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Married To a Kagamine – Chapter One
Sunlight flooded from the stained glass windows into the church. Everyone shuffled into the vast room, while the organ played in the background. Kids in tuxedos and petite dresses ran around, chasing each other, shouting. "GIVE ME BACK MY FLOWER! I'LL HAVE TO KISS YOU IF YOU DON'T!" followed by the small boy shrieking and dropping the flower, which the girl picked up and pranced away, giggling.
"Sit down, sit down!" the cross old preacher shouted at the children. They sat obediently, but squirmed in their seats and looked out the windows at the lush green meadow outside the church. The adults sat in the first row, adorning dainty embroidered handkerchiefs. There seemed to be one woman crying the heaviest though. She had rich yellow hair and wore a large white ribbon, which emphasized her youth. Her name was Rin Kagamine. She sobbed with sorrow for her best friend, who was to be married today. They shared the same surname, but weren't related. She loved him, but never told him this. Rin was surrounded by older women, patting her on the back and giving her words of advice and encouragement.
"There there, don't cry. You'll still see him!"
"It's not that bad... there are always other fish in the sea!"
But Rin shook her head. She had to intention of getting married to anyone but Len. Len's bride was a pretty girl with flowing blue hair and had a good personality, but she didn't approve of the wedding. He was still too young to be married; he still had a good few years to be free, not being bound by the ropes of marriage and a family. But he had insisted this was for the good of their family. She remembered the exact moment.
"Len…why do you have to be married? Can't you wait?"
Len laughed. "You don't understand. You've been the best girl I've ever met, but I've never thought of you romantically. Sorry, maybe next time."
He left the room.
And so Rin sat there. The wedding was about to begin, and she tried to stop her tears and put on a happy face. Everyone was seated there now, waiting for the elegant wooden doors to swing open. And lo and behold, they did. This was the moment she had been waiting for. But was this a good decision? She could stop him… wait, too late. Lo and behold, the doors swung open to reveal….
MIKU AND KAITO!
To Be Continued…