I know that lots of you read and reviewed the original first chapter of this story and thought it was wonderful but one very helpful reviewer Forsaken Elf helped me see that this story is not headed in the direction I wanted and that it really isn't that great. I have removed the Original first chapter and am going to re-write and re-post as soon as I feel its up to par. There will be major changes but I am going to try and get it to be more like the characters are supposed to be.
Huge thanks to Forsaken Elf for helping me to see the light.