Hello, Mina! I hope you like this fic. I'm starting to like Pokemon again
so I made this fic. You may notice that I replaced this fic. I was getting
a lot of reviews about grammar errors. So I'm redoing it. And I'll proof
read it this time. ^-^ So enjoy.
Disclaimer: I don't own Pokemon Advance or any characters.
Chapter One: Awaken
Ash slowly opened his eyes. He felt soft sand under his body. The sun beamed down on him. He lifted his arm to cover his eyes from the blazing sun above. A sharp pain went throughout his body.
"Uh", he wrenched. And dropped his hand back down. The sun continued to beam down on him. Ash turned his head to get the glare from the sun out of his eyes. Turning to see a heart stopping sight.
May lie on the sand a few feet away. Half of her soaking in the bank of a river. Blood dripped out of her left arm and her right leg was bent in an unnatural way.
Ash gasped, "May!"
Bones aching he walked as fast as he could to where May lie. "May, May!" Ash cried as he gazed at her still body .He saw her chest moving up and down, indicating that she was still alive!
"What happened to you? "He whispered.
Flashback
It was late afternoon. Ash and his friends continued to travel on their journey though Hoenn. Ash looked around at the area around him. Rocks and boulders were scattered all around the ground. There was no sign of any vegetation. A mountain with many cliffs lay before him.
"Hey Max. Are you sure this is the right way?" he asked.
"Yep, just after this is a Pokemon Center. We can stay there for the night."
"How are we going to get there," he said looking at the obstacle blocking their path.
"There's a ledge on the side of the mountain we can use to get around."
The end of the ledge could not be seen. A hundred of feet below was a river. Slowly the group stepped on the ledge. All except May.
She stared down the cliff. "Are you sure this is the only way?" she choked
"Yep," said her brother.
"Come on May, "said Ash. "Don't tell me your afraid."
"Of course I'm not!" she exclaimed and took a few steps on to the ledge.
About two hours later the sun had lowered in the sky.
"It's getting late", said Brock. "How much farther is it Max."
"We should be there in 30 minutes or so," replied Max as he stopped walking.
"That's what you said an hour ago, "whined May.
"Well let's stop stalling and keep on going!" Ash said enthusiastically.
"PikaPi!" Pikachu agreed.
"Ash is right the longer we stop the longer it will take us to get to the Pokemoncenter, "Brock also agreed.
And with that they continued.
"Tired, so tired," May whined in a whisper.
"Nin, Nin, "cryed a Pokemon from above them. They looked up. A Ninjask swooped down at them, then swooped upward right before hitting them. It headed for May and started buzzing around her.
She swatted at it. "Go Away!" she cried. She began to back up, towards the ledge.
"Stop, May! Don't back up!" yelled Ash.
But before his words could reach her, she stepped off the ledge. Everyone gasped in horror. May fell back, her arm outreached. A hand wrapped around her wrist...It was Ash's hand.
Ash held the ledge with one hand and with the other May's life. Brock quickly grabbed Ash's wrist. Ash let go of the ledge so Brock could help him and May up. But Ninjask was still around and it began to attack May and Ash.
"Aahhh", they yelled.
"Pikahu thunderbolt it, Ash ordered.
"Pika", Pikachu said as electricity came from its cheeks and hit Ninjask.
"Ninjask! "It cried and flew away.
When the Pokemon was gone Brock leaned over the ledge and used every muscle in his body to try and to pull them both up.
"I can't pull both you up," Brock said grunting his teeth.
Ash's wrist began to slip from Brock's grip.
May and Ash stared in horror as Ash's wrist completely slipped.
"AAAAAIIIIII!" They screamed as they fell toward the river below. Their horrified scream echoed throughout the mountain.
"PIKAPII," Pikachu cried.
" No Ash," yelled Brock.
"Sis," Max cried. "No!"
Flashback End
"We must of landed in the river and washed up here!" Ash stated." I'm okay but...May your hurt bad."
Ash shook her arm, "May, wake up! Wake up!"
She didn't move. "Come on wake up May! "He yelled
May slowly opened her eyes and looked at him. But then felt the pain of her right leg and whined. She tried to grab her knee, but only to feel the pain in her left arm.
"Don't move," Ash ordered. May looked at him, tears in her eyes. Ash was taken back by her tears. "Don't worry, your be okay," was all he could say.
Meanwhile: "Ash, May," Brock yelled from the ledge they fell from. "Where are you."
"Sis!" Max yelled. "Sis!"
There was no answer. "They're gone," Max said.
"Don't say that! Brock yelled. Max looked at him, shocked. Making Brock soften." We'll find them."
To be continued...
