave them stranded or crashed on a planet. The captain's face was set in a neutral line, but her mind was a frenzy of emotional thoughts, she didn't want this to happen, but it was set in stone, and they were going to die. She looked over to the small pink gem beside her, then to the others around her.
They didn't deserve the fate they faced, nor do the geodes that were sitting in their incubation room. The Amethysts didn't deserve what they were about to face, nor did the Rubies, or the Lapises, or any of the Gems. They were gemlings, something Homeworld started using as a last resort for resources, but only the 'perfect' ones were kept. The imperfect ones were shattered to be remade into new gems, and the most defective ones were sent out on 'missions' like this one. The Captain made up her mind, this fate was not going to stand with her, if they were going down, they would go down trying. Taking in an unnecessary breath, the captain stood, the skirts of her dress settling around her violet thighs. Every Gem in the control room watched as she walked to the controls, looking over their coordinates and hoping that they were near a planet that they could land on safely. Hearing a slight sigh, she turned her head, violet locks swaying with the movement as she turned to the gem that approached her. The Ruby spoke softly, her hands twisting nervously, "Captain, what are you doing?"
"I am going to try and land us safely. No more waiting for what I cannot even see." The captain spoke briskly, her voice carrying over the blare of the sirens. Turning back to the controls, she started to navigate them, turning off the sirens and lights first, then trying to keep the ship from crashing into asteroids and other space objects. They were near the rebel planet, Earth if she remembered correctly, the sight beautiful but the situation dire. Energy was draining fast, and it was needed for keeping the ship moving and the heat in the Geode's heat room on. Beside the captain other Gems were taking their place, Ivory Pearl had taken the spot next to the captain, hoping to help redirect power, and on the other side of the Captain a Ruby had taken the spot for defenses, keeping everything in check and proper to not get damaged by any flying space junk. With many struggles and slips, the team eventually managed to get the ship stabilized, and on a course for Earth, the Rebel's Planet.
It was a few hours since they started on a slow course towards the beautiful planet known as Earth, and the Captain had left to go and check on the incubating Geodes, all of them only wanted by the defective gems. Walking beside the Captain was the same small pink gem from beside the Captain's chair, everything about her aesthetic oversized, her clothing and even her hair was big for her stature. The Captain enjoyed the difference between her and the smaller gem, her own hair short and only the fringe longer to cover her eye. She gave the smaller gem a smile as they walked up to the door of the incubation room. The captain pressed in a short code, and stepped into the room, the pink gem following once more. The only other Gems in the room were a fancily dressed Ruby and a skinny Amethyst. The two turned and looked at them before going back to watching the bin of geodes in front of them.
"How are they?" A simple question that held many other questions. The Captain stepped forward, looking over the Ruby's shoulder. The ruby looked up a slightly tired voice floating up to the Captain, "They are not damaged or beginning to fade. They will be alright for the next while I think."
The Amethyst stood off to the side, letting the other two gems get a look at the small number of Geodes that were resting safely in the blanketed bin. The captain smiled and rested a small pink freckled hand on the Ruby's head. The Ruby leaned in to the hand, sighing softly. The Captain stepped back, heading towards the door with the pink gem close behind. She smiled back at the two Gems, voicing with a soft breath, "Thank you for caring for them. If anything changes, please let me know."
She was given a nod from each in response and swiftly left, the heels of her boots clicking on the metal flooring of the ship. She stepped lightly into the control room, noting that the planet looked much bigger than it had before. They were getting closer, and the Captain was hoping that their little control could withstand the landing. The Captain sat in her chair once again, the smaller gem going up to the controls instead of staying by the Captain's side. The Captain watched her interact with the other Gems, still awed by the differences between herself and the pink gem, even though they were the same Gem type. A slight tap to her arm alerted the Captain to the Gem standing next to her, one of the four Lapis Lazulis on the ship, the one with an oddly formed gem, and when the Captain turned her head, the Lapis twisted her hands together nervously. "Captain, there are many metal objects flying through the planet's atmosphere, and we are receiving odd signals from them. A lot of the signals are moving pictures, but there are a lot that are of singing. What do you propose we do?"
"Do these signals send any threatening messages? If not then patch some of the singing through." The Captain sat up straight, her lithe body posing in a regal manner. When the Lapis reported back that there were no threats against them, she had some of the singing patched through over the communication line. Every Gem paused listening to the melodic voice of the female singer. The Captain ordered that the music signals be downloaded into the main computer, and the Lapis was quick to make it happen. The Earth was closer, and they were almost in the atmosphere. The coordinates that they were headed to was a small area near the ocean. It had traces of old Gem technology, and had less humans in the area specifically. Every gem was getting ready for the rough part of having to land the ship, the descent becoming rocky and tense as they entered the atmosphere, the ship speeding up a bit. Warning signs flared up on the side walls, the ship was most likely not going to make it in one piece, but the Captain had high hopes that it would work, they would land safely on the Rebel Planet.
Everything was brought to a startling halt when they hit the sand, the ship sitting on a slight tilt in the sand, the screen letting them look out tilted to face the sky and the ocean. The door was sitting in an area where it wasn't a steep jump or a deep dig to get out. The Captain stood, and headed for the main door outside of the control room, most of her crew following. The Amethyst from the Incubation room was also there along with the Charcoal Pearl from the engine room. Turning the Captain addressed all those before her. "We did not make the usual precautions when landing on a planet, and I have decided to take the initiative to make peace with the inhabitants of this land, please do not argue it, it is the least I could do for all of you who have done so much to get us here safely."
There was a short applause and the Captain turned back to the door, noting how quiet it was, then stepped forward with many reassurances that the crew had her back. She opened the door, and took a single step out.
Like I said at the beginning reviews and polite constructive criticism welcome!