Fruits basket
Chapter 1
First fanfic Please review. I promise after this chapter it will get better. P.S By the way please review! you can be really blunt, Thanks to my first reader Fox Doubtfire who also reviewed!
By: Akiko Emi-San
I laid there in my bed sad, i have to leave i can't bare to stay here anymore i'm falling so deeply in love with Yuki-Kun...B-but he doesn't love me! i started crying when a knock came on the door. "Tohru?" Yuki opened the door and poked his head in. "I heard you were leaving, i understand you were accepted to Le Courdon Bleu in Tokyo..." Yuki said with disbelief. " Y-Yes! I leave this afternoon. You can come visit me... so can Shigure, and Everyone!" I said excitedly. Yuki smiled that beautiful smile and grabbed me and pulled me in for a tight hug. *Poof* Yuki turned into his rat form but was still in my hands, he looked up to me with tear filled eyes. "Yuki-Kun you silly rat!" I giggled. I put Yuki, in his rat form, up to my lips and kissed and put him back on the floor. I turned around knowing he was going to turn into his human form. *Poof* Yuki hurridly got dressed .
"Tohru, I am excited for you though. You earned it, and that is big that you got accepted to that school." I started crying. "I'm going to miss you guys so much! It will be so different, so-so different... and I got a scholarship to go there so it was really my first choice.." I smiled wiping the tears from my eyes. "Tohru that is still good, but one question.. where are you going to live?" Yuki questioned. " Kyo-Kun is going to a nearby college so we decided to get an apartment together!" I said quickly. "Kyo?!" Yuki said angrily. I knodded. Yuki ran out the room and i heard a loud thump, and yelling.
I wanted to cut it short just to see reviews. If its good I'll continue :)
Also please tell me what i need to fix in my story. Be blunt please. :)