Ok guys, I just figured out how to use this site so trust me I still love Avatar love but I want to see how this will turn out please tell me what I did wrong and if you want the to continue.
My character Korai is Ike 's crush she is one of the workers at the smash mansion she helps with training. Ike wants to have the nerve of asking for help in training to get to know her better, but will Roy steal his chance?
Ike's POV
"So Korai, how about you and me go on a walk down at the beach later?" I said. " Why not, this could be fun!" *later that day* " Oh Ike this is so beautiful!" "Not as beautiful as you." Then I leaned in and..."IKE GET UP!" Ugh my roommate Marth woke me up on the best dream I have ever had. "We are going to be late for breakfast"Marth "we are not going to be late" I said "you just want to meet Samus at the dining area." I said in a angry tone." Yeah and don't you want to see Korai, she always gets up early" He had a point so I rushed out of bed as fast as I could. About a minute later I was out.
*At the dining area*
"Oh hey Ike!" Someone said as I bit into my apple. "Hi Korai," I said. "Are you going to fight tomorrow?" She said was she sat next to me. Even though I like her she's still my friend. "Uh, I think I might be fighting in the endless brawl," I said. "Oooh, those can be tough well, good luck!" Then I heard a "C'mon Babe, let's eat outside," yelled her boyfriend Roy.
The girl I loved with one of his best friends. I was not gonna let that stop me. I somehow gained enough confidence to ask Korai to help me train. But it was a little shakey. "Umm, Hey Korai." I said. Nervous. " I was wondering if, Umm, would like to help me, Kinda sorta train?" I was so glad it was over. Then she said the unthinkable. "Umm, Yeah, Sure." Her cheeks went red. Wait, was she blushing, Blushing for me? "How about 3:00?" "That works" "Um see you later" She said yes. I cannot believe it she said yes. Then she left with Roy's arm around her.
*around 3:00*
"ROY I CANNOT BELIVE YOU!" Korai yelled quit loudly. "Come on baby, let me explain." "No I saw the truth you were with the Maid for lunch and she kissed you no you kissed her! You know what this is over." She said running away crying. Here's my chance.
I trained for a hour or so then I took a shower got a box of chocolates and headed up to her room. I heard Sobbing from inside her room. Knock,Knock,Knock. "Go away Zel, I'm Ok." "You don't sound ok" I said. "Ike!" She yelled. "I'm ok I'm not crying, um where's Zelda." She asked. I answered,"She out with Link. She will one back in about an hour. Anyways, are you sure you're ok you can tell me anything." Then she broke out in tears and sobbed into my chest,While I was whispering soothing words into her hair. "I thought he loved me!" She said between sobs muffled because of my chestThe
Then I looked into her beautiful onyx eyes, Leander in to where our lips were only centimeters away and kissed Her.
tell me if I should continue! Please review how'd I do good? Bad? Horrible?amazing?