So what'd you think? Was it good? If you don't like it then don't say anything at all. Okay ^__^ Now review mina! Well I don't think there was that many errors. Though I wish ABC check would realize May is a name not just a word.
Disclaimer: I don't own Pokemon Advance or any characters.
Chapter One: Awaken
Ash slowly opened his eyes. He felt soft sand under his body. The sun beamed down on him. He lifted his arm to cover his eyes from the blazing sun above. A sharp pain went throughout his body.
"Uh", he wrenched. And dropped his hand back down. The sun continued to beam down on him. Ash turned his head to get the glare from the sun out of his eyes. Turning to see a heart stopping sight.
May lie on the sand a few feet away. Half of her soaking in the bank of a river. Blood dripped out of her left arm and her right leg was bent in an unnatural way.
Ash gasped, "May!"
Bones aching he walked as fast as he could to where May lie. "May, May!" Ash cried as he gazed at her still body .He saw her chest moving up and down, indicating that she was still alive!
"What happened to you? "He whispered.
Flashback
It was late afternoon. Ash and his friends continued to travel on their journey though Hoenn. Ash looked around at the area around him. Rocks and boulders were scattered all around the ground. There was no sign of any vegetation. A mountain with many cliffs lay before him.
"Hey Max. Are you sure this is the right way?" he asked.
"Yep, just after this is a Pokemon Center. We can stay there for the night."
"How are we going to get there," he said looking at the obstacle blocking their path.
"There's a ledge on the side of the mountain we can use to get around."
The end of the ledge could not be seen. A hundred of feet below was a river. Slowly the group stepped on the ledge. All except May.
She stared down the cliff. "Are you sure this is the only way?" she choked
"Yep," said her brother.
"Come on May, "said Ash. "Don't tell me your afraid."
"Of course I'm not!" she exclaimed and took a few steps on to the ledge.
About two hours later the sun had lowered in the sky.
"It's getting late", said Brock. "How much farther is it Max."
"We should be there in 30 minutes or so," replied Max as he stopped walking.
"That's what you said an hour ago, "whined May.
"Well let's stop stalling and keep on going!" Ash said enthusiastically.
"PikaPi!" Pikachu agreed.
"Ash is right the longer we stop the longer it will take us to get to the Pokemoncenter, "Brock also agreed.
And with that they continued.
"Tired, so tired," May whined in a whisper.
"Nin, Nin, "cryed a Pokemon from above them. They looked up. A Ninjask swooped down at them, then swooped upward right before hitting them. It headed for May and started buzzing around her.
She swatted at it. "Go Away!" she cried. She began to back up, towards the ledge.
"Stop, May! Don't back up!" yelled Ash.
But before his words could reach her, she stepped off the ledge. Everyone gasped in horror. May fell back, her arm outreached. A hand wrapped around her wrist...It was Ash's hand.
Ash held the ledge with one hand and with the other May's life. Brock quickly grabbed Ash's wrist. Ash let go of the ledge so Brock could help him and May up. But Ninjask was still around and it began to attack May and Ash.
"Aahhh", they yelled.
"Pikahu thunderbolt it, Ash ordered.
"Pika", Pikachu said as electricity came from its cheeks and hit Ninjask.
"Ninjask! "It cried and flew away.
When the Pokemon was gone Brock leaned over the ledge and used every muscle in his body to try and to pull them both up.
"I can't pull both you up," Brock said grunting his teeth.
Ash's wrist began to slip from Brock's grip.
May and Ash stared in horror as Ash's wrist completely slipped.
"AAAAAIIIIII!" They screamed as they fell toward the river below. Their horrified scream echoed throughout the mountain.
"PIKAPII," Pikachu cried.
" No Ash," yelled Brock.
"Sis," Max cried. "No!"
Flashback End
"We must of landed in the river and washed up here!" Ash stated." I'm okay but...May your hurt bad."
Ash shook her arm, "May, wake up! Wake up!"
She didn't move. "Come on wake up May! "He yelled
May slowly opened her eyes and looked at him. But then felt the pain of her right leg and whined. She tried to grab her knee, but only to feel the pain in her left arm.
"Don't move," Ash ordered. May looked at him, tears in her eyes. Ash was taken back by her tears. "Don't worry, your be okay," was all he could say.
Meanwhile: "Ash, May," Brock yelled from the ledge they fell from. "Where are you."
"Sis!" Max yelled. "Sis!"
There was no answer. "They're gone," Max said.
"Don't say that! Brock yelled. Max looked at him, shocked. Making Brock soften." We'll find them."
To be continued...
So what'd you think? Was it good? If you don't like it then don't say anything at all. Okay ^__^ Now review mina! Well I don't think there was that many errors. Though I wish ABC check would realize May is a name not just a word.