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Chapter one

He appeared out of nowhere. Then he knelt down and kissed me. This wasn't an ordinary kiss, it was different. It felt cold, lifeless. Then I passed out.

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I woke up and found I was in a warm, cosy bed and it was roughly noon. I tried to think back to what had happened, how I got here but nothing came to me. The more I tried to remember the more I couldn't, my whole memory had been erased. This didn't feel right I knew that, my gut instinct was telling me no screaming it at me. Then a strange man appeared in the room. "Welcome my name is Hunter, I'm your headmaster and your new name shall be Alethea." Then he left just as suddenly as he had appeared. I was confused, I have no recollection of my former life, don't know where I am and had a bad feeling about this.

During all the confusion I didn't notice the changes that had happened whilst I was unconscious. All my senses were amazingly powerful, hypersensitive. There also seemed to be an unknown force of power dwelling deep inside me just waiting for the chance to break free. What had happened? How long was I out for? Where am I? There are so many questions I need answering. Almost as if he had read my mind Hunter was back and this time he had a woman with him. She looked about twenty but her eyes held so much wisdom, centuries of it. "This is Elsa she will be your mentor, ask her anything you want to know".

So I did. "Where am I?" I sounded nervous. "You are at Ealdfrith School, it's the biggest of its kind" she seemed so friendly. "Ealdfrith, what does that mean?" If I kept this up we could be here all day. "It means old peace, this school was built centuries ago and named then, know-one knows the reason for the name" she seemed pleased I was talking. "What's happened to me?" this I really wanted an answer to. Elsa seemed all too happy to tell me, "You have gone through a process which has changed your genetic makeup, your not who you used to be and personally I wouldn't try to think about the past". Then I realised I didn't even know how old I was or what I looked like.

"How old am I?" Now Elsa looked confused, apparently I should know this. "Seventeen as of yesterday, which was the Twentieth of May" she said. Then I caught my reflection in a mirror across the room, which I could of sworn wasn't there ten seconds before. I was beautiful, I had sapphire blue eyes, brown hair which glistened in the afternoon sun and I was extremely pale which seemed to enhance all my features. I would guess I was about five foot nine inches and had the perfect figure in fact everything seemed to be perfect. Elsa could see the shock on my face "You will get used to it" that was all she said, she gave me no clue as to how anyone could be this beautiful. Then I looked at her properly and noticed she was also very pale and had the same enhanced features, but she had blonde hair which glistened even more than mine and her eyes were a shocking amber colour, I tried to think back to what Hunter looked like but all I could remember was jet black hair.

I sat back down on the bed, this was all too much to take in. Then I realised what she had said earlier. My genetic makeup had changed, so that meant I was different, not human. "What am I?" Elsa seemed reluctant to answer this. "You're a Vampire or at least you will be, everyone at Ealdfrith is". This whole situation just kept getting worse. "A vampire, how?" once again I could tell she didn't want to answer but something, or someone seemed to be making her. "Once your chosen just after you're born you are watched, then when the schools elders feel you're mature enough you're brought here, the whole process of changing takes roughly two years". I had a feeling this didn't apply to me and that I was already changed somehow. I was about to ask about this when Hunter came back.

"I see you have been finding out a little bit about your new life" there was an edge to his voice, I couldn't quite figure out. I noticed he had a dog with him, had that been there before? "Yes I have but I am still confused, why me, why have I been chosen?" there was a confidence in my voice. "Your special Alethea, you have been chosen to do something great, something none if us can do" once again he left. I guess I was just going to have to figure this one out for myself.

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