PLEASE REVIEW! I need to know if I should write something else.
NOTE: This is just a sample of what I can do.
Also, this took me awhile to write, so if I wrote something else, it might not be as detailed.
As I stared into the face of the monster, I knew my life had come to an abrupt end…
Ten minutes earlier
I was walking home from the library one cold, moonless night when I stumbled across a handsome man in a dark, narrow alleyway. His skin was as white as a sheet, with eyes as black as night. His jaw was strong and his lips were curved up in the corners, making him look like he was holding back a smile. He was dressed in black, with denim jeans, a shirt and a leather jacket that hung on him just right. He moved gracefully toward me as though he was stalking his prey. He spoke in a language I didn't understand and his voice drifted with the wind.
Suddenly his eyes turned blood red and he lunged forward at me. My instincts told me to run but I was paralyzed with fear. I felt his ice-cold skin grasp my shoulders, pulling me towards him as he stared into my eyes for the last time.
His teeth were like knives, digging into my neck. His lips were freezing on my bare skin.
Then it all became clear. Could the legends really be true? The word send a shiver down my spine as it touched my tongue.
"Vampire"
Suddenly I was spinning and everything went black. As the last drop of blood was drained out of me.
So, what did you think?